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Hi

Thank you for the critique on yesterdays image. I'd like you to have a go at this one now, tell me whats wrong with it then I can improve it. Thank you for your time.
Best Wishes
Tracey

Brand:Canon
Camera:Canon EOS 7D
Lens:EF-S18-200mm f/3.5-5.6 IS
Recording media:RAW (digital)
Date Taken:18 Apr 2012 - 7:20 PM
Focal Length:70mm
Lens Max Aperture:f/5.2
Aperture:f/8.0
Shutter Speed:1/125sec
Exposure Comp:0.0
ISO:100
Exposure Mode:Manual
Metering Mode:Multi-segment
Flash:Off, Did not fire
Title:Olivia #2
Username:Tracey_McGovern Tracey_McGovern
Uploaded:11 Jun 2012 - 9:14 PM
Tags:Model, People, Portrait, Portraits / people, Studio
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johnriley1uk
johnriley1uk e2 Member 1026 forum postsjohnriley1uk vcard United Kingdom4 Constructive Critique Points
11 Jun 2012 - 9:27 PM

It's a wonderful shot Tracey, with perhaps just two tweaks needed. The first is to remove the three buttons, which distract. The second is to ensure the demarcation between the black of the dress and the black of the background is just discernable. This can be done by careful lighting, but here you'd need to make some Photoshop adjustment.

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SuperRoo
SuperRoo  763 forum posts Australia1 Constructive Critique Points
11 Jun 2012 - 10:17 PM

Another great shot of Olivia... really like the tight crop and the wonderful eye contact. I agree with John above regarding the "buttons" - actually polka dots on the dress/top - and the need to separate the model from the background and can be easily dealt with in Photoshop. Another thing to be aware of when using a two light setup like you have, is the issue of dual catch-lights in the eyes. Although it doesn't bother me, there are some who consider this to be a "technical error" in studio photography, so I thought I should mention it.

Keep up the good work

Paul

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pablophotographer

Comparing this one with Olivia number 1 , I think it seems that Olivia has more "breathing space" in the first shot.

It could be also good though to try an even tighter crop that includes eyes, lips and hair.

I like the colour in both.

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banehawi
banehawi Critique Team 10777 forum postsbanehawi vcard Canada2780 Constructive Critique Points
12 Jun 2012 - 1:36 AM

Hi Tracey,

Another nice shot. I actually like the mouth slightly open in the last shot, - but its just a personal [reference.

A few comments and suggestions: Look at the camera right side of her face by her jaw line; theres either some dark hair following the precise contour of her face, or more likely a strong shadow. This should go.

You mau have applied some skin softening (?) and if so, you also applied it to her eyes, lips and hair, theyre not sharp enough.

The double cathclights are common and not an issue, much better than before.

There too much red in the skin, and the lips are particularly over saturated. (Might be the model, not your shooting!) To see this, open curves, click the drop down by the RGB box, select red, and look at that histogram crowding up against the right. Thats over saturation in the red channel whic cause colours to bleed over pixel boundaries and lose detail. As you can see, her lips have not detail at all.


Loaded a mod to compare,



regards


Willie

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paulbroad
paulbroad  681 forum posts United Kingdom840 Constructive Critique Points
12 Jun 2012 - 7:22 AM

See my comments on your other image - both excellent but would like the other image expression with this eye contact.

Paul

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Sooty_1
Sooty_1 Critique Team 41173 forum posts United Kingdom196 Constructive Critique Points
12 Jun 2012 - 9:21 AM

The lighting's pretty good, exposure and composition are fine and the model's attractive.

My problem? It looks "over Portrait Professional'd ..." ie over the top in terms of skin smoothing. She looks plastic. There is no texture whatsoever to her skin - no lines, no wrinkles..no character.
A little less processing would be better IMHO.

Nick

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sherring
sherring  646 forum posts United Kingdom13 Constructive Critique Points
12 Jun 2012 - 9:29 AM

For me her eyes are too soft.
Looks like the camera locked onto her hair as this looks to be the sharpest part of the image.

Steve.

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Focus_Man
Focus_Man  4481 forum posts United Kingdom631 Constructive Critique Points
12 Jun 2012 - 9:49 AM

Compositionally much better than the first one uploaded.

Frank

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Tracey_McGovern
Tracey_McGovern e2 Member 6Tracey_McGovern vcard United Kingdom2 Constructive Critique Points
12 Jun 2012 - 10:08 PM

Hi All

Thank you for your time in commenting on this image. I haven't used Portrait Professional, although I have used a technique in photoshop to smooth out the skin, maybe I over did it a bit. I sharpened the hair, eyes and lips separately, leaving the skin diffused, maybe I didn't sharpen them enough. I'll have another go at it.

Thanks again for your comments and feedback.

Best Wishes
Tracey

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lifesnapper
lifesnapper e2 Member 8lifesnapper vcard England1 Constructive Critique Points
22 Dec 2012 - 5:54 PM

Excellent portrait Tracey, love the Hair the Skin Tone and expression.

John Smile

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