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caged

By Sandipan
It is street photography. here, birds are in the cage.

Tags: Street photography Photo journalism Street Bird Caged

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mrswoolybill Plus
13 2.3k 2266 United Kingdom
20 Aug 2016 8:11AM
You are using photography very thoughtfully to convey a message. So often I see uploads with a long philosophical treatise that seems only tenuously related to the image. But this is powerful. The hand carries the message of control, domination.

A suggestion - I want to crop this to portrait or possibly square. It's about the hand reaching downward in the frame, but landscape - horizontal format - draws the eye from side to side. And the cut-off hand on the right, holding bank notes, would add to the story if it was complete, but as just a fragment in the corner it distracts more than it adds.

So a cropped modification to follow... I also want to tone down that bright blue slightly.
Moira
dudler Plus
17 1.3k 1698 England
20 Aug 2016 8:16AM
I think I can see what you were aiming to do here...

The idea of the hand, reaching over and controlling the caged birds. Almost, the Hand of God, in a destructive and controlling sort of a way.

It almost works, but not quite. I think there are two reasons.

First, in terms of composition, the hand is an afterthought, at the edge of the frame. It needs to be thrusting down into the middle. Central is fine (I wondered about putting it on a lower third, but that would lose the sheer power of the humans over the birds), but it does need to come far lower down. I cropped at the sides, but this still isn't enough, I thought (first mod).

Second, it needs to be really graphic: we need to see the hand as the main thing in the picture, with the cage and birds clearly visible, but secondary. I wasn't sure how to do this, so I wandered through the Nik Silver Efex package, and tried things until they worked. In the end, I used the pinhole filter. This lost the geometric satisfaction of having cage bars going to the bottom corners of the frame, but hade the hand the centre...

Does this capture the feeling you wanted?
dudler Plus
17 1.3k 1698 England
20 Aug 2016 8:18AM
Moira and I were working at the same time - and had similar thoughts!

I entirely agree with her first sentence, too - this conveys your idea very well indeed. Often, there's no real link between what people say they want to convey and the picture they use, because there's not enough of a direct link, and it's all in their own head, not anyone else's!

20 Aug 2016 8:38PM
thanks a lot, Moira and dudler GrinGrinSmileSmile
really like the mods and the critiques.

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