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After the Fire

By Shamley
There used to be a wooden boardwalk - photo intended to show the sad result.Sad
And draw the eye towards some remains.
ISO 400
F8 - for best definition
1/160 sec
Centre Weighted
Step Focussed

Tags: Fire Surrey Black and white Countryside

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mrswoolybill Plus
14 2.9k 2455 United Kingdom
23 Nov 2020 1:19PM
Welcome back to the Critique Gallery. First of all I very much prefer this to your previous burned woodland CG upload. This has real atmosphere, rather than pasted on atmosphere.

It's a good strong b&w conversion. It looks to be sensibly taken, except that even hand-holding at 25 mm I think that unless you have particularly wobbly hands a slightly slower shutter speed would have been safe with careful holding, enabling a lower ISO. But that's a minor matter.

My quibble is over the composition which somehow doesn't quite work for me. The main tree is very central, effectively blocking the frame, and it's not really clear whether we are being led left to right, as is natural to the eye, or right to left.

I've taken some liberties. I've uploaded a modification, flipped horizontally and with extra canvas space sketched in very crudely, to give a clearer left to right diagonal leading from the bottom left corner. The proportions aren't quite satisfactory, but it's there for comparison. When composing a landscape image it's important to consider how to invite the viewer into the frame, and how you want us to explore it. There needs to be a point of entry, a route and a destination. Does that make any sense at all??

By the way, if you don't use save for web the site should pick up your Exif automatically, avoiding the need to type it in.
Moira
chase Plus
16 2.2k 578 England
23 Nov 2020 3:50PM
Some nice tones here and I like your subjects.
Perhaps a lower POV may have shown the old boardwalk a little better as that seems to be the main subject from your description.

That's a cracking mod from Moira, one, I don't think I would improve on or better.
dudler Plus
18 1.7k 1877 England
23 Nov 2020 10:13PM
I have a couple of queries, having read the two previous critiques, and your notes. I wonder if 'step focussing' means that you stacked multiple frames?

Please let us know: that might explain the lack of embedded EXIF data, if you've combined several frames.

You write that you used f/8 for best definition: if you're using the Olympus 25mm f/1.8, sharpness peaks at f/4, and falls significantly beyond f/5.6 according to the EPZ test HERE.

I agree with Moira about lovely tones and interesting composition, and i like Janet's suggestion of a lower viewpoint. I'd also like to suggest a couple of steps back, and checking the straightness of the frame. The tree in the centre looks a little cramped, just touching the top of the frame, and I'd like to see a little more of the sinuous silver birch on the right. It looks to me as if the image is just very slightly tilted to the left - look at the stand of very straight trees on the right.

Overall, this shows just how much pictorial potential there is in a landscape that many people would walk straight past.

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