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afternoon nap

By williamsloan
i took this in Polis last year,did a few mods but not happy with it.

Tags: Portraits and people

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mugshotmyk 4 3 9 United Kingdom
8 Apr 2012 11:23AM
Clearly there was a photo here, but in honesty your angle was not the best. You ought to have moved to your left a few paces and shown us his face. There is much to like about this image, and I like the toning, but I guess the verdict has to be: could have done better.

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Irishkate Plus
5 33 94 United Kingdom
8 Apr 2012 11:27AM
Sepia works better.Take on board above advice.Points for asking fo crit.That's the way we learn.Grin
mhfore 9 6 176 England
8 Apr 2012 12:05PM
Morning Billy,

I like the sepia version it's one of those images that works well that way instead of colour in my opinion. I'm not sure what you are not happy with, the composition or the sepia effect? Compositionaly it may have worked better if taken facing the subject more and trying to capture the shadow from the cap falling over his face. If it's the sepia which your not happy with and feel it's still a little bit soft then a bit of added contrast may work, try adding around 20 - 25% and maybe darken by around 4%. The way I did the mod was the same as some of your colour images which is make a copy and then in blend modes click overlay and reduce the opacity until your happy, it's makes more subtle changes than just altering the contrast.

Take care

Martin
pamelajean Plus
10 951 1799 United Kingdom
8 Apr 2012 6:24PM
I like the original colour version, Billy. I think the blue of the plastic chair adds a lot to the image. I keep wondering, however, why he is on a plastic chair when there is a bench right thereWink. I am going to differ with others here, because I like the angle from which you took the shot. It's the lines of the man, and the totally relaxed attitude that I like.
I would rather have seen some more space on the left side, and less on the right side, simply because that's the way the man is facing.
One thing that spoils it for me, and keeps pulling my eye, is the white area top left.
I have used your colour version, version 2, for my modification. I cropped the right side and added canvas to the left, then cloned some of the wall into the white area, eliminating the other bench at the same time. I have to admit to sweeping up some debris on the ground as well. After that, I gave it a boost with a levels adjustment.
I'd like to have seen more space at the bottom, too, and the bottoms of the blue chair legs. My second mod has a bit of added canvas, just to show you what a square format would look like, but I didn't clone in the detail because I knew I'd get the shapes of the legs wrongTongue.
Pamela.

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