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Broken 2

By david1810
The second in my series on the ballet dancer.

As always looking for any comment/critiques that will help me improve my capture and pp.
David


Tags: Dancer Ballerina Pain Ballet Portraits and people

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Tough lady - nice idea well capturedGrinGrinGrinGrin
mrswoolybill Plus
13 2.3k 2267 United Kingdom
7 May 2018 8:23AM
It's a powerful image, and beautifully taken. You've made a lot of progress since your earlier uploads here. I really appreciate your use of natural light. The one slight adjustment that I would make there would be to lift lighter tones very gently on her right arm (left to us).

I missed the first upload from this set, life has been busy of late, but looking back at it - the string worked there, it was part of the structure and story. Here the odd length of string is a distraction for me, particularly as it is the lightest item in the frame. It catches the eye but serves no real function. Better to my eye with just the clenched fist - and that should be easily contrived...

I'm thinking of how the string would work better here - it needs tension rather than hanging limply.

I would also like to try cropping at the sides to move the face proportionally further from the centre of the frame, for an edgier feel.

Back soon, I hope...
Moira
mrswoolybill Plus
13 2.3k 2267 United Kingdom
7 May 2018 9:07AM
Modification now uploaded, with notes. I do think this looks better with a bit of light on that arm, it would have been useful to have someone holding a reflector.
banehawi Plus
16 2.3k 4163 Canada
7 May 2018 4:10PM
Soft a blurry as the shutter speed is much too slow for 200mm and a human subject.

I love the shot, the pose, everything about it; I would rotate again to straighten the chair, crop from the left, and allow a little more room at the bottom. As a part of a set, the string makes sense, but as Moira mentions not so much as a stand alone image.

I used a mode of sharpening that in Photoshop cc2018 called Shake Reduction, and it does a good job with this, and really shows that shake was present.

Regards



Willie
dudler Plus
17 1.3k 1699 England
7 May 2018 8:01PM
As well as the shake, I htink there's a slight focus error - I see strands of hair and the scarf that seem to be sharper than the eyes.

200mm is tripod territory, I'd say - though I might have tried opening the aperture right up and focussing very, very carefully. TonyD3 has shot some lovely work with a 200mm f/2 at full bore, such as THIS car image (focus would have been a major concern, but he nailed it). He's also used the lens to very good effect for portraits.
david1810 8 1 Australia
7 May 2018 10:25PM
Hi, you guys are awesome. These images will be printed and mounted for my final exhibition, as a result, your comments and suggestions are going to be put to good use.

Moira - thanks for your praise, I feel that I have improved a lot this 6 months. The one thing college has done is get me out with my camera shooting. Often challenging and pushing my skill base.

Willie - thanks for the Photoshop tip, my major folio is long exposure seascapes. The new sharpening filter should help me there as well.

John - I had my tripod with me, idiot. I was conscious of a depth of field issue trying to keep the eyes and wound in focus. I agree there is a problem with my focus . I have a 24-105 lens which might have helped the shake, however, the 200 is so much sharper. A lesson learned.

thanks again for your time and input

David
8 May 2018 12:05PM
Brilliant and outstanding shot!
paulbroad 13 131 1289 United Kingdom
8 May 2018 3:17PM
As above, but for me, as in your later image, too much wasted space. A good half the frame can be cropped from each side to emphasise the subject and greatly improve impact. Fill the frame is a very good rule.

Paul

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