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Just Jas Plus
14 26.0k 1 England
30 Apr 2008 8:50AM
Latter day Cinderella? (the broom and general squalor)

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Boyd 13 11.2k 11 Wales
30 Apr 2008 8:52AM
Hard to recognise your front room since you've had a tidy up.

CathyT 10 7.3k 18 United Kingdom
30 Apr 2008 8:53AM
LOL........the hoovers broken. Wink
Richsr Plus
9 91 223 England
30 Apr 2008 8:56AM
Like the lighting and details in this Cathy - well setup and captured.
Regards Richard.
30 Apr 2008 9:03AM
Powerful, enigmatic, beautiful body.

Ali at the hight of his career.

Girl looks good too Grin
CathyT 10 7.3k 18 United Kingdom
30 Apr 2008 9:13AM
Thanks for your comments.....
SteveCharles 13 2.3k 18 England
30 Apr 2008 9:17AM
I thought you meant Cathy, Koen... Wink

Nicely done, this is a really good series. Steve.
30 Apr 2008 9:18AM
"floats like a butterfly and stings like a bee"
"dont be fooled, so does muhammad ali"
great subject , great lighting , nice subject and backround.. can i have her number lol REW
Wooly 11 112 4 England
30 Apr 2008 9:44AM
Excellent shot, very nice bit of light an Ashley.

Tonyd3 12 1.0k 15 United Kingdom
30 Apr 2008 9:47AM
Excellent and very much in the current vogue of portraits
GregorP 11 4 Slovenia
30 Apr 2008 9:48AM
Awesome shot and good exposure! I like it.

imander 9 388 7 United Kingdom
30 Apr 2008 9:52AM
wonderfully composed, really pretty model which contrasts well with the decaying b/g
freybird 10 1 England
30 Apr 2008 10:24AM
Like this and previous upload with the sharp contrast background & subject. Thought the one of the two models was too close making the background distracting rather than interesting as in this shot. Geoff
CathyT 10 7.3k 18 United Kingdom
30 Apr 2008 10:31AM

Quote:Thought the one of the two models

Can you explain again , I don't you mean Holly's shot?
30 Apr 2008 10:42AM
Great image Cathy, well captured.

chris-p Plus
11 65 England
30 Apr 2008 1:07PM
Super shot...the exposure looks spot on ....
Mike Gray 12 382 United Kingdom
30 Apr 2008 1:21PM
Gets my vote Cathy.

Possum 10 148 England
30 Apr 2008 6:19PM
Lovely luminosity on her face.
paulsimmons 9 10 2 England
30 Apr 2008 7:38PM
You cant keep doing this to me shugs, I'm checking every day now to see the new one, Its more addictive than that Jeremy viel programme in the mornings.
I love the Light, the skin tones of the model, the harshness of the room underwriten by the boxer, the size of the brush and how small the spade looks, oh man help....
CathyT 10 7.3k 18 United Kingdom
30 Apr 2008 7:48PM
Thanks new flash gun arrived hopefully I will see a big difference.
Westers 11 3.9k 1 Burkina Faso
1 May 2008 9:55PM
Now this is classy.

And I'm talking about the picture..although she is as well, but she's too young for me Tongue
CathyT 10 7.3k 18 United Kingdom
1 May 2008 10:05PM
Yes, she much to young for you.....18.
Westers 11 3.9k 1 Burkina Faso
1 May 2008 11:13PM
18 ???? Blimey, game on. Wink Tongue
clevercloggs 12 237 2 United Arab Emirates
2 May 2008 4:09AM
good photo, I would prefer a bit more sulk on the face; after all she is sitting in a dusty and dirty environment dressed in a evening gown.

like the way you've placed the light on her face. are the eyes a bit too bright?
Good composition, also the rest of the room is pleasantly lit
CathyT 10 7.3k 18 United Kingdom
2 May 2008 11:12AM
I was using the reflector silver side up...perhaps I should have used the white side....
clevercloggs 12 237 2 United Arab Emirates
3 May 2008 12:59AM
if in relation to my remark on the eyes, the silver side up seems to be the better of the 2 (although not an expert on this).
Does that mean you did not enhance the eyes separately?
CathyT 10 7.3k 18 United Kingdom
3 May 2008 11:18AM
I think the reflector was a bit harsh on her face.....The only think I did to her was slightly darken her whole face as it was lighter than her body...that was it. Didn't touch her eyes , cloned out a few blemishes and put a 20% blur on her skin.

.....a sulky face would work....I'll ask her next time Wink
alwolf 9 341 3 England
3 May 2008 6:13PM
Like the contast with the model and how she is dressed compared with the surroundings.
Simon-Gimson 10 236 1 England
14 May 2008 4:35PM
loving this set

stix 11 924 87 United Kingdom
18 May 2008 7:31PM
Hi Cathy
OK this is a fashion shot, not really my area of expertise, but I would have thought if the idea is to show off the dress to its best advantage, then I'm afraid this is a poor shot.
The pose means the arm is covering the top and sitting down means we cant see how it fits. Also probably too much eye contact if the emphasis is on the dress. See some of Nealís latest shots to see how a dress should be shown.
OK just read your description, its not a fashion shot! Doh!start again.

Hard to know where to place this. This is an environmental portrait , with the twist of a juxtaposition of glamorous girl and shabby setting. Does this work? For me no. Firstly because I think the portrait is poor and the background does not compensate for this.
If the girl was interacting with the background then that might lift it ( you know like playing twisterÖ. ), but she isnít , she could be sitting in a studio.

As a portrait , itís a young pretty girl in a glamorous dress, so Iím going to judge it as a glamorous portrait. Unfortunately I find the pose awkward, Iím not enjoying the defensive crossing of arms over her chest, the extended bony looking hands, which hang away from her body in am uncomfortable looking way. The pose is also hiding her waist which is not very flattering.

As a non glamorous portrait , Iím looking for feeling , emotion , a glimpse into the persons soul. Sorry Cathy Iím getting none of these. What I am getting is a rather blank look which can be enigmatic but in this case looks like boredom.

On a technical note, the right arm is over exposed and I feel you have over whitened her eyes so that they donít appear natural.

On the background, with this type of location shot, the first thing to do is Ďclear the setí and then add back what you want included in the shot. This is good practice.
Now with a clear set, if you had asked is there something missing? What can we add to enhance the look? I doubt very much if the answer would have been , What this shot needs is a shovel and a broom, go and find some.. I find them distracting and unnecessary they are not aesthetically pleasing and add nothing to the narrative ( such as you have one)

The shot has 70 clicks so cant be all bad! Though it doesnít work for me, I have clicked it to encourage you to try again. Next time, have a stronger vision, a narrative, a concept before you get there and enjoy creating that vision, and donít stop until you have it.
CathyT 10 7.3k 18 United Kingdom
18 May 2008 10:18PM

Quote:Next time, have a stronger vision, a narrative, a concept before you get there and enjoy creating that vision, and donít stop until you have it.

Thank you Martin for such an in depth crit...I think the quote above sums up everything I didn't do , hence , why it has not worked. I'm hoping to re shoot at this location so I have plenty to think about and can hopefullt improve it.

Quote:doubt very much if the answer would have been , What this shot needs is a shovel and a broom


You've given me plenty to think about. I've just read this out to Holly so it will hopefully help her too. Thank you.

bliba Plus
10 2 Austria
29 Jul 2008 1:41PM

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