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Welcome to the Critique Gallery.
You've been a member of the site for five years or so, so I imagine that you know what we do here. No votes, no awards, but honest feedback.
If we're going to give you the best feedback that we can, we need some real input from you, including a lot more information. That way, the critique that we give is far more likely to be what you are looking for, and consequently far more helpful to you.
What is your reason for requesting critique?
What inspired you to take this photo?
What were you hoping to achieve?
Do you feel that you succeeded or failed?
Are there any specific elements of your photo that you want help with?
Do you want advice on camera settings, processing, composition, or something else?
Do you have any particular questions you would like answered?
Without that data, it's only possible to offer limited comments, especially on a picture that involves intentional camera movement.
Does it matter whether the horizon is level? I am pretty sure that some processing could improve the impact of the shot quite a bit.
But over to you, first... The more you tell us, the more we can help you.
You've been a member of the site for five years or so, so I imagine that you know what we do here. No votes, no awards, but honest feedback.
If we're going to give you the best feedback that we can, we need some real input from you, including a lot more information. That way, the critique that we give is far more likely to be what you are looking for, and consequently far more helpful to you.
What is your reason for requesting critique?
What inspired you to take this photo?
What were you hoping to achieve?
Do you feel that you succeeded or failed?
Are there any specific elements of your photo that you want help with?
Do you want advice on camera settings, processing, composition, or something else?
Do you have any particular questions you would like answered?
Without that data, it's only possible to offer limited comments, especially on a picture that involves intentional camera movement.
Does it matter whether the horizon is level? I am pretty sure that some processing could improve the impact of the shot quite a bit.
But over to you, first... The more you tell us, the more we can help you.
A warm welcome from me too. It would help to know what you are looking for from the Critique Gallery, and I hope that you will participate in discussion here - that's how the CG works best. Meanwhile however, thanks for describing the circumstances, and what you have done. (It would help to see the original, before your adjustments - but as you say that you adjusted in camera that may not be available. My advice would be to beware of in-camera adjustments. Get the image, then work on it later.)
There is some excellent ICM (intentional camera movement) work on this site, I did a filtered search on the portfolio of a member who does this very well and came up with this selection. I hope the link works as intended. Worth looking at in detail...
I suppose this is not so much ICM as intentional photographer movement... I like the effect a lot, it conveys passing by, the fleeting experience. Half a second well used, you chose your moment well for a strong composition.
ICM works best I think when at least one of two factors is involved. The direction and angle of movement of the camera need to correspond with the lines in the actual scene; and where there are dots of light, the movement needs to create a clear pattern. One of those is satisfied here, there are horizontal lines which correspond with the direction of travel. The dots of light are messy, but I assume that is because the train was not actually travelling smoothly. You couldn't control that...
This was photographed through glass, which will generally darken and dull a scene slightly. You say that you have boosted saturation in camera. I would suggest that that's not the place to start - always start by looking at light adjustments, often adding a bit of brightness will transform the appearance of colour. (The word photography means drawing with light, that's what it's all about.)
I have added a modification, you will find it under the blue modifications button. I added 8% brightness, made a Levels adjustment moving the right hand slider in a tad to boost highlights, and did some very gentle dodging (on highlights), burning (on shadows), huge brush, 3% exposure. I think it gives a better glow to the night sky.
I also rotated and skewed to try to get the horizontals and verticals right. And I got rid of a dark blob in the sea on the left which I suspect was a smear on the window.
Just suggestions, it's a good image well thought out, that will benefit from a few tweaks if you have the software. It's over to you now, we need to know if this is the sort of feedback you are looking for.
Moira
There is some excellent ICM (intentional camera movement) work on this site, I did a filtered search on the portfolio of a member who does this very well and came up with this selection. I hope the link works as intended. Worth looking at in detail...
I suppose this is not so much ICM as intentional photographer movement... I like the effect a lot, it conveys passing by, the fleeting experience. Half a second well used, you chose your moment well for a strong composition.
ICM works best I think when at least one of two factors is involved. The direction and angle of movement of the camera need to correspond with the lines in the actual scene; and where there are dots of light, the movement needs to create a clear pattern. One of those is satisfied here, there are horizontal lines which correspond with the direction of travel. The dots of light are messy, but I assume that is because the train was not actually travelling smoothly. You couldn't control that...
This was photographed through glass, which will generally darken and dull a scene slightly. You say that you have boosted saturation in camera. I would suggest that that's not the place to start - always start by looking at light adjustments, often adding a bit of brightness will transform the appearance of colour. (The word photography means drawing with light, that's what it's all about.)
I have added a modification, you will find it under the blue modifications button. I added 8% brightness, made a Levels adjustment moving the right hand slider in a tad to boost highlights, and did some very gentle dodging (on highlights), burning (on shadows), huge brush, 3% exposure. I think it gives a better glow to the night sky.
I also rotated and skewed to try to get the horizontals and verticals right. And I got rid of a dark blob in the sea on the left which I suspect was a smear on the window.
Just suggestions, it's a good image well thought out, that will benefit from a few tweaks if you have the software. It's over to you now, we need to know if this is the sort of feedback you are looking for.
Moira
