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By phoney
I want to try to be more active-creative in photography and videography. I need to perfect my skills how to handle my camera, and improve my post production workflow.

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paulbroad 10 123 1198 United Kingdom
22 Apr 2014 12:52PM
The none Olympus lens appears to perform well. The figure and board are a little lost in the image. Composition is good, but I suspect some other work with a tonal range varied from correct in the foreground to well under on the background? Youneed to lift the figure by brightening the background a touch.


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phoney 3
22 Apr 2014 1:16PM
Thanks for your comment. My goal was the figure of the boy and the board to be like that. Maybe i took it too far. Thanks again.
mrswoolybill Plus
11 1.2k 1813 United Kingdom
22 Apr 2014 2:24PM
Hi Paul, welcome to the site and to the Critique Gallery, I see that this is your first upload here. I hope you will enjoy it and find it a good place to learn. We try to give advice that will help people to improve their photography both the taking and the editing of images.

I like the overall composition here, with the board pointing towards the distant horizon. That's about hopes, dreams, ambitions. But it's also pointing leftwards - a lot of people would prefer this to be pointing rightwards as the natural direction for our brains to read a positive, up-beat mood but I prefer the more reflective, quiet effect of a leftward direction of movement.

Photographing contre-jour - against the light - is always a challenge, the sun was at a useful angle here and you have avoided flare. The background is a wee bit underexposed but the foreground water is perfect.

The problem really is the figure - he looks to be a young lad struggling with a large board, and as a result the figure doesn't come across as a strong silhouette - everything between neck and knees is pretty well obscured. A silhouette (and this is nearly that) needs strong body language; if only his right foot was a bit further forward...! The alternative would be to use flash, which would give detail in the figure without losing the strength of the background.

phoney 3
22 Apr 2014 2:53PM
Useful pointers. Thanks.
dudler Plus
14 639 1207 England
22 Apr 2014 6:56PM
Welcome from me, too. I hope you have as much fun at EPZ as I've had, and continue to have!

I really like htis: there's so much in the boy and his board to enjoy. For me, the two most important parts are the way it's bigger than he is, and that elegant, willowy, but quite tentative pose.

Moira's right that the near-silhoouette is a problem, as it partly conceals the pose. I suspect that the right processing would bring in a little more detail, but I'm not quite sure what it needs to do this... I'm also working in a hotel, on a laptop, so I may be leaving serious mods to others (on the grounds that they are far more talented than I with processiing!) However artificial it is, I'd like to see more detail in there. I would, though, be nervous of flash: partly because it kills mood (unless you are Martin Parr, of course), but largely because high voltages and water don't mix terribly well...

Nicely observed!
banehawi Plus
13 1.7k 3781 Canada
22 Apr 2014 7:42PM
You can get a better result if you underexpose the shot at the time you take it. Something like the mod Ive uploaded.

Use exposure compensation, and try -1 or -2



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