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Last of Lisa for now, but have some other shots from this shoot that I might post. I have two other models shots from this shoot, so will post some of those too. Happy to take critique on this one as although on the surface, it looks pretty good, it just doesn't seem to have that "wow" factor. As do a lot of my shots. Any advice will be gratefully recieved

Camera:Pentax K100D Check out PENTAXPORTAL!
Lens:18-55mm
Recording media:RAW (digital)
Title:Boo boo be doop!
Username:johnnyboy114 johnnyboy114
Uploaded:11 Nov 2009 - 3:52 PM
Tags:Flash / lighting, Portraits / people
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sherring
sherring  646 forum posts United Kingdom13 Constructive Critique Points
11 Nov 2009 - 4:23 PM

I think that the problem is her elbow. My eyes were drawn straight to it and not her face. In that position it also makes her hand look ugly.

Just my oppinion though.

Steve.

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ade_mcfade e2 Member 1014794 forum postsade_mcfade vcard England216 Constructive Critique Points
11 Nov 2009 - 4:52 PM

a tricky one - you want to minimise the size of the hands, get them edge on so you can see just the thumb or the little finger.

also, with the elbow slicking out, it's closer to the camera so looks bigger as a result

finally, she's a little too close to the rhs of the frame

but the lighting looks fine, I like the backdrop - just try to direct the model a bit more

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richard20d
11 Nov 2009 - 4:53 PM

Oh no here I go again. I to am drawn to the elbow for some reason unbeknown to me, and the hand does look a little awkward. I think the centre point to this image is the eyes, but the purple flower draws me away from the eyes. I really have no right to critisie as portraits and studio lighting to me is like baking a cake................No idea.
Perhaps you need some guidance from a portrait photographer and there are plenty of good ones on here. Try asking the guy from ambient life for a few tips he seems like a nice guy.

I hope this is of some use to you Johnny.

Last Modified By richard20d at 11 Nov 2009 - 4:55 PM

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Geraint
Geraint  7715 forum posts Wales34 Constructive Critique Points
12 Nov 2009 - 7:41 PM

Good points regarding the elbow and hand. The main issue for me though is the amount of skin showing (her side and arms) - they're quite bright and are not in keeping with the subdued background (in my opinion). A lot of the problems mentioned could I think have been resolved had the model brought her right shoulder more round to camera and lowered the placement of her hand. This would reveal less skin on her side and reduce the angle of the elbow. It would also mean the elbow and hand would be further away from camera, thus not looking so large in the frame. Also, the tones of her skin differ a lot compared to her face, owing to the make up. The lighting is good though; perhaps you didn't need the light on the (our) right: maybe keeping her back in relative darkness would better suit the mood? Good work.
Geraint

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