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Alanna

By peakimage      
An atmospheric portrait of my daughter Alanna, This image has featured in The TPA 200 Faces exhibition touring the UK this year and has also just been awarded the RPS Ribbon in the 2012 International Projected Image Exhibition, Rated as one of the top 15 images in the general cat.

Tags: Rps Portraits and people

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stuart1963 5 272 United Kingdom
22 Oct 2012 10:53AM
StrikingSmile

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paulbroad 9 123 1150 United Kingdom
22 Oct 2012 4:15PM
And you are putting this in a critique section? Your notes almost dare us to pass comment!

It is very very good indeed. Difficult to say otherwise. On a puerly subjective basis, I would prefer a slightly less warm brown. This is a very warm sepia, would personally cool it down a bit as a better foil to the subject.

Paul
iancrowson Plus
7 211 146 United Kingdom
22 Oct 2012 9:03PM
Yes a striking image of a child who looks desperately in need of a few early nights if not medical attention. I hope you made her up for photo. The heavy shadow under her chin adds to the drama. If you hope that your career in photography will include child portrait work
you best do a bit more work.
But as Paul says, good image.
Ian
banehawi Plus
12 1.6k 3655 Canada
23 Oct 2012 12:13AM
Its very nice. I assume you did not intend to post it for Critique.

And welcome to Ephotozine, enjoy the site.


regards


Willie
paulbroad 9 123 1150 United Kingdom
23 Oct 2012 8:25AM
Just realised, I think it's full colour, not sepia. Sorry about that. In which case, the general comment about being very warm still applies.

Paul
NEWMANP Plus
9 1.6k 574 United Kingdom
23 Oct 2012 3:21PM
well since i had an acceptance in there at least im not afraid to comment.

welcome to epz, great place for all abilities.
this is clearly bang on vouge for national and international salons however im not terribly sure that there are too many on epz that take part. that said there are notable exceptions and several who regularly win medals and ribbons on the psa and fiap circuits.

in terms of a child portrait it started life as an intentionally disturbing image and has been futher processed either by efex or tone mapping for the slight 3 d effect. excellent though it is for me its a little warm and i think i may have gone the more desaturated pale faced route but hey this one took the award.

its good creative posing and process. enjoyed seeing it, it stood out a yard on the thumb and i look forward to seeing more of your work.


Phil
parob 6 3 74 France
23 Oct 2012 5:16PM
Could become a great portrait with a few changes. As it stands, it is too posterized, thus creating very strong details and making the skin and clothing appear unatural. Flash photography is not easy if not controlled. Here, the flash catches the hair and creates a shadow in the chin region. Yet, it appears that hair, eyes and the child's expression are key features. Cleaning up the shadow with the clone tool in PS is simple. Leave out the ornamentation, no special effects. On the other hand, you must tone down the overall brightness. Hair sharpeness is just fine. Eventually, you will have an excellent portrait of your daughter. Good luck.
peakimage 4 1 United Kingdom
23 Oct 2012 11:13PM
Hi Everyone

I am new to this site and did not mean to put this image in critique, any how I am always open to peoples opinion. Grin

Paul Broad thx for the comments, I know its a little warm but thats how i like it. personal pref I suppose.

Ian Crowson / The image came as a result of a new speed light coming in the post, boy's being boy's my daughter endured about 1hr of me following her about the house taking her picture, this was the last image I took, the look on her face says she was tired of being the subject of my new gadget. To say she needs medical attention is a bit harsh and offensive, took it on the chin tho no drama

NEWMANP / Phil congrats on your acceptance, which exhibition? comments as I said b4 always welcome and taken onboard.

PS Nice port Grin

Paul
iancrowson Plus
7 211 146 United Kingdom
24 Oct 2012 2:34AM
Paul
I APOLOGISE.
i most certainly did not mean to be offensive, I very sorry you took it that way. I would expect why you entered the pic for a competition was because you knew it was a striking image. I would expect that it was placed well because it is a hard hitting picture that anyone would take a second look at, the judges did.
Be assured that I was in no way suggesting that you are anything but an excellent parent and I'm sure your daughter is a lovely heathy child. You must surely know what image is presented to the viewer by this photograph?.
You may not realise, being new to using the site, that your boastful description of your photo is unlikely to win you much credibility . There are some amazingly good portfolios on this site but credit is given to the photographers for what photographic work they produce. Not for what they write about their pictures or for the letters after their names.
Ian
NEWMANP Plus
9 1.6k 574 United Kingdom
24 Oct 2012 4:32PM
The rps digital exhibition Paul,

ps i saw this shot of yours last night on the rps bi annual pages
Phil
peakimage 4 1 United Kingdom
25 Oct 2012 12:55PM
Well Done Phill I will loof our for it in the catalogue Grin
Quote:The rps digital exhibition Paul,

ps i saw this shot of yours last night on the rps bi annual pages
Phil

17 Dec 2012 12:12AM
Great portraiture well done!

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