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Anyone for Juice ?

By markst33    
Had this shot in my head for a while and tried a few different times to reproduce it but each time I did I wasn't happy with various aspects of it. Lighting, positioning,etc.

But this was more the shot I had in my head so I am pretty happy with it....even if my wife isn't happy with me giving him a huge knife to hold for it.

Flash on the camera bounced straight up with white card to get the light into the face.


Tags: Portrait Action Child Boy Oranges Humour and fun

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14 May 2020 6:48PM
Technically clever...but maybe better (more believable...!) if the knife was held at a lower position, below the orange...to suggest the result of cutting through it...? good idea though..!
pamelajean Plus
14 1.4k 2162 United Kingdom
14 May 2020 7:27PM
Glad you have come up with something that you feel is something like you imagined.

I think the image would benefit from having a cleaner background, and a closer shot of the child, knife and orange. I can understand that you wanted to depict a kitchen environment, but don't think that's necessary.

As Kevin says, I think the angle of the knife could be improved upon, just so that it looks as if it has just cut through that orange. Obviously the orange halves have been added to the basic picture, and getting it all to gel nicely isn't easy.

It looks like you have copied an orange half, so both pieces are identical but mirrored. I wonder if there might be a better effect if it were a real two halves, and possibly not precisely halved.

At first glance, the image worried me, until I realised the orange was involved. I hope you won't mind me saying that, but I am tending to agree with your wife.

Pamela.
dark_lord Plus
16 2.7k 701 England
14 May 2020 8:34PM
Well thought out and put together Mark.

I'm in agreement of sorts with the positioning of the knife. Lower would be good but conversely raising the position of the orane halves. Either way it brings the knife closer to the object it's cutting.

I like the use of a low angle. It has resulted in us seeing the witring and underside of the cupboards so it could be worth fine tuning positioning and angle.
It's not yur everage fruit knife so it dominates somewhat. so you could try adding some extra fruit halves, perhaps some towards the edges of the frame with just a touch of motion blur.

Those are just some thoughts for taking this further.

I wouldn't discourage a budding young chef.
banehawi Plus
16 2.3k 4172 Canada
14 May 2020 9:05PM
Quite nicely done.

First time I ever heard of an Irish Mammy having an issue with kids and knives..GrinGrinGrin


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Jestertheclown 12 8.3k 253 England
14 May 2020 9:38PM
In case you haven't already, you might like to look at this guy's work;

Jordi Koalitic

It's all a bit cheesy; clichéd perhaps but clever for all that.

In one of those videos, he produces an image very much like yours.
dudler Plus
17 1.3k 1721 England
14 May 2020 10:08PM
As Pamela says, a tighter crop: and knowing that you do PS rather readily, you might want to do some decluttering of the background, as well.

A fine idea, well executed: I'd suggest sorting the knife pointing the wrong way by turning the blade upside down, so it looks like he's caught it with an uppercut. Again, well inside your territory - I'd have to reshoot...
chase Plus
15 1.8k 464 England
14 May 2020 10:26PM
I quite like Johns' tighter crop to remove lots of the kitchen clutter Mark.
A good idea, well thought out.
The Oranges do need to be the 2 halves of 1 orange though to make it even more realistic and with the lower fruit, the knife could do with being the other way round.
A pile of chopped up fruit with a glass on the side maybe or perhaps the chap holding the knife with both hands or even a side view ?
I think you could tidy the bg up to really make him stand out.
chase Plus
15 1.8k 464 England
14 May 2020 10:55PM
I did a mod.
Cloned out the kitchen clutter, cropped much tighter. Added a light vignette to show him off and motion blur on the knife and the oranges.
Just a different way of looking at this, might give you some other ideas ?
mrswoolybill Plus
13 2.3k 2281 United Kingdom
15 May 2020 8:53AM
Your son, I assume. This is terrific fun, for us and I guess for both of you. There are a few things that look 'wrong' to me, so maybe view this as work in progress?

For me it doesn't work to have both your son and the orange halves in sharp focus. I'd rather see the orange halves sharp, the background softer. More natural for the eye, we cannot focus on everything...

We're not seeing the Exif for the background shot, but I'd like to get him to lean forward with the knife, then use wide angle distortion to make the hand and knife proportionally bigger.

You've used the same image for the two orange halves, as a result there's shadow going in both directions.

And finally I think it would work better for me if the orange halves were considerably bigger in the frame, hurtling towards me and about to hit me in the face.

OK I'm off to try that last one...
Moira
markst33 11 69 2 Ireland
15 May 2020 12:41PM
@Moira, I like the bigger oranges alright. That really works well.

I know what you mean about having the knife pointing downwards as if he had just cut through the oranges and believe me I tried to shoot that many many times but could just not get it right as the knife kept blending in. Plus he broke his arm badly a few years ago and as a result when its straight it looks weird cos it bends at a strange angle and that would draw your attention bigtime.

I liked including the kitchen as I wanted to give the impression of a combo of environmental portrait and grabbed shot.

I have added a mod of my own. Changed the colour of T Shirt, added darker sky and lightning and a heavier vignette. I do not like square crops so I have stuck with the landscape oriented option.
mrswoolybill Plus
13 2.3k 2281 United Kingdom
15 May 2020 1:18PM
I like the apocalyptic weather that you have added!

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