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Beach Huts

By marcsneddon
Taken summer in Norfolk.
I have this picture in my gallery as a mono image and wanted critique on this one around colour, composition, framing and overall 'apeal' of the image.

Tags: Architecture Beach hutsseaside

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dudler Plus
16 927 1516 England
7 Sep 2019 9:28AM
I think this is a really clever idea, and the only thing that lets it down is the low contrast between the sharp rope and the soft background.

You can't just raise contrast, though, or you'll blow the sky - so there's a need for some subtle work to retain tones there.

I'm not sure it's within my processing capability at all - but it's even less so on holiday on a compact laptop!

Others will be along who are better at the necessary finessing in processing...

Are you having fun with the wide aperture and manual focus of the lens?

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7 Sep 2019 12:56PM
Hi Dudler thanks for the critique and yes I love choosing apature and in particular this manual lens. I brought it to make me think more about the tecnical side of photography. My first manual lens.

I have uploaded a mod based on your comment but not sure if it's enough!
banehawi Plus
15 2.1k 4032 Canada
7 Sep 2019 1:14PM
Hi Marc.

Looking closely at this, I notice that the rope is closer to the lens at the bottom than it is at the top. Therefore the lower 1/3 is soft and the upper 2/3 sharper. Its very hard to get the plane of the lens exactly parallel to a fairly narrow subject.

Ive cropped closer in mode to show this effect more clearly.

The next observation us that since the sky is behind the rope, the rope itself is very much underexposed. You may well want it darker, but it tends to blend in as dudler mentions.

Finally, white balance has made the entire image very blue. Its a bright day, and something closer to a fine weather balance seems more appropriate.

I will follow up with uncropped versions with these corrections, and some mono conversions.


regards



Willie
mrswoolybill Plus
12 1.6k 2078 United Kingdom
7 Sep 2019 2:50PM
It's been said - a fascinating subject, well taken, except that the light was against you. Remember that the word 'photography' means light-drawing, it's about how light and shadow mould a subject, give the impression of three dimensions in what is physically a flat image.

It's worth looking out for that light - ideally coming from the left here, and relatively low in the sky, so early morning in Norfolk. But having said that, a good quality file gives great scope for enhancement as the modifications show, well done for taking the advice on board.

Willie's b&w mod works for me, it's essentially about the lines and structure.
Moira
pamelajean Plus
13 1.2k 2088 United Kingdom
7 Sep 2019 7:25PM
Very good selective focus, Marc.
The extra exposure makes a lot of difference.
It looks like the rope is part of the stair rails, and therefore nicely follows the lines of the beach hut steps.

I would have done the same as Willie's first modification, having the top and bottom of the rope going into the corners. So, instead, I have done a modification (using Willie's mod), where only the bottom of the rope goes into the corner, but it's the top edge of the rope that I've cropped down to, not the bottom. The roofs of the beach huts are still inside the frame, making it obvious where we are. This has less fuss below the rope, and I think the image is now much more ABOUT the rope.

Pamela.
chase Plus
14 1.2k 259 England
8 Sep 2019 9:48AM
I like this idea and i think you have done well to isolate the rope.
I like the lines as Pamela has commented on
Willies' first mod gives a much better impression of a fine day and it shows off the textures in that lovely rope much clearer.
So not much to do to improve the image tbh, some good mods which show different ways of 'seeing' an image.
Well done.
dark_lord Plus
15 2.3k 586 England
8 Sep 2019 9:57PM
A neat idea and just what a wide aperture is great for.

The original is rather uninspiring and dull, which is initially disappointing, and the mods show that a little post processing is all that's needed.

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