I like this shot for the detail and the clarity. It is a better shot, though the glare from the flash robs, at least for me some of the luster that is there in thehorse's color and shape. I find that lightbox's on the flash and pointed up or back can help. Or one trick I learned for the studio is to tape wax paper to the front of the umbrella and let it hang down, it makes a great cheap diffuser, though it doesn't always last a long time.
Mandy are you talking about the horse or the Photographer?
Calibrate your monitor so you can see 16 different shades.