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By lampgb
During the pandemic I tried producing a cover for a comic novel I have written. I have stitched two photographs of my artwork together...any modification ideas would be appreciated

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mrswoolybill Plus
14 2.5k 2346 United Kingdom
13 Jan 2021 11:16AM
Hi Phillip, welcome to the Critique Gallery, you have been on the site as long as I have but I think this is the first time that you have ticked the critique box? I guess you know that it disables votes and awards, but invites more in-depth comments - I hope you'll find it useful! It will help all round if you engage in a conversation with us, so that we know if we are helping.

First of all, a photographer who is also a writer, that's a good combination. Awareness of one art is always likely to enhance understanding of the other. This is unusual as a CG upload, not photography as such, as much about verbal communication as visual, but I hope that we can give some advice.

I like the way you have assembled this, it's eye-catching and humorous. There's a hint of tension in the angles of hand print and card.
The OCD bit of me queries whether the stamp, illustration and message should all appear on the same side of the card but that's me being awkward...

More seriously, there are some faint yellow blotches down the left side, are those intentional? And most importantly, I would like the blood-stained hand print to be a little stronger, particularly to give an outline down the left side. Bloodier...

Apart from that, well done and good luck with the book!
Regards,
Moira
mrswoolybill Plus
14 2.5k 2346 United Kingdom
13 Jan 2021 11:25AM
PS I have uploaded a very quick modification, you'll find it under the blue Modifications button. Yellow blotches cleaned, a better blood red, an outline down the left side and a border. Just suggestions...

Regarding my suggestion for bloodier, my Other Half points out that we were watching Richard III the other evening... Wink
dudler Plus
17 1.5k 1778 England
13 Jan 2021 11:38AM
Moira's made a couple of good suggestions - I have little to add to them. Though if this is for the front cover of a book, maybe something to take a little height out of this - it's tall and thin for a standard-format book.
mrswoolybill Plus
14 2.5k 2346 United Kingdom
13 Jan 2021 12:28PM
I'm sorry, I didn't connect this with your previous CG uploads, it's so different!

My OCD side coming in again regarding that postcard, the amount that's on it. Can I suggest that the message is over-egging the pudding, as we used to say, too overt. Just leave the faces to convey the message.

I hadn't noticed the cross until I got rid of the distraction of the wording... Modification 2 now uploaded...
chase Plus
15 2.0k 517 England
13 Jan 2021 12:56PM
Welcome back to the Critique Gallery Phillip.

This made me smile.
Perhaps just needs tidying up a touch.
I do like the bloody hand print but not totally sure the postcard adds much to this, at the least I think the wording on it is a little superfluous.
So, whilst you already have a mod with the wording removed, which looks much better imho, I have added a mod with a very different feel and removed the postcard altogether.
Maybe not a mod in the truest sense of the word, just something a little different for you to perhaps consider with, maybe, a bit more impact.....that is going to be very personal and it depends how you want your readers to see the cover.

Well done for combining your skills and good luck with your publication.
pamelajean Plus
15 1.5k 2190 United Kingdom
13 Jan 2021 5:34PM
My first impression was that your format is very long for a book cover.

This isn't showing well against the white background, but when viewed large, it gets a black background and we can then see just what size it is. A border would be a good idea.

The hand print wasn't immediately recognisable to me, so I would suggest it has a bit more red in order to help it stand out.

I also think the blood splatters should be in the same red as the hand print.

I suppose the postcard might make sense if I had read the book, but I just find it puzzling. I therefore quite like Janet's modification, especially the dripping blood.

Pamela.
pablophotographer 9 1.8k 396
14 Jan 2021 1:22AM
Well done you!

I would like to reshuffle the deck a bit and rearrange the front page as such: First line of Monday Times stays in place. Author's name below that. Sell yourself, not just this one book 😉 I would put the postcard on top just because it reminds me of the old student note books which had a white label to write the subject, your name and your class. The title of the book is below. Make sure that the text is not falling on the dark parts of the red blooded palm but on the lighter blood stained parts. The readers will have to put their hands next to the victim's palm to turn the page, get blood stained themselves metaphorically. Last line stays in the bottom or moves on the top of the back page where the reviews are.

I say, : "This book is a killer! It take your breath away". Thomas Bookerman, Midnight Moon Gazette, 5 *****

pablophotographer
chase Plus
15 2.0k 517 England
15 Jan 2021 12:47PM
Hi Phillip, it would be really nice if you could give us some reaction to our critiques and mods, the Critique Gallery does work much better with some interaction from all parties.

Have we gone in the right direction for you, are any of our comments/mods helpful ?
mrswoolybill Plus
14 2.5k 2346 United Kingdom
15 Jan 2021 12:53PM
As Janet says - the Critique Gallery works best when we get a conversation going. Critique Team members are volunteers who give a fair amount of their time to try to help others, and other members join in too. Without feedback from you we are really operating in the dark - so it would be only common courtesy for you to come back and indicate whether any of the advice has been helpful.

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