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i wase inmy dads garden he was saying something was eating is apples

Camera:Konica Minolta Dynax 5D
Lens:macro
Recording media:JPEG (digital)
Title:my lunch
Username:winner0007 winner0007
Uploaded:16 Mar 2009 - 9:02 AM
Tags:Wildlife / nature
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CathR
CathR  7139 forum posts United Kingdom563 Constructive Critique Points
16 Mar 2009 - 12:25 PM

This is a nice photo David but I think it could be a bit sharper. I have uploaded a mod where I have applied a bit of sharpening and cloned out the blemish on the apple. I have also cropped it a bit to focus in on the action, but I have maintained the proportions of the original.

Best wishes

Catherine

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pamelajean
pamelajean Critique Team 8769 forum postspamelajean vcard United Kingdom1596 Constructive Critique Points
16 Mar 2009 - 5:42 PM

Well, David, this is far better than your last snail picture, so well done. Here you have the apple and stalk to create a nice composition and to put the snail into some context. I like the way you have only included part of the apple, so that all attention is on the snail. I also think you used dof to good effect here, and your background is far from distracting. I think the snail is a bit too central, and would have cropped some from the left. I see you used a macro lens, and that has made a lot of difference. I think you are definitely on the right track.
Pamela.

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Davesumner
17 Mar 2009 - 1:30 PM

I like the idea but I don't think that you have quite got this right. I think that we need to see more of the snails face so to speak to make it a little more than a snail shell and give it some character. Also I don't think that you need to have the entire apple in the shot.

The image needed some sharpening and levels adjusting which I have done and uploaded.

Hope this helps

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