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Candle in a church

By LouiseTopp  
I have two versions of this, so I thought I would use this one first. This is a gas fed candle (so not your usual candle) it is in honor of the First Worl war.

Tags: Uk England Wiltshire Specialist and abstract Close-up and macro Digitally manipulated Salisbury South west

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ddolfelin Plus
9 103 3 Wales
12 Sep 2014 10:32AM
Well taken and presented!
dudler Plus
18 1.7k 1877 England
12 Sep 2014 12:16PM
This is a good use of a central, symmetrical composition: it gives the candle the stately, serene look that it clearly merits as a war memorial.

A lot of my thoughts around this are about the candle, rather than how you've shot it - the way that a real candle changes, evolves, and is messy and unpredictable, rather than mechanical and unchanging. However, it is what it is, and maybe the engineered look reflects the nature of modern warfare - shell casings come to mind.

My only suggestion is to correct the verticals (if you'd shot from level with the candle, the top would not have been visible, so I am not suggesting taking it from lower down, though that might be a tactic with a wax candle, with the flame visible through the sides). Mod in a minute...
mrswoolybill Plus
14 2.9k 2455 United Kingdom
12 Sep 2014 12:55PM
Well done, it's not an easy subject! My only criticism would be that the flame seems oddly placed in the frame. You have the leading edge of the candle top more or less half way up the frame, which gives an awful lot of space proportionally to the candle. That draws the eye down, whereas the story should be about the flame reaching upward. I would definitely like to see less candle, and perhaps more darkness for it to reach up into.

Mod to follow...
Moira
pamelajean Plus
15 1.6k 2237 United Kingdom
12 Sep 2014 8:33PM
Very nicely taken, Louise, with a good black background and a beautifully exposed flame.
The gas fed candle is obviously a lot cleaner and the flame is well shaped and defined.

I just feel your image is a little static, so have done some modifications.
I cropped to place the flame on a thirds line and added canvas to the top and right.
My second mod has some vignetting for effect, and I think it's a lot more subtle.

Pamela.

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