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I was interested in the contrast between the hard shape of the sundial and the softness of the garden beyond. I wonder if an out of focus background would have made the contrast more obvious and if there is anyway of creating this in PS7 ?

Geoff

Brand:Panasonic
Camera:
Lens:14-45
Recording media:JPEG (digital)
Date Taken:17 May 2010 - 2:27 PM
Focal Length:20mm
Lens Max Aperture:f/4.5
Aperture:f/8.0
Shutter Speed:1/320sec
Exposure Comp:-0.66
ISO:100
Exposure Mode:Aperture-priority AE
Metering Mode:Multi-segment
Flash:Off, Did not fire
White Balance:Auto
Title:Summertime
Username:salopian salopian
Uploaded:10 Jan 2013 - 11:35 AM
Tags:Focus, General, Sundial
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Focus_Man
Focus_Man  4481 forum posts United Kingdom631 Constructive Critique Points
10 Jan 2013 - 12:07 PM

Best to make the background out of focus by using a larger aperture, in this case, full, aperture. If full aperture is insufficient, try a longer FL as well as full aperture. You also need to look at the point of critical sharpness and how the dial is positioned, here it does not appear to be sharp and at the angle you have used it does not appear at its optimum. Also being slightly back-lit you would be better having a positive compensation rather than negative as you have done here.

The overall picture to me smacks of snapshot. Nothing wrong with that, but maybe a close up of the dial face at various positions with the sun shining and showing the time. If you have one of the posh models which have luminous numerals for telling the time at night, show those as wellSmile

Frank

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Fefe e2 Member 3Fefe vcard United Kingdom30 Constructive Critique Points
10 Jan 2013 - 3:03 PM

I have done a mod for you but I dont think it is what you wanted from your description.......... I have done very little just a few tweeks to the colour, saturation increased a bit, a little more contrast and a sharpen. Adding a bit of contrast gives a bit more depth I feel, to such bright sunlight.
You say you might want an out of focus garden........... but I think you will have to get a shallower dof and focus on the sundial..........
Hope you like the modGrin
Diane

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Robert51
Robert51  6 United Kingdom14 Constructive Critique Points
10 Jan 2013 - 3:06 PM

Hi Geoff

Instead of blurring the background I would use light to draw the eye to the dial. I would also made more of the wonderful colours in the background. I have uploaded a mod and hope you like it.

Robert

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pablophotographer

Hi.

I can't help you with this picture. I shall say something that may help the ones you take next.

Adjust your picture to an orientation.

Reading horizontally from left top you have trees, sky space, tree, just a bit sky space. Left top space is closed, right top space is open.

Reading horizontally the bottom zone, bush, filled space, the sun clock, space, bush. Lower line horizontally, lots of flowers and grass, the limestone and grass, some flowers and grass ...

Below, a skewed limestone pathway and a bit of a shadow to one side then some flowers on the right side.

Vertically rule of thirds is fine with the sunclock on the right place, but in line with the tree right above it, offers less impact.

Look where the right corner of the sunclock base is and see if the ange matches the corner of the picture frame.
I think you should have shot from a point more to the right and allow the sunclock to be in between the vertical lines of the trees.

Your digital camera should have an orientation assistance giude, use it to get to see what your picture consists of, when you train yourself to understand how to compose your following pictures would improve.

Apologies if I sounded rough.

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paulbroad
paulbroad  782 forum posts United Kingdom875 Constructive Critique Points
10 Jan 2013 - 7:38 PM

Appears as a pictorial record and, you are right, background is too sharp. Rarely looks right to blur thd background in software. Can be very artificial. Best to go back further and use a wide aperture and your longest focal length for the same composition. The combination of focal length and aperture will have a better chance of blurring the background.

You can even use the laws of depth of field and manully focus slightly in front of the sundial. Depth of field, if you get it right, will then give a sharp subject but blur the background even further.

Paul

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salopian
salopian e2 Member 3salopian vcard United Kingdom18 Constructive Critique Points
11 Jan 2013 - 10:19 AM

Thanks for all the sound advice folks. I can see now that I should have used a wider aperture to achieve the softer background and used manual focus to concentrate on the sundial. Your comments are not at all rough Pablo, they remind me of what I should have thought of at the time, ie spend more time in composing the scene before pressing the button!
I like the mods - definite improvements - how did you get the sky so blue Robert?
Thanks again,

Geoff

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Robert51
Robert51  6 United Kingdom14 Constructive Critique Points
12 Jan 2013 - 8:24 AM

Geoff there are lots of ways to adjust the sky but in this case I wanted to also bring out the red in the tree and the flowers a lot more. In photoshop I just increased the hue/saturation by about +25.

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