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Took this last night and hope I have taken yesterday comments in and improved with this photo of my daughter, was trying to make it look like a standard portrait. Like yesterday will look forward to your comments

Brand:Canon
Camera:Canon EOS 550D
Lens:EF70-200mm f/4L USM
Recording media:JPEG (digital)
Date Taken:23 Sep 2012 - 9:14 PM
Focal Length:70mm
Lens Max Aperture:f/4.0
Aperture:f/5.6
Shutter Speed:1/200sec
Exposure Comp:0.0
ISO:100
Exposure Mode:Manual
Metering Mode:Spot
Flash:Off, Did not fire
White Balance:Custom
Title:Lucy
Username:TheRiverRat TheRiverRat
Uploaded:24 Sep 2012 - 7:51 AM
Tags:General, Portraits / people
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pluckyfilly
pluckyfilly e2 Member 8283 forum postspluckyfilly vcard United Kingdom33 Constructive Critique Points
24 Sep 2012 - 7:56 AM

your daughter looks very relaxed and this is important I understand in portrait photography, I dont see anything to critique but portraiture is not my forte, however I do know a good picture when I see one and this fits the criteria for meSmile

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Canonshots
24 Sep 2012 - 8:27 AM

You have a lovely daughter and you have done her proud with this portrait. The smile is perfectly captured and looks entirely natural, which I am sure it is. The composition is good but I have a slight reservation in that I don't like the cut off elbow.

Some would criticise the fact that the eyes show three catchlights instead of just one. Personally I don't object to multiple catchlights, but it might squeeze an extra point or two out of a competition judge if that were corrected.

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Digby
Digby e2 Member 641 forum postsDigby vcard Wales
24 Sep 2012 - 9:00 AM

A nice well composed portrait.

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banehawi
banehawi Critique Team 10822 forum postsbanehawi vcard Canada2821 Constructive Critique Points
24 Sep 2012 - 12:43 PM

This is good, and much better than before, though that was a candid, this is posed.

The square format works and would make a nice print, however I suggest an 8 X 10 aspect ratio in the mod as it improves eye placement, - less central, and gives it a different look.

The adjustments Ive made with threshold and curves suggest a slight color temp and exposure change. The eyes are good with nice catch-lights.

You havent mentioned how it was lit, - I assume some form of studio lighting was used. It would be nice to know some more about how this was lit.

The exif shows it was shot as a JPEG, so you need to experiment with RAW so you can get accurate colour balance. You can purchase quite cheaply an 18% greay card (cardboard) and place it in one shot with the lighting and camera set up, then shoot as usual, and in RAW post processing, use the greay card to calibrate the white balance of all your shots. It works very well.



Hope this helps,



regards



Willie

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Focus_Man
Focus_Man  4481 forum posts United Kingdom631 Constructive Critique Points
24 Sep 2012 - 3:45 PM

Well what an improvement over the last one. Like Willie, I prefer the 10 X 8 aspect ratio, somehow the square just doesn't seem to be balanced.

The eye position is good but not optimum and I don't mind losing that bit of elbow being chopped off to improve it.

The lighting is nice, even and shadowless, the kind that I like and prefer.

The pose gives stature to both you and your daughter who is obviously not embarrassed in front of the lens and in fact looks entirely relaxed.

well done

Frank

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Sooty_1
Sooty_1 Critique Team 41195 forum posts United Kingdom196 Constructive Critique Points
24 Sep 2012 - 4:21 PM

I quite like the square aspect, but also feel the 8x10 works better.
Other than the above, I think it's a fraction underexposed...the background would be better if white, and the rosy cheeks would be paler, though using a reflector in front of her angling light back into the shadows would alleviate these things. It would be more flattering...you can get away with it with young skin, but anyone over teenage is going to have flaws that are shown up with too much shadow.

If she will pose though, you can fine tune and try different things, the flip side is that you build up a great record of your daughter, shot in different ways.

Nick

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paulbroad
paulbroad  781 forum posts United Kingdom845 Constructive Critique Points
24 Sep 2012 - 6:07 PM

This is very nice indeed. Hands to heads can look contrived but this is fine. I assume a studio flash or continuous light set up but would like details. I like Willies crop being a great believer in tight crops but your offering is pretty good.

Nice work.

Paul

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TheRiverRat
24 Sep 2012 - 6:49 PM

For the lighting I just used my speedlite 580EX ll, will try again tomorrow night. Thanks for all your comments

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paulbroad
paulbroad  781 forum posts United Kingdom845 Constructive Critique Points
25 Sep 2012 - 8:45 AM

Was the speedlight on an extension cable. The EXIF says flash did not fire.

Paul

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TheRiverRat
25 Sep 2012 - 10:36 AM

It was set off by remote, sorry should have said

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parob
parob e2 Member 3parob vcard France70 Constructive Critique Points
26 Oct 2012 - 4:28 PM

Quite agree with the comments. Two specific areas need to be worked on: too much coloration in the nose area (the modifications even accentuate it) and the left eye in particular. Furthermore, I was struck by the eye-direction of the subject. I'd say a little too much to the left, otherwise it becomes a fleeting look, whereas a portrait ought to be treated differently. The hair, skin definition is just perfect. Switch to RAW, why not, I think it makes processing a breeze.

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