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Hi
Thank you for the critique on yesterdays image. I'd like you to have a go at this one now, tell me whats wrong with it then I can improve it. Thank you for your time.
Best Wishes
Tracey
| Brand: | Canon |
| Camera: | Canon EOS 7D |
| Lens: | EF-S18-200mm f/3.5-5.6 IS |
| Recording media: | RAW (digital) |
| Date Taken: | 18 Apr 2012 - 7:20 PM |
| Focal Length: | 70mm |
| Lens Max Aperture: | f/5.2 |
| Aperture: | f/8.0 |
| Shutter Speed: | 1/125sec |
| Exposure Comp: | 0.0 |
| ISO: | 100 |
| Exposure Mode: | Manual |
| Metering Mode: | Multi-segment |
| Flash: | Off, Did not fire |
| Title: | Olivia #2 |
| Username: | 
Tracey_McGovern |
| Uploaded: | 11 Jun 2012 - 9:14 PM |
| Tags: | Model, People, Portrait, Portraits / people, Studio |
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Comments
It's a wonderful shot Tracey, with perhaps just two tweaks needed. The first is to remove the three buttons, which distract. The second is to ensure the demarcation between the black of the dress and the black of the background is just discernable. This can be done by careful lighting, but here you'd need to make some Photoshop adjustment.
Another great shot of Olivia... really like the tight crop and the wonderful eye contact. I agree with John above regarding the "buttons" - actually polka dots on the dress/top - and the need to separate the model from the background and can be easily dealt with in Photoshop. Another thing to be aware of when using a two light setup like you have, is the issue of dual catch-lights in the eyes. Although it doesn't bother me, there are some who consider this to be a "technical error" in studio photography, so I thought I should mention it.
Keep up the good work
Paul
Comparing this one with Olivia number 1 , I think it seems that Olivia has more "breathing space" in the first shot.
It could be also good though to try an even tighter crop that includes eyes, lips and hair.
I like the colour in both.
Hi Tracey,
Another nice shot. I actually like the mouth slightly open in the last shot, - but its just a personal [reference.
A few comments and suggestions: Look at the camera right side of her face by her jaw line; theres either some dark hair following the precise contour of her face, or more likely a strong shadow. This should go.
You mau have applied some skin softening (?) and if so, you also applied it to her eyes, lips and hair, theyre not sharp enough.
The double cathclights are common and not an issue, much better than before.
There too much red in the skin, and the lips are particularly over saturated. (Might be the model, not your shooting!) To see this, open curves, click the drop down by the RGB box, select red, and look at that histogram crowding up against the right. Thats over saturation in the red channel whic cause colours to bleed over pixel boundaries and lose detail. As you can see, her lips have not detail at all.
Loaded a mod to compare,
regards
Willie
The lighting's pretty good, exposure and composition are fine and the model's attractive.
My problem? It looks "over Portrait Professional'd ..." ie over the top in terms of skin smoothing. She looks plastic. There is no texture whatsoever to her skin - no lines, no wrinkles..no character.
A little less processing would be better IMHO.
Nick
Hi All
Thank you for your time in commenting on this image. I haven't used Portrait Professional, although I have used a technique in photoshop to smooth out the skin, maybe I over did it a bit. I sharpened the hair, eyes and lips separately, leaving the skin diffused, maybe I didn't sharpen them enough. I'll have another go at it.
Thanks again for your comments and feedback.
Best Wishes
Tracey
Excellent portrait Tracey, love the Hair the Skin Tone and expression.
John 
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