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A shot taken this afternoon of my niece Lilly at her first birthday party. Comments and critique welcome.
My first upload to this forum with my D5 II.

Camera:Canon EOS 5D
Lens:Canon 50mm F1.8
Recording media:JPEG (digital)
Title:It's my birthday and I will smile if I want too!
Username:k9 k9
Uploaded:30 Sep 2012 - 8:39 PM
Tags:Black & white, Portraits / people
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peterkin
peterkin  11619 forum posts England
30 Sep 2012 - 11:59 PM

Bless her. Happy Birthday, Lilly. I rarely take photos of children from above but get down to their level, but Lilly looking up sweetly seems to work somehow. The background is a distraction but the majority could be cropped out. Regards.

Peter

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Davesumner
1 Oct 2012 - 6:25 AM

Hi Marc,

very nice engaging image and you definately consider getting down to the childs level to shoot these. This shot just needs a bit of a rotate and a crop to get rid of unecessary things in the shot. Just be a little bit mindful about what is in the background of your shots, the two shadows caused by the furniture are a bit distracting. I do like this in B&W though and eyes are nice and sharp once the image is sharpened.

I've uploaded a mod where I have rotated, cropped and lightened her eyes slightly. Then sharpened.

Hope this helps

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Davesumner
1 Oct 2012 - 7:11 AM

Marc,

By the way, when I downloaded your image it wouldn't display in Bridge and it reported that it had a corrupt profile. you might want to check your graphics program settings just in case the profile is set to a strange profile or something.

Dave

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pamelajean Critique Team 8806 forum postspamelajean vcard United Kingdom1636 Constructive Critique Points
1 Oct 2012 - 5:49 PM

Happy First Birthday to Lilly from me, too.
I think Dave's modification works extremely well, Marc. You have a nice memory of the occasion.
Lilly is looking straight at you, and that is good. Her big beautiful eyes are wide open and capture the viewer's attention immediately.
I can't help remarking on how much I like your last upload, Marc, the one of the dog, absolutely wonderful.
Pamela.

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peterkin
peterkin  11619 forum posts England
1 Oct 2012 - 7:33 PM

I did a modifiction, but had to download your photo using print screen and then cropping it because this photo protector thingy wouldn't let me copy it or save it. When I tried to upload the mod, it wouldn't allow me to because the size was less than 400 pixels. So, is there an easy way of downloading a photo to modify it? Am I missing something?

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NEWMANP e2 Member 61587 forum postsNEWMANP vcard United Kingdom574 Constructive Critique Points
1 Oct 2012 - 11:00 PM

id normally say get down the childs eye level but here i think it looks refreshingly different. there is a nice diagonal line across the sitting position and a charming feel about things, it wouldnt have worked in anything but mono.

its an unusual format with so much negative space above, most would have gone horizontal. but i like negative space if its in balance. possibly needs a little extra space down the left if im being picky

the jury is out with the sofa behind, think id have tried to throw it further out of focus, or add a bit of creative blur in post process.

its still a very nice shot and a great family record.

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paulbroad
paulbroad  782 forum posts United Kingdom872 Constructive Critique Points
2 Oct 2012 - 8:00 PM

A nice family image and good mono tones although I like colour for such images. A bit too much chair I think.

Paul

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