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By shoguntofu
Taken with mobile, filtered with mid level adjustment of contrast in Snapseed.

Tags: Black and white Walkway

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mrswoolybill Plus
14 3.0k 2462 United Kingdom
11 Feb 2020 8:53AM
You have an eye for a story. This is good observation, very well composed. The seated figure creates a sort of reverse L shape in the bottom right corner, he is the focal point and everything flows from him. Conventional composition would place him bottom left, as the lead-in to a 'journey' through the frame from left to right. In the West we read everything, including images, from left to right... Right to left gives a down-beat, reflective mood.

Shoes off, head hidden in his hoodie - we have no ides who he is, what his back story is. He could be a beggar, he could just be tired of the world today. What is important to me is that you stood back and allowed him space, privacy. This does not intrude.

So big pluses. The minuses - well at the risk of repeating myself, massive contrast between light and shadow is difficult for the phone to cope with, and so there will be loss of detail in those shadows. High contrast b&w processing, while it is dramatic, exacerbates that loss of detail, and I think we really do need to see detail in the figure.

I've uploaded a modification. I skewed bottom left out a bit to give a better sense of stability. Then I lightened shadows by 35% (which is way more than I would normally do), darkened highlights by 5% and reduced midtone contrast by 10%. It's an alternative approach. Keep experimenting, see if you can find a happy balance between drama and detail.
Moira
pablophotographer 10 1.9k 411
11 Feb 2020 10:33AM
Hi. Could you please upload the original picture? (upload it as a modification).

Everyone has their biases and style. This is shot in the middle of the day and depending the geographical position the sun would be right above your head. That has two implications... There would not be any directional sun rays as it happens in the morning or the late afternoon or evening. Without such light and without the tube lights on the ceiling being turned on during the day, darker areas would be expected to be dark... Some people have the tendency to expose for longer or brighten up shadows.

The peculiar thing with photography is that you can adjust the shutter speed to allow the aperture of the lens to stay open for longer time. If you think you need more time to expose for longer try to shoot choosing the "fireworks" or "night sky" from the scene modes. What is the make of the phone that you are using? What software does it run?

It is a well framed scene. Exposure and sitting arrangements are personal preferences.

pablophotographer
chase Plus
16 2.2k 584 England
11 Feb 2020 10:45AM
Nicely seen,I do like the seated figure together with his boots on the step. Seems like he doesn't want to be noticed, hence the hoodie pulled right over his face.
I do like Moira mod and have had a go.
Lightened the darks, lots of contrast there that the phone isn't able to cope with.
Straightened
Cropped but I'm not so happy with that, I think Moiras is a better way to go tbh.
Decreased highlights in Camera Raw (Photoshop)
I would guess that Snapseed is fairly basic and the modifications we have done for you are probably not available there.
Too much contrast will turn your subjects into dark spaces with no detail and I think it's really important to shed some light onto the person in the corner.
chase Plus
16 2.2k 584 England
11 Feb 2020 10:53AM
Forgot to add...converted to sRGB colour profile which is the best one for use on the web.
dudler Plus
18 1.7k 1879 England
11 Feb 2020 4:13PM
I'd really like to see the unprocessed original... You always edit in Snapseed, which is an excellent and popular choice for mobile pictures. What I'm not sure is which way you adjust the contrast. Do you delibreately remove most of the midtones?

The more you tell us, the more we can give you in the way of helpful feedback.

I note the chaqnge of format here, and I think it works well.
pablophotographer 10 1.9k 411
11 Feb 2020 5:48PM
Bingo!

Thanks for the original version!

It explains a lot Smile
The lot: The amount of bright areas in the original (not just the grey floors and steps but and the striking white wall) - which are in the frame because of the chosen way of holding the phone vertically, is enough to "fool"the metering system suggesting a moderately shutter speed and low ISO. The ceiling as a result remains dark(-er compared to the ones in the other two modifications).

I like your crop but I could also crop the area below the third step from the level the person sits. It leaves a nice part of wall on the right to get hold of and walk into the image.

If you still want to go dark (or darker compared to others, it is your choice). You can have a style which is more rare than the rest Smile I still have a strikingly harsh black and white film in my camera, I can't say I don't enjoy films with less contrast, it might be a phase of my photographic journey.

pablophotographer
chase Plus
16 2.2k 584 England
11 Feb 2020 6:04PM
Thanks for the original, which in all truth I prefer to your edited version, maybe a crop from the bottom and a straighten would be in order but the exposure seems much better without the added contrast.
pamelajean Plus
15 1.6k 2238 United Kingdom
11 Feb 2020 6:53PM
Hello, Ayie. Thanks for uploading your original, which looks better than your processed version. The whites are less harsh and there is still detail in the dark areas.

Take care when editing, firstly considering just how much work needs to be done, if any. Maybe just a crop and a sharpen? A touch more contrast? Each picture will need to be processed individually, unless you took one straight after the other. So, you did well in the first place.

I also have to say that you did well to see the potential in this shot. The viewer looks beyond the man, but also wonders about his circumstances and why he has taken off his shoes. Is he begging? Is he resting? That adds intrigue. And he is on one side of the frame, allowing the viewer access beyond him.

Pamela.
mrswoolybill Plus
14 3.0k 2462 United Kingdom
12 Feb 2020 6:20PM
I too prefer the original. Your crop was good, but beyond that - don't just look for change for its own sake. Think about the image's power to communicate emotionally, and don't get in the way of that communication.
Moira
dudler Plus
18 1.7k 1879 England
15 Feb 2020 9:37AM
Making an image harsher is always a bit of a risk - it can make a shot more graphic - or it can lose interesting (and sometimes important) detail...

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