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Sometime next to hit such a poor man's food.

Brand:NIKON CORPORATION
Camera:Nikon D3100 Check out Nikon Nation!
Lens:AF-S DX Nikkor 18-55mm VR Check out Nikon Nation!
Recording media:JPEG (digital)
Date Taken:12 Dec 2011 - 3:16 PM
Focal Length:18mm
Lens Max Aperture:f/3.5
Aperture:f/3.5
Shutter Speed:1/60sec
Exposure Comp:0.0
ISO:220
Exposure Mode:Not Defined
Metering Mode:Multi-segment
Flash:Auto, Fired, Return detected
Title:Salt and bread
Username:Laslo Laslo
Uploaded:16 Feb 2012 - 9:29 PM
Tags:Close-up / macro, General
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Jestertheclown
16 Feb 2012 - 9:40 PM

Hi Laslo,

Technically, this isn't perfect but I really like the idea of this and the use of the props.
What you really needed was an old fashioned knife and a wooden bread board.
However, it certainly caught my eye.

Bren.

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CathR
CathR  7139 forum posts United Kingdom563 Constructive Critique Points
17 Feb 2012 - 10:34 AM

It caught my eye as well Laszlo Smile I really like the crunchiness of the salt and the textures of the bread.

It's hard to get this kind of work just right and it needs a lot of attention to detail. Here are a few pointers which might help. Take a close look at what is included in the background. there is a piece of paper or something behind the chair which is catching my attention. Also something else on the table to the top left.

On the lighting I keep getting distracted by the large dark flower on the table cloth right on the edge in the foreground. What would work best with the lighting is to get the main object in the pool of light the darker shadows round about. I think you have achieved this towards the back of the pic. I have uploaded a mod for you where I have burned in the foreground and sides of the table cloth a little.

the knife looks a little strange with the upper part of the blade suddenly in shadow.

The beauty with this kind of work is that you can always have another go. You have some strong elements here to work with and I wish you good luck.

Best wishes

Catherine

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pamelajean Critique Team 8755 forum postspamelajean vcard United Kingdom1589 Constructive Critique Points
17 Feb 2012 - 7:01 PM

It would be interesting to know if you just took a shot of what was on the table, or if you "set up" the items, Laslo.
Catherine has pointed out that if you set pieces up for a still life shot, there are a lot of things to be aware of.....composition, lighting, background, etc. If you had been setting up the items, it would have been far better to have a plain tablecloth and to take the shot so that there was no background in the frame. Also, you might be looking to add some kind of atmosphere which relates to "poor man's food", and I think that a plain wooden table would suit this well, adding some texture to the background.
On reflection, I don't think you did set this up, but just wanted to capture the food that was on the table. As such, it's fine, except for the background.
I have done a modification where I removed the items from the background, adjusted levels and cropped.
Pamela.

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