Could have been good if the chap with brolly was more too the left, think your timing was just a little out here.

As it is though maybe a square crop loosing the left third could make all the difference, and converted to B&W or Sepia.

The wet paving makes a nice lead in.

V1`s ok, never been big on landscapes myself.

V2, think you have pretty much nailed the lensbaby

One thing I look out for in shots like this and try to avoid are the blobs of saucer shaped light, sometimes they work, sometimes they don`t. The bright red one looks a little out of place, there not always easy to avoid.

The scene reminds me a little of the Kennet running through Reading.

I`m no expert really but find that this portrait looks a little to posed. The model looks a little uncomfortable. The make up is ok though the skin looks a little to shiny, a little matt face powder could help a little. The head resting on the hand in this pic does not work and especially with this tight crop, I would have left the hand out. Looks to me like you have used a second light, as there are some catch lights in the hair. Most removed by the tight crop. For a pic like this I would most probally have only used one flashhead with the soft box position at least about 4 feet in front to further soften the light. Also a white reflecter slightly to the left or right to balance shadows.

Paul