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B&W looking for comments

By mswiech
Hey everyone,

Looking for comments and critique on this B&W I took. Looking for area's of improvement as well as what I have done right. Thanks in advance.

Tags: General Black and white Landscape and travel Portraits and people

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User_Removed 6 299 4 France
5 Feb 2011 4:03PM
the exposure, sharpness and processing are excellent....could you have sat the subject in the window space?...especially to one side with her feet on the ledge and knees drawn up?....just an idea!!!

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miptog 10 3.5k 61 United Kingdom
5 Feb 2011 4:13PM
The Black and White conversion is fine. Composition doesn't work well. Either a tighter crop or a full body shot would be better.
CathR 9 151 564 United Kingdom
5 Feb 2011 5:00PM
Welcome to the site, Mike. Thanks for uploading your pic.

You have got good depth of field here, so it's nice and sharp. The b and w conversion looks good. I have uploaded a mod for you where I have applied a levels adjustment by bringing the right hand slider in to the left a little to lighten the shot. If you look at the histogram there is not much over to the right hand side. My idea was to bring a bit more of the whites out in the stonework. I applied the change with a layer mask as I did not want to lighten the face of the woman.

As for composition, when I was looking at the large image I was very much attracted by the building and the woman got overlooked a bit. It's quite a strong structure visually and for me it tends to dominate the pic a bit. So I was asking myself "is this a pic of the building or the person". It works well if you want to record the fact that the person was present at that particular building, a sort of "I was there" shot for your album. But for me the two elements are fighting each other a little for my attention.

Hope this is helpful and that you enjoy the site.

Best wishes

Catherine
banehawi Plus
12 1.4k 3458 Canada
5 Feb 2011 6:57PM
Welcome Mike.

I agree with CathR, - this is a poor shot of the girl, and a poor shot of the building. It should be one or the other, and my suggestion, loaded in the mod is to make it a portrait style shot og the girl with a small amount og the building behind. If you wanted to inslide both successfully, then a better approach would be aor move back, or zoom out, and get more of the building, and all of the girl.

At f.5, 0 I believe the girls face, and the bars behind should be as sharp as the stone surround, and looking closely at this is appears that you have applied some softening?

In the mod, I have sharpened the girl and background; lightened her hair a little, and reduced the glare on her face.


I hope you find this feedback constructive, and look forward to more of your shots. I would love to know your opinion on the mod also.



regards


Willie
mswiech 5 3 1 Canada
6 Feb 2011 10:41AM

Quote:Welcome to the site, Mike. Thanks for uploading your pic.

You have got good depth of field here, so it's nice and sharp. The b and w conversion looks good. I have uploaded a mod for you where I have applied a levels adjustment by bringing the right hand slider in to the left a little to lighten the shot. If you look at the histogram there is not much over to the right hand side. My idea was to bring a bit more of the whites out in the stonework. I applied the change with a layer mask as I did not want to lighten the face of the woman.

As for composition, when I was looking at the large image I was very much attracted by the building and the woman got overlooked a bit. It's quite a strong structure visually and for me it tends to dominate the pic a bit. So I was asking myself "is this a pic of the building or the person". It works well if you want to record the fact that the person was present at that particular building, a sort of "I was there" shot for your album. But for me the two elements are fighting each other a little for my attention. Hope this is helpful and that you enjoy the site.

Best wishes

Catherine




Quote:Welcome Mike.

I agree with CathR, - this is a poor shot of the girl, and a poor shot of the building. It should be one or the other, and my suggestion, loaded in the mod is to make it a portrait style shot og the girl with a small amount og the building behind. If you wanted to inslide both successfully, then a better approach would be aor move back, or zoom out, and get more of the building, and all of the girl.

At f.5, 0 I believe the girls face, and the bars behind should be as sharp as the stone surround, and looking closely at this is appears that you have applied some softening?

In the mod, I have sharpened the girl and background; lightened her hair a little, and reduced the glare on her face.


I hope you find this feedback constructive, and look forward to more of your shots. I would love to know your opinion on the mod also.

regards

Willie




Thank you everyone for your comments.I am brand new to photography as before I would have used just a PS camera. I am still learning at looking at light, composition, DOF, etc... The original picture had more of the building in the background but I thought that it distracted from the picture. I see your points on it now, as looking back as it does look better just as a port shot

Willie and Cathrine I do like both of your mods that you have done on the Pic. They both look really good to what you have done. I will take your comments to heart and try to improve one. I def have more pics for critique so I am looking forward to them in the future.

Thanks,

Mike

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