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Urban Slope?
Another take of an earlier subject
I've taken various suggestions in account for this photo.

Is this urban architecture or a boring shot of a ramp?
Any suggestions for changes or improvements most welcome.

Captured in RAW on Fuji X-T1 compact system camera with 18-55 lens. Shot at about 55mm (about 80mm FF)
F14, 1/300th at 400ISO.
Conversion Adobe RAW converter and Nik Silver Efex (Photoshop Plug In)

Brand:FUJIFILM
Camera:Fujifilm X-T1
Lens:XF18-55mmF2.8-4 R LM OIS
Recording media:RAW (digital)
Date Taken:9 Mar 2014 - 8:11 AM
Focal Length:55mm
Lens Max Aperture:f/2.8
Aperture:f/14.0
Shutter Speed:1/300sec
Exposure Comp:0.0
ISO:400
Exposure Mode:Aperture-priority AE
Metering Mode:Multi-segment
Flash:Off, Did not fire
White Balance:Auto
Title:The Slope
Username:iancrowson iancrowson
Uploaded:3 May 2014 - 1:59 PM
Tags:Architecture, Black & white, Landscape / travel
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mrswoolybill
mrswoolybill Critique Team 8530 forum postsmrswoolybill vcard United Kingdom1094 Constructive Critique Points
3 May 2014 - 2:46 PM

You've got the full height of that wall on the right - I remember that was my main problem with the previous composition. Portrait gives it greater presence, dignity in a way. But this wouldn't work nearly so well without the rather wayward, wobbly shadow - that's the backbone here. Plus the low sun casts sideways shadows that show up the textures in the masonry rather well.

I wish the sky was lighter, it has a slightly murky, muddy look. Otherwise this works for me.
Moira

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dudler
dudler Critique Team 11164 forum postsdudler vcard England391 Constructive Critique Points
3 May 2014 - 3:17 PM

Ian -

That's quite a personal decision: my take is that this IS urban architecture, and it's not boring. It reminds me of the Students' Union building in Durham, which is made of concrete, with the textures from wooden formwork still visible. Modern materials don't stop it being architecture!

This is a pretty near perfect shot in just about every way, I'd say. The geometry is jsut right - and any lack would show horribly with a subject like this.

My only question is about the tonality: relatively middle of the road. I'll do a couple of mods to darken and lighten: as my PS skills are strictly limited, using Levels in Elements. This is not to say that your version is wrong (definitely more accurate, I reckon!), but the kind of changes I shall (I hope) be trying in the darkroom in the next hour or two.

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banehawi
banehawi Critique Team 10988 forum postsbanehawi vcard Canada2984 Constructive Critique Points
3 May 2014 - 3:44 PM

Better with the height than the first shot.

Are you intentionally making it gritty to suggest urban Ian, and that might explain the darker, grainy appearance?



Regards



Willie

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paulbroad e2 Member 789 forum postspaulbroad vcard United Kingdom880 Constructive Critique Points
4 May 2014 - 9:20 AM

I rather like this in general. Strong and gritty as modern buildings tend to be. They lack interest in the long term, the building, not your shot. Itdoes look like yiu might have worked on the sky, and it might be better a little brighter 7n the sky. I would just clone that white spot sign. Not then technicalky accurate, but it just pulls the eye a bit.

Paul

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iancrowson
iancrowson e2 Member 4211 forum postsiancrowson vcard United Kingdom129 Constructive Critique Points
4 May 2014 - 5:14 PM

Thanks for the feed backs. Better than the last by a fair bit I guess.
I have seen some great urban landscapes, but I find it difficult.

regards
Ian

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pablophotographer
pablophotographer e2 Member 3496 forum postspablophotographer vcard 188 Constructive Critique Points
29 May 2014 - 1:15 PM

Hi Ian,

I like your picture very much.

My only suggestion would be a slight crop from the left to remove that far building. Then, I would assess the photograph to see if it needed any small cropping from the right as well. Tonality looks fine to me, I prefer strong black and white images and yours contains dark elements in the joints of the materials.

I see you have got a new nice camera to play with Smile how about a plastic football ball too? I would have loved to see one such ball running down the slope of a street I had shot, I reckon it adds that element of life and play, the human absence is instantly cancelled. Plus, you have a new shape striking contrast with everything else, the grid, the solid, the serious. Give into the fun. Keep one at the boot of the car, for you and your grandson.

It must be the Mundial taking over my brain. Gooooooooooooooooooooooooal, gol, gol, gol, gol, gol, gol. Madness in any language.

Cordially,
pablophotographer

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