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TimJ

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17 May 2012 - 5:53 PM

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Excellent first attempt at a long exposure. The sea has a nice silky smoothness while the foreground retains it's sharpness.

The groyne leads the eye into the shot, but I wonder whether it would look better if you had taken this from one or two steps to the right so that you could see more of the side of the groyne as is goes into the picture. The point of interest is a little over to the right and therefore the left side of the picture doesn't really add anything.

I haven't seen the colour version but this looks good in B&W as it draws out the detail of the wooden groyne.

Hope these comments are useful, well done again.

T

banehawi (Critique Team)

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17 May 2012 - 6:46 PM

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You can upload the colour version as a modification, - then we can see how the mono conversion went.



Willie

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20 May 2012 - 1:06 AM

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Almost there with the long exposure but I think you are slightly caught between two styles. To get the silky smooth sea you need a longer exposure and I can see from your exif data that you are at probably at the limit f22, 1 sec and iso 200. BTW I am not a Nikon user but I thought you could drop below the native 200 iso to a lower setting - this would give you slightly longer in the exposure. Having said this you would probably still need filters to assist the camera or take it in lower light conditions. The other style is to pick up swirly sea patterns either on incoming or receding waves. I can see a bit of that happening by the goin but in this case 1 sec is too long to get the best effect and you may need something around a 1/12? I find goins difficult to capture - Tim above makes some good points about composition which I echo - I would also add that I think it is a subject that is best done in portrait and personally I prefer the first post to be grounded in the composition - your first post is a bit of a barrier in the composition - I have done a quick mod to demo this although I appreciate this takes 75% of your image away! Lastly a bit more constrast does seem help Hope this helps. Steve