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Band stand

By catherinekp79  
Taken whilst in Brighton this wknd.

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NEWMANP 10 1.6k 574 United Kingdom
26 Jul 2010 11:06PM
i love this and the somewhat unusual toned mono conversion.

cant help say though, that the purpose of critique is lost if you dont say exactly what you did and why. please give exposure and process details on uploads to the critique gallery.

a couple of things come to mind. the first is that the horizon is not true horizontal and it needs to be, this is easy to level if you are unsure with Pshop pm me and ill try to help.

second is the vertical colums which are way off vertical and the higher viewpoint has made them converge towards the centre instead of inwards as they would have with a lower view point.
the ideal of course is to keep them true in camera but when this is not possible leave more space around the edges so that the verticals can be adjusted back to true position in photoshop.

as i said before i love the smooth finish and colour toning it works beautifully to me. the shapes withing the composition are really interesting and the contrast is just right.

like it a lot in fact

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paulbroad 10 123 1249 United Kingdom
27 Jul 2010 8:59AM
I rather like the effect here. The horizon does need straightening, but I would leave the columns on the lean. Obviously quite wide angle and verticals do not have to be vertical.

If you are shooting architectural record, then you must straighten the columns, if shooting for effect, often the bigger lean the better - you make up your own mind.

i wondered about adding a figure, and I'm sure it would work, but would be an entirely different image.

Good work.

edsephiroth 11 169 9 United Kingdom
27 Jul 2010 9:59AM
Great shot Catherine!

Yes, its a little bit lopsided, but must admit that really didn't strike me immediately, as was busy looking at the lovely content of the shot. Nicely framed and composed despite that small flaw.

The only other suggestion I would make is that, assuming the view would be pretty much the same throughout the 180degree range that faces the sea, personally I would have either included more of the pier to the left of the shot as an interesting detail, or excluded it altogether, rather than have it just peeping in - its too indistinct to be an assest to the shot or interesting addition, and so becomes a minor distraction instead. I suspect someone unfamiliar with Brighton might find their eyes pulled off toward that mystery object rather than seeing and taking in what you want them to.

The obvious remedy would be either to cut it out altogether by moving the whole shot over to the right, or if possible re-positioning it between the two left-hand columns Smile
27 Jul 2010 10:29AM
Smashing shot Katherine.
Well done.
27 Jul 2010 1:02PM
Thank you so much for all of your interest and comments on this photo. I really haven't a clue how to straighten out objects etc. This was the only angle that I could take this shot as there were walk ways either side. I really like Focus man's mod so thanks for that. I must admit that I was on a hen wknd whilst capturing this one and I was slightly inhebriated by this point hence why it was a bit lop sided! lol.
pamelajean Plus
12 1.1k 2022 United Kingdom
27 Jul 2010 5:01PM
Hi, Catherine. Firstly, congratulations on finding such a photogenic subject. Secondly, inebriation is a good excuse for the wonkiness, but I wonder if you will get to have another go, it's such a wonderful subject, especially the tiled floor. It may be safer not to go for symmetry, but rather get some interesting angles on the band stand.
27 Jul 2010 5:12PM
Unfortunately Pamela it was in Brighton and I'm in Cornwall so probably won't get another take on it for some while. Thank you for your comments it was a beautiful subject to photograph. Smile
Jestertheclown 9 7.7k 252 England
27 Jul 2010 10:52PM
This is really pretty good.
It's actually called "The Birdcage" and has been a prominent landmark o Brighton seafront for over a century.
I can remember this place when it was used regularly as a bandstand.
As everyone is saying, the mono tones work a treat.
I'd certainly straighten the horizon but I'm not sure about the verticals. Personally, I think I'd leave them alone.
I find the inclusion of the West Pier a bit of a distraction though, so, although it's there in reality, I'd have to lose it in the context of this image.

28 Jul 2010 7:04PM
Thanks for that Jester. I also like the angles at which the posts stand and I totally agree with you about the west pier but the only way that I could have kept the image and lost the pier would be to clone it out I think and I have no idea how to do this and I would imagine that my software doesn't have the capability. Smile

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