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Hi
This was taken while on holiday in Uganda earlier this year. The picture was much larger showing a bunch of kids, but when I saw the eye of a boy looking though these two children here, I thought this made for a stronger composition.
I'd be happy for you to let me know what you think and if any improvements could be made to the image. All mods are welcome.
Thank you for looking.
Best Wishes
Tracey

Brand:Canon
Camera:Canon EOS 400D
Lens:Canon 55-250mm IS
Recording media:RAW (digital)
Title:Eyes
Username:Tracey_McGovern Tracey_McGovern
Uploaded:4 Nov 2011 - 10:46 PM
Tags:Africa, Black & white, Children, Mono, Portrait, Travel, Uganda
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cirrusminor
cirrusminor e2 Member 6379 forum postscirrusminor vcard England3 Constructive Critique Points
4 Nov 2011 - 11:11 PM

those eyes tell sooooo much!
whats to critique?
Tim

Last Modified By cirrusminor at 4 Nov 2011 - 11:12 PM

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johnriley1uk
johnriley1uk e2 Member 926 forum postsjohnriley1uk vcard United Kingdom4 Constructive Critique Points
5 Nov 2011 - 12:00 AM

Wow, Tracey, that is superb!

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andylea
andylea e2 Member 537 forum postsandylea vcard United Kingdom1 Constructive Critique Points
5 Nov 2011 - 12:23 AM

the eye do it for me tracey a stunning capture top shot Wink
andy

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KeithSt
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5 Nov 2011 - 3:43 AM

Hi Tracey
Great picture, but did you get parental permission to put the photos on the net. I would check the legal requirement to cover yourself. Fantastic picture though.

Keith

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accipiter
accipiter e2 Member 4accipiter vcard England56 Constructive Critique Points
5 Nov 2011 - 5:56 AM

well seen - a very evocative image. A

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fentiger
fentiger e2 Member 12915 forum postsfentiger vcard England22 Constructive Critique Points
5 Nov 2011 - 8:18 AM

This is a great image the only improvement I can suggest is a selective curves adjustment to the neck area of both boys ~ see mod.

Albert

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banehawi
banehawi Critique Team 9708 forum postsbanehawi vcard Canada2668 Constructive Critique Points
5 Nov 2011 - 11:45 AM

Ive looked at this for a while Tracey. Its obviously a good shot, and interesting. It almost hits all the buttons, but as I said, I had to look at it for a while, and closely to see what would improve it. My original tendency was to suggest that it would be better if deliberately focused on the eye behind (sharper) that the kids at front, but of course this wasnt the case, and is a crop from a larger scene. Would have been nice to see the larger scene loaded as a version or a mod too.

Where I ended up with it was that the focal point is the kid behind, so if not sharp, he/she needs to be on a third; then looking at the front two, they are a little oversharpened, so reduce sharpness in front, increase behind, and a square crop to place the kid behind on a third, emphasizing the focal point. I did notice something on the partial face that I cloned out, - I may have removed a nose, but it looks to me that the nose would be on the other side, so perhaps just a piece of clothing.

Either way, - well done, and mod loaded for review.



Regards


Willie

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SueEley
SueEley e2 Member 7271 forum postsSueEley vcard Wales96 Constructive Critique Points
5 Nov 2011 - 5:20 PM

I agree with Willie - reduce the sharpness, and the contrast perhaps - they are emphasising highlights in the skin and hair that detract from a great shot.

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Sooty_1
Sooty_1 Critique Team 31125 forum posts United Kingdom192 Constructive Critique Points
5 Nov 2011 - 5:42 PM

I didn't see the extra eye at first because of the strength of the foreground. Cover the background one, and the picture is just as good IMHO.

The extra eye changes the picture's direction slightly, and with or without is a good picture. Personally, I prefer it without.

I really don't think you need the parent's permission, plus it is not illegal to take pictures of children, nor is it illegal to put them online unless you use them for specific uses which I won't go into here.

Nick

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Tracey_McGovern
Tracey_McGovern e2 Member 5Tracey_McGovern vcard United Kingdom2 Constructive Critique Points
5 Nov 2011 - 6:56 PM

Thank you for all of your comments and feedback, they are all very much appreciated. Thank you in particular to:
Willie - Yes, I quite like the tighter crop and you are right, the middle eye looks better on the thirds. I will have another go.
Albert - Your modification is also better, did you just do a selection of the neck area then adjust the levels?
Keith - Thanks for your advice about parental permission, althought this would have been difficult to obtain, the children were street kids and they are now 1000s of miles away.
Thanks again everyone.
Best Wishes
Tracey

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WindowonWildlife
WindowonWildlife e2 Member 4WindowonWildlife vcard United Kingdom4 Constructive Critique Points
5 Nov 2011 - 7:46 PM

Superb mono Tracey,really is excellent work.

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fentiger
fentiger e2 Member 12915 forum postsfentiger vcard England22 Constructive Critique Points
5 Nov 2011 - 8:26 PM


Quote: Albert - Your modification is also better, did you just do a selection of the neck area then adjust the levels?

Yes a selection of the neck area but a curves adjustment.

Albert

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thatmanbrian
6 Nov 2011 - 9:12 PM

I've uploaded a mod where I used Lightroom's brush set to very low clarity to reduce the 'sharpness' of the skin texture. I actually prefer that detail myself.

BTW surely you don't need parental permission or model releases for non commercial use?

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