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I have offered this one of a previous post for pro critique to see how it can be improved so Mr H et al do your worst...

Camera:Canon EOS 400D
Lens:sigma 18-200mm
Recording media:JPEG (digital)
Title:Grandma's kitchen..
Username:thearmsofvenusdemilo thearmsofvenusdemilo
Uploaded:25 Mar 2008 - 4:58 PM
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culturedcanvas
25 Mar 2008 - 5:00 PM

Just had to re-write this as you deleted the last one Wink

Well theres not a lot wrong with this at all. The treatment suits the image nicely and gives a gritty feel overall which suits the scene.

Compositioanlly there's plenty of space between the elements in the shot which helps it retain some clarity.

Improvements? Well i might have added some ice to the tumbler and maybe used a more interesting glass to strengthen the focal point.

It might also benefit from a slight crop at the top which would make it a touch stronger compositionally in my opinion.

Dan

PS I like a Bushmills myself on occasion ...

Last Modified By culturedcanvas at 25 Mar 2008 - 5:01 PM

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thearmsofvenusdemilo

Thats actually bloody good comment about the glass and ice!! Thanks Dan.

Colin

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Milla
Milla  6 United Kingdom2 Constructive Critique Points
25 Mar 2008 - 5:09 PM

Yet another delightful in every bit image! You ask how can this be improved, I ask how to get so fantastic quality of work lol.

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MrsS
MrsS  84527 forum posts England18 Constructive Critique Points
25 Mar 2008 - 5:36 PM

ICE! ICE!!! IN BUSHMILLS????

SACRILEGE!!!


Ok! Now I've calmed down. It would improve the photographic element, but WHAT a waste! Wink

F xx

PS, already commented on this b4 so please forgive me for not giving any constructive criticism, basically as I know nerrthing Tongue

Last Modified By MrsS at 25 Mar 2008 - 5:38 PM

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thearmsofvenusdemilo

ICE FOR COMPOSITION PURPOSES ONLY

Ditto Fran

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nolongeramember

Good old Grandma.. she knows what warms the cockles...!!!!
Plus taste in china Plates.. winks..!

perspective of " Bushmills " Superb.. !!! chin chin !!

Nikki !

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randomrubble
25 Mar 2008 - 6:26 PM

One thought that's not yet been mentioned, I'd like to see you lose the curtain pole that pops on at the top right.

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GlynnisFrith
GlynnisFrith e2 Member 7GlynnisFrith vcard United Kingdom3 Constructive Critique Points
25 Mar 2008 - 6:31 PM

Nice old world feel about it but I do agree about the curtain pole
Glynnis

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MickyMc
MickyMc  6 United Kingdom
25 Mar 2008 - 6:38 PM

It has great atmosphere and stirs those old grey cells
Mavis

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redstag
redstag e2 Member 8100 forum postsredstag vcard United Kingdom14 Constructive Critique Points
25 Mar 2008 - 6:39 PM

A superb image, but, even for compositional purposes, you can't put ice in Bushmills, I'm with Fran!
ta for the PM.

Jon

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chinny
chinny  9492 forum posts United Kingdom
25 Mar 2008 - 6:45 PM

Wonderful !!

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luxaeternam
25 Mar 2008 - 7:10 PM

Please send me grandma's address!
Love this, and I'm frustrated because I wanted to shortlist it...
Smile Lucy

Last Modified By luxaeternam at 25 Mar 2008 - 7:11 PM

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POOCHIE  8 United Kingdom6 Constructive Critique Points
25 Mar 2008 - 7:46 PM

Nobody does HDR quite like you in my opinion and you certainly inspired me to give it ago recently, I always like your subject matter, I wonder what sort of shot you would have got if you had drank the bottle ? great shot anyway.

Pooch.

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DP_Imagery
DP_Imagery e2 Member 9DP_Imagery vcard Wales6 Constructive Critique Points
25 Mar 2008 - 10:46 PM

Change the bottle of Bushmills (a fine enough drop though it is) for a bottle of Jamesons Crested 10 and you have a perfect image . . . but definitely no ice - not even for photographic purposes (I mean you are going to have to drink it after taking the photo are you not!) Seriously though - your HDR technique is so perfect your images don't 'look' like HDR - just look like very beautiful photographs. Heartwarming stuff. Bruce

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wasper e2 Member 8532 forum postswasper vcard Ireland1 Constructive Critique Points
27 Mar 2008 - 12:05 PM

How about a Cuban cigar to add a Churchlian atmosphere.

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ade_mcfade
ade_mcfade e2 Member 1014838 forum postsade_mcfade vcard England216 Constructive Critique Points
27 Mar 2008 - 3:39 PM

oodles of character and interest in here - Dan's pretty much beaten us all to the main points.

I agree that you could loose the top of the shot - a bit above the dresser maybe? it just seems so empty at the top compared to the lower parts

Can't really think of much else I'd change - it's your own distinct style and it works

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Nick_w e2 Member 73886 forum postsNick_w vcard England99 Constructive Critique Points
27 Mar 2008 - 6:36 PM

I love the style to your shots, yes maybe too much empty space at the top, and if I'm been realy critical the bucket on the RHS has just been clipped, but thats been very picky.

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Eviscera
Eviscera e2 Member 81104 forum postsEviscera vcard United Kingdom149 Constructive Critique Points
27 Mar 2008 - 10:38 PM

well , cant quite quite decide if the behind the back of the chair (webby effect) is stuck to it or part of the b.g. Just a slight distracting textural and/ or highlight.

doesnt detract from the mood though !

Dave

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thearmsofvenusdemilo

Thanks to the crit team Barry and Ade , some food for thought, and thanks to everyone else Scorcher Gltnis, Mavis,Jon, Poochie, Bruce, Khamas, Nick and Dave all very useful stuff cheers guys..

Colin

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thearmsofvenusdemilo

Thanks also Milla!!

Colin

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thearmsofvenusdemilo

Thanks Lucy and Paul appreciate your comments

Colin

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SueTurner
SueTurner  981 forum posts England3 Constructive Critique Points
29 Mar 2008 - 12:30 AM

the only thing what I think could be improved on this excellent shot is I dont like the black blobs (to the right of the blue plate and above the little clock) find my eye is drawn there looks like someone has sprayed a load of black paint there, and if being really picky clone out that (looks like part of a curtain rail) sticking in about a third down on the right hand side - apart from that it is a very clever well thought out shot, with very good manipulation.

Sue

Last Modified By SueTurner at 29 Mar 2008 - 12:32 AM

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thearmsofvenusdemilo

Thanks Sue, good points, although the black blobs are actually burn marks from the oil lamp!

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