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Cotton 2

By xwang
Following the previous uploading, does this one work? Still cotton...I was trying to emphasize the top of the containers and lines of the cotton. Have I created some technical problems by darkening the edge? I mean, if you would think that I have lost the detail, because I tried a window a few years ago, I've been told by several photographers that I had lost the detail...I thought that I had to lose the detail to get the shape out... Here is the same thought again... What do you think please? Thanks for looking.
I'll upload the camera raw image on MOD section for you to have a look.

Tags: Manchester Industrial Museum Black and white Cotton Container

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Comments


12 Apr 2015 10:39AM
I like your version but may be you could crop the bottom 2 cylinders? Just my humble thoughts.
Otinkyad 19 2 7 United Kingdom
12 Apr 2015 10:40AM
I like the light on the yanks of cotton and the lines & pattern, but I think the vignetting has been overdone.

Richard
PranavMishra 10 52 18 India
12 Apr 2015 10:48AM
it is an engaging image..
LynneJoyce Plus
14 22 101 United Kingdom
12 Apr 2015 10:56AM
Love it, all of it.
TanyaH Plus
19 1.3k 411 United Kingdom
12 Apr 2015 12:27PM
Hi Jasmine ... I don't think what you've done detracts from the image at all, personally. The lines of cotton and the tops of the barrels is what the main subject is, and what you've done in the processing works for my eyes. It's those parts of the image that stand out, beautifully.

With darkening the edges, the only thing I'd say is that maybe the transition is a little too abrupt ... particularly on the bottom edge, where you've got quite a noticeable line going across that bottom barrel, which emphasizes what you've done with the edges. Can you feather the vignette at all?

Tanya
Rende 15 38 4 Netherlands
12 Apr 2015 12:28PM
Love the combination of circles and lines here. Works well in mono.
Rende
RobMacormac 18 7 2 England
12 Apr 2015 1:40PM
Can see nothing wrong with this.
xwang 13 56 8
12 Apr 2015 2:06PM
Thank you Tanya.
Quote: Can you feather the vignette at all?

I could.. I didn't see what you saw.
Thank you all.
TyChee 18 275 1 United States
12 Apr 2015 3:18PM
The right and the repeats makes this a winner.

Ty
paulbroad 15 131 1294 United Kingdom
12 Apr 2015 3:20PM
Like it, Has. Good string clean image. Mono works for effect. If you were to consider it as a record, then colour.

Paul
richmowil Plus
14 505 3 England
12 Apr 2015 4:44PM
Nice light on this fine composition.
banehawi Plus
18 2.9k 4336 Canada
12 Apr 2015 5:02PM
Looking at the original, it is well underexposed, - likely due to the use of spot metering.

I loaded a mod with exposure adjusted.

nevertheless, you want a specific look which means you really have to kill blacks, and highlight white, which is done in the second mod.

You version is quite good, but I agree that the vignette is overdone.


Regards



Willie
xwang 13 56 8
12 Apr 2015 5:23PM
Thank you Willie.
Yes, it was underexposed, I had no choice. I was worried about losing the cotton's detail.. ISO was already 2000,it would give me noise if I pushed it to high; Set S:1/50, for hand held. I tried to get a safe shot; aperture opened up to 4, it reached the end.. Vignette came from the filter.. I didn't adjust it.Smile
pamelajean Plus
17 1.8k 2276 United Kingdom
12 Apr 2015 6:59PM
This is all about the lines, Jasmine, and I like it.

On the right side, there are some long strong lines of the fronts of the containers, and I wonder if you took a picture with those more prominently in it?
There are also some lighter lines around the tops of the containers and I wonder if these could be brighter.

If you look at the thumbnail for this image, you will be able to see more clearly how your vignette has a definite line where it finishes. It's not so obvious when you view it large, except for at the bottom.

I'm waiting to see Willie's modifications before I try one myself.

Pamela.
xwang 13 56 8
12 Apr 2015 7:59PM
Smile Thank you Pamela. I was 'looking' for you.... wonder if you are fine...
xwang 13 56 8
12 Apr 2015 8:01PM
Thank you Willie for the MOD.Smile
pamelajean Plus
17 1.8k 2276 United Kingdom
12 Apr 2015 8:29PM
Yes, thankyou, Jasmine, I'm fine.

Now that I've seen Willie's mods, I've done my own.

Firstly, I cropped the bottom, as suggested above, because that full container is quite bright and keeps pulling my eye to the bottom of the frame instead of appreciating the lines and patterns. I also took a slice off the top and the right side so that the container edges touch the frame edge.

The first mod is a colour version, with highlights increased and brightness added, then a Levels adjustment.
The second mod, which is the one I prefer, is in black and white with the contrast boosted to highlight those lines and shapes.

Pamela.
xwang 13 56 8
12 Apr 2015 9:31PM
Thank you, Pamela.Smile
cbrundage 9 4 United States
13 Apr 2015 1:32AM
Really interesting interplay of circles and lines, Jasmine. The cotton looks very thick and raw - it was be interesting to know if this is the beginning of the process or somewhere in between.
HobbitDave Plus
14 10 10 England
13 Apr 2015 12:16PM
I think this works really well as it is, Jas, super processing and lighting too!

All the best,

Dave Wink
xwang 13 56 8
13 Apr 2015 2:11PM
Thank you Christina. I'll try to get the rest of the photos processed and you may have a look some time later.. I can't tell you when though...Grin
Thank you Dave.
what a beautiful black and white image with great attention to detail excellent, SmileSmileSmileSmile
BRITCHIE

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