Back Modifications (2)
Views 94 Unique 25 Award Shortlist   

Captivity of life

By Akshya
This photo is one my favorite clicks, I love the way it's focused! I took it during one of my Photography Workshops with a National Geographic society member at my school.
I'd love to hear any comments/feedbacks regarding his photo

Tags: Canon Close-up Close-up and macro Chain Captivity

The Totally Tamron Website Is Back! Visit Today For All Things Tamron

Comments


KarenFB Plus
13 5.3k 175 England
20 Apr 2017 8:48PM
Hi Akshya, welcome to EPZ ! Smile

You have ticked the 'Critique' box, this will not allow us to 'vote/like' your photo, but it will give the opportunity for the Critique Team to give you honest opinions (with hints and tips on how to improve next time).

For me personally, I like this image - I like the diagonal composition and the focus point you've chosen, it's almost abstract in its simplicity.

I am looking forward to seeing more of your work (you will be entered into the Junior Gallery as well as the usual Gallery until your 16th birthday, then you will lose the 'J' on your images automatically). If you have any problems or questions don't be afraid to ask, we're all here to help you! Smile

Join ePHOTOzine for free and remove these adverts.

mrswoolybill Plus
13 1.7k 2119 United Kingdom
21 Apr 2017 8:57AM
Hello Akshya, welcome from me too, I hope you will enjoy our site! There's a lot here apart from the galleries - articles, reviews, tips, competitions. It's a great place to learn. And as a Junior member you will have support from Karen.

I'm envious, I wish I had had an opportunity to work with National Geographic when I was at school! I'm seeing this project as being about exploring our world, at its different levels?

It's a style that I enjoy, looking really closely at the things that we easily take for granted. I have uploaded a modification which is basically a slight crop and a bit more light. (To view modifications, click on the blue Modifications button below your upload, then on the numbers.) Following on from Karen's comment here are a few simple suggestions, in no particular order:

Karen's point about the diagonal is important - a rising diagonal gives a positive, upbeat feel. I like to see the ends 'tethered'securely to the corners of the frame, it seems more satisfying, and stronger.

Secondly the light was above the chain so there are two problems. What you saw was in shadow. And the background light has tricked the camera's 'brain' into underexposing a bit, so everything looks a bit dull and flat.

Suggestions: in a situation like this, looking into shadows, see if you can find someone to hold a piece of white card to reflect a little light back onto the subject. Experiment with this, it's very effective!

Plus, when looking at a subject with bright light behind it, check out the exposure compensation setting on your camera, and try a small plus setting. Say +0.7 or +1 stop in a situation like this. Look at the results - and don't forget to zero the setting again afterwards!

And the other main point - you were using a longish focal length, on a full-frame DSLR that would be about 234mm. At that sort of length, F6.3 is giving you very shallow depth of field, just a few millimetres. So accurate focusing is crucial. I'm sure the effect was deliberate, I think I would have focused on the centre of the link rather than the edge, because the centre is where everything hangs together. But that's personal choice and taste.

In time I hope you will take a little more control of settings, but you are thinking about creating your own personal image and that's very important! I do hope we shall see more from you.
Moira
TanyaH Plus
16 1.3k 396 United Kingdom
21 Apr 2017 9:39AM
I do like this and have nothing really to add to Karen's and Moira's comments above. I'm also envious that this kind of curriculum wasn't available to me when I was at school, as my life may have taken on a completely different direction!

I think the chain is well placed within the frame as you originally had it, although Moira's mod does give the image a more definite quality. The composition, though simple, is very effective because of that rising diagonal and looking up at the chain creates a lovely serene feeling for me.

Despite the connotations of 'chains' and the containment they can so often represent I think that here, because of all that gently toned space around the chain links, it's more of a feeling of implied freedom. It's an image that evokes emotion in the viewer, probably both positive and negative at the same time, and for that reason alone it would have my vote in the gallery if I'd been able to vote on it Smile

Well done and I hope you'll enjoy the site here. It's a fantastic community, full of inspiration and knowledge, wit and wisdom.

Tanya
dudler Plus
16 996 1554 England
21 Apr 2017 12:24PM
And welcome from me, too.

Every time I see a picture by a teenage photographer, it reminds me of the fun and the frustration when I first started using a camera seriously. Treasure every minute, even when things aren't working as you want them to. You will probably never be learning have so much and as fast as you are now. A magic time.

With this picture, you've discovered one of my favourite technical tricks - using a wide aperture to get something called 'differential focus'. Its a beautiful idea, and you'll find lots of ways to apply it to different subjects.

Are you doing any editing of your pictures? A little bit of time spent working on a picture can turn it from good into spectacular. You can change the format (which I'm going to do with my modification), or turn it into a black and white picture (which I'm also going to do). Please ask if you want a few pointers on how to get started with the editing.

And it will help us a lot if you tell us what you think of our comments and our modifications. Please be really honest, because if were not helping we'd like to find out what we need to do to help you make the photographs you want to.
KarenFB Plus
13 5.3k 175 England
21 Apr 2017 2:50PM
John's last sentance....


Quote:And it will help us a lot if you tell us what you think of our comments and our modifications. Please be really honest, because if were not helping we'd like to find out what we need to do to help you make the photographs you want to.


....is really important. All too often folk receive help from the Critique Team and don't respond. They would like to hear from you what you think and if you've understood their points of view. Smile
dudler Plus
16 996 1554 England
21 Apr 2017 9:15PM
And, of course, we want to know whether we've understood the photographer's intentions and needs...
dark_lord Plus
15 2.4k 609 England
21 Apr 2017 10:36PM
Just a welcome from me too as I can't add to what's been said above.
paulbroad 12 131 1288 United Kingdom
23 Apr 2017 8:26AM
Lots of good stuff. For me, there is room to play with the lighting, which is a bit mundane here. For set piece close up of inanimate objects I often use an LED torch to add light. You can move it about and try lots of exposures with the light coming from different directs.

Experimentation.

Paul

Sign In

You must be a member to leave a comment.

ePHOTOzine, the web's friendliest photography community.

Join For Free

Upload photos, chat with photographers, win prizes and much more.