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A Lonely soul

By purnendu14
Critique please.....

Tones, Frame, how this picture can be more presentable.

Thanks

Tags: Lonely Wildlife and nature lonelybird

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mrswoolybill Plus
13 2.3k 2265 United Kingdom
15 Aug 2020 8:21AM
Hello again! This really is a delightful image, it's a case of the 'photographer's eye', seeing the picture that is available from the scene...

I assume that a tripod was used? If not you have commendably steady hands...

Thanks for asking some very specific advice. We are not seeing details of how you set the camera, but this looks a bit underexposed on my screen, the sky looks murky and muddy. The first thing that I did was to add half a stop exposure, some added brightness and a boost to whites.

Next framing and presentation - here we come to the potential for different crops. I see two things to consider. First, you have opted for central placement, which has a formal elegance. You have been careful over placing the subject in your previous uploads, so I assume that this is deliberate. But there are other options, placing the bird to the right will give the sense of it looking into the sky.

Secondly, the tangle of twigs and branches is a bit confusing, particularly as there are cut-off bits bottom left and right, not connected to the main branches.

I don't know what software you are using. I have uploaded three suggested crops, I think all concentrate better on the relationship between the bird and the sky, and simplify the tangle of twigs. There are more bits at the bottom that I could have got rid of, but I tried not to stray too far from the original. (The clone tool or the spot healing brush will remove odd bits, if you want to). I think all the crops create slightly different 'stories'.

Finally, just as a comparison, I flipped the third crop horizontally. Look how much difference it makes to have the bird looking from left to right...

Regards,
Moira
15 Aug 2020 8:41AM
I like this image a lot, your title tells us what you were trying to achieve, and I think you have succeeded.

The image, on my screen, looks quite sharp and well focussed, and I can't see any technical issues. Of course, members of the Critique Team may spot something I've missed.

I shall upload a mod. It isn't intended as an improvement, but merely as a different version of your idea.
I used Photoshop Elements to make my changes...
Firstly I changed the colour of the sky by using the eye-dropper tool and clicking on an area not far from the sun.
Then I tried to make the image simpler by removing many of the branches, which I think makes the image more direct and less confusing to the eye. I did that using the spot healing tool.
Then I cropped the image to move the subject off centre, and finally added a thin white border.

I hope you like what I've done. As I said... not necessarily better, just different.

Regards
Alan
dudler Plus
17 1.3k 1693 England
15 Aug 2020 8:50AM
Alan used the words 'not necessarily better, just different' of his mod, and those words ring very true to me.

This is lovely as it stands, and I'd be considering a user award in the main gallery.

It's quite dark, but that conjures up a particular sort of dusk in my mind, when everything is dim and fading to black. There's potential for a lot of different crops, and for cloning out branches, but pure and simple works well.

Remember, that for some wildlife competitions, cloning and other more intrusive editing are banned.

Beautiful work.
pamelajean Plus
14 1.4k 2156 United Kingdom
15 Aug 2020 3:13PM
Very nicely handled, Purnendu.

I like Moira's brightening of the image and the different crops.
Looking at your original, the bird is perched on a part of the tree that has its complete branches inside the frame, but the other branches have no origins shown and are simply acting as distractions.
The image is clean and simple, perhaps you could call it minimalist, and works extremely well without those extra branches intruding into the frame.
That's why I find Alan's modification satisfying.

With these few adjustments to the image, I think it would do well in the main gallery.

Pamela.

chase Plus
15 1.8k 438 England
15 Aug 2020 3:22PM
A well seen sillhouette against what looks like an evening sky, difficult to judge without the complete exif.
I like Alans mod with the messy twigs removed from the bottom, a much 'cleaner' frame and I also like Moiras flipped mod, so all I did was combine the two.The bird them looks to the right of the frame.
Just be careful of the slight light halos around the darker branches, could be down to either sharpening, size reduction for the display here or a crop.

Depends what you would use the image for as to what post processing you would use, if any, it would be nice to see the original, before you did anything to it and perhaps the rest of the exif data.
banehawi Plus
16 2.3k 4162 Canada
15 Aug 2020 3:29PM
If you have an original before processing, it would be nice to compare; you can upload it here by clicking the modifications button and selecting upload. As it is its an attractive image; theres some banding in the sky, and a slight halo around the bird that are related to post processing.


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miptog 14 3.6k 64 United Kingdom
17 Aug 2020 10:05AM
This image has numerous possibilities in post, both in terms of framing, and colour and tone. This has been demonstrated in the uploaded mods. It would also be interesting to see what the image would look like by cloning out several of the branches. This has also been suggested in one of the mods. A very close crop of just the sun with bird may also work well. One of those images that you could come back to again and again and created something new. If you would care to, it would be nice to see what the original unprocessed image was like.

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