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just clues on what this picture is lacking and any c/c are welcome thanks

Camera:Nikon D7000 Check out Nikon Nation!
Lens:Nikon 18-105mm AF-S DX Nikkor f3.5-5.6 G ED VR Check out Nikon Nation!
Recording media:RAW (digital)
White Balance:As Shot
Title:catch me if you can
Username:yamahaman yamahaman
Uploaded:21 Dec 2012 - 12:18 AM
Tags:Portraits / people
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ErictheViking
ErictheViking e2 Member 1124 forum postsErictheViking vcard Scotland102 Constructive Critique Points
21 Dec 2012 - 9:59 AMConstructive Critique!This comment was flagged as constructive critique! 

Hi Robert, Firstly to give you the advice on the picture we do need the information especially aperture, shutter speed, ISO and lens settings. Without those it is hard to give definitive advice but I wioll give some pointers.
To start well done on the subject, I think its really good and well composed. Was it a spontaneous shot or did you plan what you wanted to take?

How to improve your shot - think about what you want to photograph. In this shot its easy, it's the kids and the fountain with its kids sculpture. So I would suggest a much tighter crop to remove the unnecessary parts of the shot ie the bulk of the trees and balance the space on each side of the shot ie the distance on the left from the fountain edge to the edge of the shot should equal the distance on the right from the child to the edge of the shot. I've uploaded a mod which demonstrates what I am suggesting. I also think the shot could benefit from a little more contrast and I did this by adjusting the levels histogram in the editing software. If you don't have editing software you can download a free program called GIMP or buy a program the most popular being PhotoShop Elements and PhotoShop (Photoshop is a very expensive program and Elements gives you the main needed controls).

That would be my advice for this specific shot, however it would be improved if you moved closer with using your lens at about 18-25mm and using an aperture of about f/3.0 to f/5 this will blur the background and focus the viewer on the topic of the shot. This is why we need the information about the lens settings.

You took this shot in RAW which means you can make lots of adjustments with your Raw processing software. Learn to use Ae (A) as your main shot setting as this allows you to easily fix the aperture and the camera will control the speed for the chosen ISO.

Overall this was a really nice touching shot which tells a story well done Grin and I hope you find my advice helpful.

Eric GrinGrin

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yamahaman
yamahaman  2 United Kingdom
21 Dec 2012 - 12:51 PM

thanks for your mod and advice Eric. it was just a candid shot not set up I was just in the park and saw it take place.
As you say the crop does work better been tighter thanks

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pamelajean Critique Team 8754 forum postspamelajean vcard United Kingdom1587 Constructive Critique Points
21 Dec 2012 - 4:14 PM

I think it's charming, Robert, two children either side of the sculpture of two children. The park environment and the flowers add to its charm.
I think you did well, considering it was a candid shot.
I agree about eliminating some of the background, though.
I like it a lot, and would not want to deny its attraction, but you ask what the picture is lacking. I think that ideally the children could be interacting in some way with the sculpture, either looking up at it, pointing at it, or generally showing some interest in it. However, I realise that this may never have happened, even if you had waited a long time, so you got what you could at the time.
Pamela.

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banehawi
banehawi Critique Team 10817 forum postsbanehawi vcard Canada2820 Constructive Critique Points
21 Dec 2012 - 5:36 PM

All of the above, plus: The colour balance is too cool, - needs to be warmer for a sunny day like this; it need to be leveled with a slight rotation clock wise. Mod also loaded.

Its a nice and cute candid, and if it involves your kids or relatives, its a keeper as a nice memory.



Regards


Willie

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paulbroad
paulbroad  781 forum posts United Kingdom845 Constructive Critique Points
22 Dec 2012 - 9:09 AM

I like it. It is a bit cool, but otherwise a nice amusing slice of life. If you crop the sides, the kids will be too near the edge. The only way you could crop and retain composition is if the kids were closer together.

Paul

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Davesumner
24 Dec 2012 - 3:52 AM

Hi Robert,

Had a quick look at your PF and you are not a stranger to taking good shots, there are some great ones in there. For me though this isn't one of those, it lacks engagement with the children and seems more like a grab shot to show that the kids were at the gardens rather than a shot about the kids catching each other. I would think that getting in much closer and catching the kids as they are facing you rather than away so we can see some excitement and joy on their faces.

Sorry to be a little negative but you did ask what was lacking

PS, that 'Moors' shot in your PF is great Wink

DaVeS

Last Modified By Davesumner at 24 Dec 2012 - 3:55 AM

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