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This wedding took place on a particularly hot day, and in the midday sun. Becky had become really overheated and flustered so she sat down here just for a break.
I took this shot of her and asked her to look towards the window to give more light to her face. I love the shot and so does she, but my own critique raises the following:
I should have removed the cushions under her right arm.
I should have ensure her feet weren't resting on the train.
I wish I had included more of the room above her OR should I crop in tighter? Can't quite decide on that one.
Comments welcomed,
Trudy

Camera:Canon EOS 5D
Lens:Canon 24-105
Recording media:JPEG (digital)
Title:Take a breath
Username:trivets12 trivets12
Uploaded:25 Aug 2009 - 4:44 PM
Tags:Black & white, Digitally manipulated, Fashion, Portraits / people, Wedding / social
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KathyW
KathyW  111793 forum posts Norfolk Island12 Constructive Critique Points
25 Aug 2009 - 4:57 PM

Lovely shot with great lighting.
Bit small to see much detail, but the cushions look fine to me. The left side of the pic looks a bit messy though, but that may be just because of the black bg?

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Carl40
Carl40  8 United Kingdom
25 Aug 2009 - 5:07 PM

I do not think the cushion is under the arm is a problem however I do find the cushion near the head a bit distracting, also the cloth coming in to the picture on the right hand side i would remove as for the feet i can't really see very well.
But all said & done you have captured a wonderful image with good tones.

Carl

Last Modified By Carl40 at 25 Aug 2009 - 5:09 PM

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angej
angej  10477 forum posts United Kingdom
25 Aug 2009 - 5:08 PM

It's all very well to say these things in hindsight when you have the luxury of time looking at your shotsSmile Lovely shot, a tad small to see any real detail. I think I would have cropped the lhs a bit just to get rid of the curtain and maybe have positioned myself slightly higher on a small ladder to see a bit more down onto the dress but apart from that, nicely doneSmile

Ange

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peg  7 United Kingdom1 Constructive Critique Points
26 Aug 2009 - 11:31 PM

Bet she loved this shot, though. So no need to be 'glass half empty' about it.

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OneBigContradiction

I love it!

Helen

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