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Erika

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From a Photoshoot in Glasgow with Erika Summer

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TanyaH Plus
18 1.3k 411 United Kingdom
12 Sep 2016 11:55AM
I love the choice of mono - that works beautifully.

If I had to change anything, I'd say you need more space in front of her face and less behind. Mostly, so that the elbow isn't cut off on the right of the image (and 'they' always say to allow space for the gaze to look into Grin). Similarly, the facial features seem a fraction softer than the hair across her shoulder or laying over her back (which could well be an optical illusion because of the light).

If I hold my hand over the left side of the image, up to the V where the bicep and rising forearm meet at the bottom edge, the image feels more coherent and complete. It's a lovely back, don't get me wrong, and those wisps of hair are beautiful. But I think the lighter back stops the viewer travelling across the image into the darker areas on the right, if that makes sense.

I hope you don't mind that input?

T
12 Sep 2016 1:51PM
Hi Tanya,
No I don't mind that input at all - the picture is imperfect in my mind for all the reasons you suggest .

It was a particularly testing shoot because the model was very new ( we all have to learn) and nor first shoot together, and needed a great deal of direction, I was actually very grateful to her for coming at short notice as I had the studio booked and another model let me down with little notice, so I am not complaining. But I was also using a new camera for the first time in the studio - a rangefinder system and struggling with learning the parameters of what would and would not fit in the frame and then appear in the image . That explains the room on the right, there wasn't enough . Easy to deal with just don't crop so tight in camera!

The softness on the face is an illusion. I saw it too but then put the file under a loupe, and it is razor sharp over the eyes which was my focus point and I was shooting at f11 so there should be good depth of field any way . If the light was balanced across the the face as fellas the shoulder then it would lead in - my view, it doesn't quite for the reasons you suggest .

I kind of knew you would spot that lot and you did !

Steve
TanyaH Plus
18 1.3k 411 United Kingdom
12 Sep 2016 3:22PM
Okay, so ...

- Inexperienced model
- First shoot together
- New camera with a rangefinder system
- Studio-based environment

Flippin' heck, Steve - you know how to challenge yourself, doncha?! Given all of that, I may have been a little tough in the comment above Grin It's one of those images that, with a couple of tweaks, could be an absolute stunner.

I shall now retreat into my dark, safe corner ... Wink

T

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