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A pleasant pause

By Mavis
Been a dreadful day with high winds all day even when the sun came out for a time , then down came the rain very heavy . What could I do ? Hmm , every day I look at the photo of my beautiful mother .... so .... I thought I'd do a still life . So hard to get it right . What do you think ?

Tags: Still life General Wine Pearls My Mother

Voters: bobsblues, Badgerfred, CarolG and 23 more

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bobsblues 8 10 2 United Kingdom
11 Jul 2012 7:39PM
I think its a wonderful still life Mavis wonderful tones and colours well done .

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CarolG 11 199 20 Greece
11 Jul 2012 7:43PM
A lovely still life, Mavis, and the photo of your mother is charming. The bottle could be straightened a little, though. Carol
paskinmj 9 11 1 United Kingdom
11 Jul 2012 7:49PM
Nicely composed and well executed image.
Mavis Plus
16 143 2 England
11 Jul 2012 8:02PM
HIC ! What did you say CarolWink
pablophotographer 6 935 334
11 Jul 2012 8:26PM
Hello Mavis.

I believe your picture has lots of room for improvement. Almost everyone who would like to give you advice would be glad to have the metadata of your picture, please remember to tick the boxes which let the site have access to this information and it appears in the Exif part as it is called here.

I would attempt to shoot it with a plain background. If this one is from a window I would have pulled the curtain behind it to eliminate the eyes wondering about and focus rather on the objects you want to present.

I would also try to find some colour similarities to compliment the objects shot, a silver frame, a white pearl necklace, a crystal glass, a black bottle of wine and a wooden table is a combination that instead of unifying, disintegrates your picture. My best suggestion since they can not hover on the air, is to place them on a silver(ish) tray or if you would date, make use of that curtain as a seemless background and base, by spreading it on the table surface.

you can also change your height of shooting. sit down, keep it level, allow for the height of the bottle to be clearly seen and appreciated. Your camera's flash reflected harsly on the glass of the bottle. You could use a diffuser, a piece of napkin held with an elastic would suffice I think. Better, you could get rid of the flash altogether and try to use a wide aperture, to allow more light to be ecorded in your camera's sensor. Or you could have increased the sensitivity, the ISO information and the aperture would have appeared in the Exif data.

You may had drunk of the bottle content until you take this pic, ( I can't guarantee when the sun will come out) but I think you would be much more pleased.

Best regards
11 Jul 2012 10:44PM
I like it Mavis. Lovely capture
9 10 10 England
11 Jul 2012 11:07PM
Still life can be so difficult Mavis but my eye was drawn straight away to the lovely photograph of your Mother.
Did the pearls belong to her? I give you 10/10 for attempting this exercise - mine usually end up in the bin.Sad
taggart Plus
13 47 13 United States
11 Jul 2012 11:57PM
So luck to have this lovely image of your mother sitting in that wonderful frame.!

Lots to be absorbed from your critique person-- Well, I learned a lot!

I hope you have a better day tomorrow weather wise!
netta1234 6 382 2 Wales
12 Jul 2012 6:49AM
I like it Mavis,The sun is out here today
pascalg Plus
10 37 France
12 Jul 2012 7:18AM
nicely composed
can't see any difference between #1 & #2 ?
fentiger Plus
16 918 24 England
12 Jul 2012 7:19AM
An inspired idea to create a still life study in tribute to your Mother, it is pleasant to view and you have received some good advice on how to improve it. The main thing however is does it convey what you wanted to convey and are you happy with it?

pablophotographer 6 935 334
12 Jul 2012 12:32PM
Thank you for the good comments on my critique Taggart and Fentiger, if you feel it was indeed helpful remember to nominate it as Constructive Critique. I may not be very as well as I want to be able to take good pictures pictures but I am happy to make others to improve theirs. Knowledge should be shared for the benefit of everyone, I think.
Joline Plus
11 30 53 United States
12 Jul 2012 1:03PM
A wonderful tribute to your mother, who is indeed a lovely lady.
TrevBatWCC Plus
9 12 12 England
12 Jul 2012 6:21PM
Well, it looks good just as it is to me, Mavis, despite various suggestions. Everything's sharp where it needs to be, it's correctly exposed and the colour balance is fine - as long as it pleases you, that's the main thing Wink A fine tribute to your mum Smile
After much toggling though, I can't see any difference between V1 & V2!
Trev Smile
Mavis Plus
16 143 2 England
12 Jul 2012 8:33PM
Thanks Trev . Glad you like it . Was sat down while I took it WinkNo you wont find any differance between the two they are the same Doh. I found if I ever took the second one off the first one went as well and all your lovely comments xx
bunbeam 12 2 United Kingdom
12 Jul 2012 9:34PM
Mari 14 1.8k United Kingdom
12 Jul 2012 11:31PM
What a wonderful pic of your Mother Maeve... very precious.. really like your still life (hope you drunk it afterwards Wink )

Mari xxx
13 Jul 2012 8:22AM
A lovely piece of work with nice depth of colour Mavis, and what a gorgeous looking Woman your Mother was.

John SmileX

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