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Hi

I would be grateful if you could critique this photo and let me know if you think anything about it could be improved. I appreciate any feedback you can give me.

Thank you for your time.

Best Wishes
Tracey

Brand:Canon
Camera:Canon EOS 7D
Lens:EF50mm f/1.8 II
Recording media:RAW (digital)
Date Taken:18 Apr 2012 - 7:26 PM
Focal Length:50mm
Lens Max Aperture:f/1.8
Aperture:f/8.0
Shutter Speed:1/125sec
Exposure Comp:0.0
ISO:100
Exposure Mode:Manual
Metering Mode:Multi-segment
Flash:Off, Did not fire
Title:Olivia #1
Username:Tracey_McGovern Tracey_McGovern
Uploaded:10 Jun 2012 - 7:29 PM
Tags:Model, Portrait, Portraits / people, Studio
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DeeWee
DeeWee  5 England1 Constructive Critique Points
10 Jun 2012 - 7:46 PM

WOW - I wouldnt change a thing - I'm in awe! What a lovely pic, lovely model, lovely composition! I'm only a 'novice' to photography but that sure 'wowed' me!Smile
Dee

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CaptivePhotons
CaptivePhotons e2 Member 111515 forum postsCaptivePhotons vcard England2 Constructive Critique Points
10 Jun 2012 - 7:49 PM

I think it's pretty good too. Not sure what I'd change, one might say the skin is a tad smooth but having said that you don't want a picture of a pimple!

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Katie04
Katie04  2 England
10 Jun 2012 - 7:49 PM

Wow! I love the contrast between the colour of the lipstick and the colour of the hair!! Beautiful model too, i wouldn't change anything!Smilex
Katie

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fazzer
fazzer e2 Member 528 forum postsfazzer vcard United Kingdom6 Constructive Critique Points
10 Jun 2012 - 7:53 PM

great shot,no fantastic shot the only thing i would do is slightly darken the neck area, bottom left.

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MossyOak
MossyOak  2 England15 Constructive Critique Points
10 Jun 2012 - 7:56 PM

Superb crop and lighting. Just one thing I might have had the lights slightly higher to give the catchlight a higher position rather than the middle of the eye.
Richard

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miptog
miptog  83532 forum posts United Kingdom61 Constructive Critique Points
10 Jun 2012 - 9:31 PM

My only suggestion is that there is more skin tone on the model's cheek-bone than the rest of the face, which is predominately hi-key. Have uploaded a mod: tighter crop and toned down the highlights.

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canonfan
canonfan  4 United Kingdom
10 Jun 2012 - 9:43 PM

I think this is fantastic. Lovely contrast between the blue and the red. I would not change anything
Jim

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Focus_Man
Focus_Man  4481 forum posts United Kingdom631 Constructive Critique Points
11 Jun 2012 - 8:33 AM

Superb processing here and to fair a result that surely improves the actual skin colour, texture and tone, the model must surely be pleased with this.

Compositionally I feel that a little more space needs adding to the RRS to take the eye line further left. The junction of the eyes is presently in the right half and if it were in the left side I believe it would make for better viewability.

Frank

Last Modified By Focus_Man at 11 Jun 2012 - 8:34 AM

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sherring
sherring  646 forum posts United Kingdom13 Constructive Critique Points
11 Jun 2012 - 9:47 AM

Gets my Vote as it is.

Steve.

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Lynamick
Lynamick  12 United Kingdom31 Constructive Critique Points
11 Jun 2012 - 10:27 AM

Hi,
Very good image.
The only thing that I would alter is the catchlights in the eyes.
I have put up a mod so that you can see what I mean.
Hope this helps,
Michael.

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NEWMANP
NEWMANP e2 Member 61583 forum postsNEWMANP vcard United Kingdom574 Constructive Critique Points
11 Jun 2012 - 4:04 PM

hi.
great bit of composition and processing, a highly stylised well colour balanced image.

simple, uncluttered, clean and vibrant with a smashing expression and a beautiful diagonal across the bright sharp eyes.

thats my only critisism, the highlights look a bit oversized and more like blown blobs, id have sooner seen a reflection in the iris than the pupil. could be made smaller and less attention grabbing.

that mouth is top dollar

Phil

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banehawi
banehawi Critique Team 10777 forum postsbanehawi vcard Canada2782 Constructive Critique Points
11 Jun 2012 - 5:21 PM

Hi Tracey,

Overall a decent shot. I agree with Phil re the size of the eye catchlights.

The image has a cool, slightly blue tone, so white balance can improve this for a warmer appearance. Calibrate white balance with studio lights using a grey card, and use this as a reference for WB correction when processing RAW files.

Though it appears bright, its underexposed a little.

The crop can be a little tighter to improve placement of the near eye closer to a third.

The vignette is not needed, - looks better without it.


Ive loaded s mod with all of the above for your review.


Hope this is helpful,


regards



Willie

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Tracey_McGovern
Tracey_McGovern e2 Member 6Tracey_McGovern vcard United Kingdom2 Constructive Critique Points
11 Jun 2012 - 8:28 PM

Thank you everyone for your comments, I really appreciate your time in both looking and my image and suggesting ways to improve it. Now that the size of the catch light has been brought to my attention, I can see what you mean so will have a go at making these a bit smaller. Thank you again for your valid comments, of which I will take on board.

Best Wishes

Tracey Wink

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SuperRoo
SuperRoo  763 forum posts Australia1 Constructive Critique Points
11 Jun 2012 - 10:07 PM

Great portrait, Tracey... love the expression, makeup and coloured hair as well as the crispness of the image and the subtle vignette.

Just be careful when you get the model to look straight at the lights, as you can tend to lose the subtle contours in the face and the catchlight replaces the pupil in the eyes. Having the model look slightly more to her right could have made this slightly better.

Paul

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paulbroad
paulbroad  681 forum posts United Kingdom840 Constructive Critique Points
12 Jun 2012 - 7:21 AM

This is a fine portrait and I comment having looked at your later one too. Composition and technique absolutely spot on. I would change little but make two points. The eyes are just a touch sharper in this one than the later version, not that the later one is a problem, and I wish this one had the eye contact the other does.

On another point and my hobby horse - everyone comments on this, a superb image, to say how good it is. This is a critique section, why not comment on others that actually need help?

Paul

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1881
1881  2 India
18 Jun 2012 - 7:17 PM

GOOD work .
--------------------------------- Sanjeev

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