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Another headshot of Laura trying a more bohemian look. Any constructive comments are welcomed to help me improve.

Thanks,

David

Brand:Sony
Camera:Sony A350
Lens:50mm f1.4
Recording media:JPEG (digital)
Date Taken:7 Aug 2011 - 3:52 PM
Focal Length:50mm
Lens Max Aperture:f/1.4
Aperture:f/1.4
Shutter Speed:1/250sec
Exposure Comp:0.0
ISO:100
Exposure Mode:Manual
Metering Mode:Spot
Flash:Off, Did not fire
Title:Laura 6
Username:David_Lamb David_Lamb
Uploaded:14 Aug 2011 - 3:30 PM
Tags:Colour, Headshot, Laura, Portraits / people
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paulbroad
paulbroad  681 forum posts United Kingdom842 Constructive Critique Points
14 Aug 2011 - 3:43 PMConstructive Critique!This comment was flagged as constructive critique! 

Potentially a strong portrait, but under exposed about a stop I think. I see you used spot metering - what did you meter off? if it was her skin, you would under expose without adjustment of the reading. Nothing in this image equates to 18% grey, the calibration of a spot meter, so you needed something else to spot meter off, or a grey card.

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Philo
Philo e2 Member 464 forum postsPhilo vcard England83 Constructive Critique Points
14 Aug 2011 - 4:02 PMConstructive Critique!This comment was flagged as constructive critique! 

A very nice portrait indeed but, as Paul says, it is under exposed. I have adjusted exposure in my mod and applied some sharpening as I felt the eyes were a little soft.
Good use of wide aperture though I'm sure it won't be to everyone's taste.
Phil

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banehawi
banehawi Critique Team 10781 forum postsbanehawi vcard Canada2796 Constructive Critique Points
14 Aug 2011 - 5:01 PMConstructive Critique!This comment was flagged as constructive critique! 

Hi David,


I like the pose and the shot in general.

I do think the white balance is off quite a bit, and tens a lot towards a cyan/magenta cast.


Ive loaded mods with the colour balance adjusted to look where I would guess looked right, - either way it looks better better to me.

Youve also loaded the shot using the Adobe RGB colour space, - you need to convert to sRGB for the web. Viewers with non colour managed browsers may see you shot differently on the web, - as you may well do also. Explorer for example is not colour managed, while Safari 5 and Firefox are.


Ive loaded 2 mods, - both with colour adjusted; eyes brighter; eyes sharper; a slight increase in exposure on the face only and mod2 is a version with diffuse glow applied to add a soft glow.


Ive added a link to a site to check for colour management in browsers:

http://www.gballard.net/psd/go_live_page_profile/embeddedJPEGprofiles.html



Hope you find this helpful,



Regards



Willie

Last Modified By banehawi at 14 Aug 2011 - 5:02 PM

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Niknut
Niknut e2 Member 4516 forum postsNiknut vcard United Kingdom60 Constructive Critique Points
14 Aug 2011 - 7:52 PM

Cracking shot !....beautiful portrait, with a lovely strong eye contact.....I don't do portraits, but I really like this, so from me...top notch !

A) If I'm gonna be ultra picky....perhaps the image is a teensy bit 'blue', so just needs 'warming up a bit.......

B) As your shot is open to mods., I couldn't resist having a play.....so my version is in no way a criticism !, it's just my take on your lovely shot !

Regards.....Nn.

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NEWMANP
NEWMANP e2 Member 61583 forum postsNEWMANP vcard United Kingdom574 Constructive Critique Points
14 Aug 2011 - 10:19 PMConstructive Critique!This comment was flagged as constructive critique! 

think in order to gain a more arty modern feel to this nice portrait, id go mono, but i would have another look and check the original because to eally work, the eyes aught to be screaming sharp.
it could be the upload, not totally sure, because the hair is sharper than id have expected if the eyes were bang on.
otherwise lovely and i like the unusual choice of square format.
Phil

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imagemaster
15 Aug 2011 - 12:00 AMConstructive Critique!This comment was flagged as constructive critique! 

nice use of depth of field - improvement? none needed if ithe image is what you intended - a different point of view might raise questions for you to explore. This is a picture that is almost there, the biggest change I would make would be the lens, 100/150mm would reduce the distortion (big nose) a lower point of view and more dimensional lighting, perhaps a darker shade of lip gloss. try these for starters, on their own or combined, then experiment and extrapolate. get comfortable and then do something with those eyes, they are so gorgeous you could get away with almost any style of make up. the diagonal of the lady's neckline is a powerful element in the composition, shoot it in landscape format with the face to left of centre and the nose not quite so straight on. portraiture is a huge subject, practice with joy

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David_Lamb
11 Sep 2011 - 9:44 PM

Thanks so much for the helpful comments...apologies for the delay in response I've only just got back onshore.

Paulbroad - Thanks for the tip about metering - I hadn't realised I had done that so I'll have to try without the spot metering and see how the photos turn out.

Philo - Thanks for the mod. I know what you mean about the eye being a little soft - I think it's my technical ability and shallow dof, although I do struggle to get things really sharp with my camera (Sony A350) regardless what lense I use. My friend has a Nikon D90 and it seems to focus much better and provide clearer images.

Banehawi - Thanks for the mods and help regarding white balance and the link. When I get a chance to look properly I may message you with some queries if that's okay.

Niknut - Thanks for the comment and mods. I've definitely noticed an improvement in my portrait shots by using sites like this so hopefully I can keep improving and take everyone's comments onboard.

Newmanp - I haven't tried this image in mono, but I'll have a look. I think the reason I didn't do it was because I thought with her skin being pale and her hair blonde their wouldn't be much contrast in the image and it may look a bit washed out. Like I said I'll have a look and see how the image comes across. Is there something I can do to make the mono image really stand out?

Imagemaster - Thanks for the tips - I'll definitely try the different lens and lighting you suggested and I'll get Laura to read your makeup tips!

Again...apologies for the delay in response and thanks for the comments.

David

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imagemaster
12 Sep 2011 - 9:58 AM

paint her with chemicals, paint her with light (different colours) then shoot at the opportune moment. Achieve an image quality that will print to 40" x 30" and you should get an image that make men go weak at the knees a leave women feeling a tad threatened. find yourself a married woman and "try" to photograph the reason her husband fell in love with - it will be in her face somewhere. Photography is more that a collection of tech. Tech is just the foundation.











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