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Cherry pair

By ziggy
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Tags: Still life Fruit

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Chrism8 14 980 28 England
30 Sep 2020 1:30PM
Well shot, I would have lost the dark area bottom left either by editing out or a crop. I'm ok with the spotlight of the flash but again may be worth editing out to see what it looks like.

If you have another go, try a piece of black card / paper to see if you can lose the reflection / lighter section at the bottom of the cherries and gain a tad more contrast / texture.

Chris
chase Plus
15 2.1k 562 England
30 Sep 2020 2:24PM
Hi Roger and welcome to the Critique Gallery.
A very simple looking image ( I mean that in a nice way ) but not that easy to set up.
I would agree with Chris with ref to the vignette at the bottom, so in my mod, I cropped it away resulting in what , to my mind looks a cleaner image.
I also reduced the highlights on the Cherries and darkened the stalks a touch, just with a couple of simple layers in Photoshop.
The stalks do look as though they are slightly over exposed.

It would be nice if we knew what you have done to this during your post processing and what in particular did you set out to achieve.The Cherries do look a little 'cut out' but without knowing what you did, it is difficult to judge.
How did you light this ?
Is there anything specifically you would like help with or advice on ?

Input and information from you is really important so we are going the right way with advice etc for you.
banehawi Plus
16 2.4k 4233 Canada
30 Sep 2020 2:28PM
Typing at the same time as chase.

Competent shot of a pair of cherries. I wonder if theres some aspect of this you wanted feedback on, - not a lot of information provided, other than full exif.

I would increase exposure a little, pull black lower a touch, and sharpen very slightly as in the mod2.



regards


Willie
pamelajean Plus
15 1.5k 2214 United Kingdom
30 Sep 2020 3:45PM
Hello, Roger, and welcome to the Critique Gallery.
This is an attractive and competent image, its impact being in its simplicity.

For critique purposes, it would be helpful to have a bit more information from you, especially as regards your set-up and if there is anything in particular you would like comments on.

Firstly, I think Chris made interesting comments, especially about the lighter area on the bottom half of the cherries, reflected from the white base. I like the smooth transition between the light and dark areas of your background, but do like what Janet has done with the bottom dark corners.

The cherries, especially the tops, do have the appearance of being cut-out, and it would be useful to know if there is a reason for this. If indeed they have been cut out, a little softening of the edges would certainly help in the finished appearance, rather than such a sharp outline.

In my own modification I have offset the cherries in the frame, mirrored the image and cropped to square.
These are simply ideas, not necessarily suggestions for improvement. I mirrored the image because I felt that the cherry on the left was leaning a bit more than the other one, so with the extra space provided by my offsetting, it feels comfortable to give it "swinging" space.
I changed your red border for a black and white one. The red pulls the eye to the outside of the frame.
I added some sharpening and brightening, too.

Pamela.
dark_lord Plus
17 2.8k 767 England
30 Sep 2020 8:29PM
Welcome from me too.

I think everything has been covered. I'd just like to see the shadowy underside of the fruit lighter to show detail more clearly.
You could create a mini series using different fruit.
dudler Plus
17 1.6k 1840 England
30 Sep 2020 10:20PM
And a belated welcome from me, too, Roger.

I can't add a lot ot the above comments - the more you can tell us about the image, though, the more we can provide the feedback that you want.

I have two half-thoughts, though. A back background would enhance the image, if you have the option. And the undersides of the cherries, picking up the white reflection from the surface they're standing on, seems flat and uninteresting compared with the upper halves.

I recognise that there may be a difficult trade-off between lighting the undersides and making them seem dull, but it does seem worth thinking about...
Saastad Plus
2 16 15 Norway
30 Sep 2020 11:16PM
Hi!
You have got a lot of nice help here. I will just add one little amateur thing.
To avoid this highlights from the lamp in the roof, you can use a simple thing like greaseproof paper over the light. Isn't it enough with one, use several.
They are doing a good job, and they are cheap Smile

Arne
ziggy Plus
19 204 England
1 Oct 2020 7:14AM
Thank you for all your kind comments. I am trying to create some clean shots without clutter, rather than trying to clean up and hide distractions.
The shot is close to as originally taken, but I have a habit of separating a subject from its background onto a separate layer so that I can modify lighting/contrast etc. I obviously need to feather by a couple of pixels. In a recent competition, the judge remarked the underside was too light, so I added an adjustment layer and darkened the lower half, which is the submission I have offered. (Season for cherries now over).
I like the removal of the front vignette by Chase; I am torn between removing the light spots or not. I can see the difference in contrast by Banehawi which I like
And from Pamelajean, thanks for recomposing; it really makes a difference and will think more about in future; not sure about the frame colour, but will try others than red. Thanks to you all

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