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A Day At The Beach

By Phanuel
Hermosa Beach California

Tags: Landscape and travel

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dudler Plus
18 1.7k 1879 England
3 Jul 2021 10:37AM
Welcome to the Critique Gallery, Ivan.

It's possible that you didn't intend loading the image for critique - if not, please let us know. Here, you only get thoughtful critique, comments and possibly options rather than votes or awards. If you just want people to see your work, you need to make sure that you don't tick the 'Critique wanted' box when you upload.

Alternatively, if you do want us to look at your picture as critically as possible, and in detail, we need more information from you. If we're going to give you the best feedback that we possibly can, we need real input from you, including a lot more information. That way, the critique that we give is far more likely to be what you are looking for, and consequently far more helpful to you. Please think about the following questions:

What is your reason for requesting critique?
What inspired you to take this photo?
What were you hoping to achieve?
Do you feel that you succeeded or failed?
Are there any specific elements of your photo that you want help with?
Do you want advice on camera settings, processing, composition, or something else?
Do you have any particular questions you would like answered?

Without that data, it's only possible to offer limited comments. This is a nice view, making use of beautiful clouds and waves. You've placed the horizon well, and it's level - though some distortion in your lens has bowed the sea/sky border a bit.

One suggestion, although it hasn't adversely affected this image, is that you move away from Program mode and try Aperture priority. The lens aperture that you choose governs the depth of field (front to back sharpness), and that would matter if the whole of the subject wasn't as distant as it is here.

And if you want more critique, please give us more information: and if not, please let us know.
mrswoolybill Plus
14 3.0k 2462 United Kingdom
3 Jul 2021 11:10AM
Welcome from me too!

First I'll echo two points in John's comment above.

a) We need to hear more from you - you will have seen a pop-up message when you ticked the critique box, and you will have received a personal message from the site after uploading, explaining how the Critique Gallery works. You should also look at the CG home page , which has advice to uploaders, and a link to FAQs. Critique works best when we have a conversation.

And b) I agree with John about program mode, it leaves too much decision-making to the camera. The camera has a good brain but absolutely no imagination or intuition. It doesn't even know what you are photographing. Take greater control and you can, for example, make a plus or minus adjustment to exposure to cope with particular circumstances. Here a small plus compensation would prevent the underexposure which has occurred because the bright sun tricked the camera into underexposing on everything else.

And two further points -

Exposure is much easier if you avoid views that include the sun!

And remember that when you use wide angle it pushes the view into the distance, makes the subject tiny in the frame. Unless you have strong foreground interest that is difficult to compose for. There's an awful lot of wasted space in the frame. Wide angle has also created some distortion, if you look closely you will see that the sea horizon dips in the middle!

One big plus for me by the way - having the diagonal of the water's edge rise from the bottom left corner. Very satisfying!

Now it's over to you. How do you see this?
Regards,
Moira

3 Jul 2021 12:29PM
Thank you both, itís been a while since I went out and shot and having issues remembering my basics. In this photo I was trying to capture the sun in the waves in a way that it would look like a trail. I will try and shoot in aperture priority next time. Iím hoping to get help remembering what I learned in school and hopefully increasing the knowledge to be a better photographer. Again thank you Moira and dudler.
3 Jul 2021 12:30PM
Forgot to mention I was using a UV filter on my lens.
dark_lord Plus
17 2.8k 784 England
3 Jul 2021 3:01PM
Welcome from me too.

Quote:I was trying to capture the sun in the waves in a way that it would look like a trail.

And you do have that. The waves break it up into three patches of light which is attractive (and odd numbers of things often look better). That said, it depends on what sort of 'trail' you want, a calmer sea will ive a more continuous trail, so it's worth visitng in different conditions. Hanging around a beach, photography can be hard wor!

Moving on from that, I have some tweaks and suggestions.
I adjusted the Levels by bringing in the black point by a small amount to give full black tones.
I used the Shadows/Highlights tool to open up the shadow areas of the beach and the sea. If you want to retain some mystery and mood you can ignore this step, or at least not go as far.

While the sun isn't actually setting, the image does look cold, so I've warmed the coloiur balance. Alternatively you could make it look colder to ive an impression of moonlight albeit in reality moonlight is pretty close to daylight in colour terms.
I slightly tweaked the contrast for extra sparkle on the water.

I cropped this to remove some sky that wasn't contributing too much to the image so the trail on the water becomes more prominent.
Talking of croppimg, you oul crop from the left so the pioer occupies more of the frame and again make more of the trail. A portrait format crop is another possibility.

My second mod darkens the sky and lightens the foreground further. I used feathered Selections and individual adjustments. Just another possibility.

Finally, because there's not a lot of colour in the scene, and it's all about light and shade, a mono version.

Ad well done for getting the horizon level, believe it or not there are people who don't notice sloping horizons.
3 Jul 2021 5:23PM
Thank you dark_lord I will pay more attention next time I edit
banehawi Plus
17 2.5k 4272 Canada
4 Jul 2021 5:32PM
Some nice detail in the waves.

The lens has quite a pronounced distortion at this focal length, (the sea horizon bends downwards in the middle).

Ive uploaded a mod that corrects this, with a 16:9 crop lacing the horizon on a third at the expense of some of the beach. A touch warmer.

May the Fourth be with you!

Regards


Willie
5 Jul 2021 2:35PM
Thank you at banehawi

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