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This is a bit of a trciky one to critique in some ways as I actually quite like it ... love the poses of the kids, and the overall shot in many ways but whilst I can see what you were aiming for ... I feel the yellow acid face just fights a touch too much for attention.
It's not just the big splash of colour but also the composition here. If it were in the top right or left and had been used to create a diagonal across the frame then it might have been a touch more subtle. Also I'd have liked to have seen the top of the head of the girl in the centre not breaking the outline of the circle above her.
The expressions and fun displayed in the shot are great.
The other issue here is that the kids have different toned tops on .. not always an issue but when you are shooting balck tops onto black backgrounds there is the tendency to get blocks of black .. which doesn't look good generally. So ... a few tweaks and you would get a better shot but it's certainly not a disaster as it stands.
Hope that helps.
Dan
It's not just the big splash of colour but also the composition here. If it were in the top right or left and had been used to create a diagonal across the frame then it might have been a touch more subtle. Also I'd have liked to have seen the top of the head of the girl in the centre not breaking the outline of the circle above her.
The expressions and fun displayed in the shot are great.
The other issue here is that the kids have different toned tops on .. not always an issue but when you are shooting balck tops onto black backgrounds there is the tendency to get blocks of black .. which doesn't look good generally. So ... a few tweaks and you would get a better shot but it's certainly not a disaster as it stands.
Hope that helps.
Dan
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Hello, Mark. I fully agree with Dan. This image does, however, hold a lot of appeal. The children are having fun, pulling faces for the camera and generally giving you some good poses....and a lot of attitude. Everything is clear, though a bit dark. It's a shame you didn't position them a bit more to the right. I think you could have got just the tree as a background then, and the smiley offset to the left. Also, the graffiti on the tree would have added interest without being overly distracting. It's unfortunate that the middle girl is tall enough to look like the yellow face is balancing on her head, lol. In my modification I lightened the image, lifted the shadows so that the dark clothing stood out better, reduced the highlights, added some contrast and sharpened. In my first mod, I selected the smiley face only and reduced the saturation. My second mod has it reduced even more, which I feel is the better option.
Pamela.
Pamela.
Thanks Pamela
I think the desaturation of the smiley face works a lot better, i just wish i could of asked the children to pose in a better position but they was just running around enjoying the day without a thought of me and my photography, LOL.
Thanks again for some great critique
Mark
I think the desaturation of the smiley face works a lot better, i just wish i could of asked the children to pose in a better position but they was just running around enjoying the day without a thought of me and my photography, LOL.
Thanks again for some great critique
Mark
Its easy to like this, - and my guess would be that the whole cool kids pose was suggested by the yellow face?
Its obviously a spur of the moment shot, and it works very well for what it is.
I also loaded some mods, - straightened a little, and removed the yellow fella to see how it would look.
Regards
Willie
Its obviously a spur of the moment shot, and it works very well for what it is.
I also loaded some mods, - straightened a little, and removed the yellow fella to see how it would look.
Regards
Willie
Thanks Willie
Your right about the spur of the moment shot, not to sure about the removel of smiley. i think it leaves to much space above thier ends with a even worse of a distraction, plus it was smiley that attracted us to the shot in the first place but thanks again for trying.
Mark
Your right about the spur of the moment shot, not to sure about the removel of smiley. i think it leaves to much space above thier ends with a even worse of a distraction, plus it was smiley that attracted us to the shot in the first place but thanks again for trying.
Mark
