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DAFFODILS

By pottie  
Late last year we stayed at Rooiberg Guest Farm near Sutherland South Africa. The owner of the cottage we stayed in put the jar of daffodils in the lounge. I knew that I wanted to take the photo because of the light, but the execution I'm not so sure of... For support and stability I used my tripod with a release cable.

Tags: Flowers Flowers and plants Daffodil flower Daffodills Daffodils yellow spring flowers FLOWERS IN A JAR

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banehawi Plus
17 2.6k 4274 Canada
22 Jan 2019 1:18PM
I noticed that your flash fired, and wondered if this was intentional?

Ive tried a mod, - mainly to darken the background, reduce highlights slightly on the flowers, and also reduce the yellow saturation.


Not so sure it makes it any better?



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pottie 9 2 South Africa
22 Jan 2019 3:48PM
Yes, I did fire the flash into the rafters of the roof... without the flash the contrast between the flowers and the dark background was to strong for me.
Thanks for the mod, do you think the saturation is to much?
mrswoolybill Plus
15 3.0k 2465 United Kingdom
22 Jan 2019 4:41PM
I love the light on the daffodils, it's random and dappled, so it has a fleeting, capture-the-moment effect. I would not have guessed that flash was involved.

My main thought after that was to rotate slightly clockwise (I'm looking at the water level in the vase); then to get just a bit more brightness into the vase because without that the composition looks a bit top-heavy to me. (Very gentle application of the dodge tool set to highlights); and to crop tighter, placing the vase more off-centre.

I have darkened the background slightly but not as much as Willie, I quite like the diagonal and the way that dark 'blob' on the right balances the vase in the tighter crop.

I haven't touched the flowers at all.
Moira
pamelajean Plus
15 1.6k 2239 United Kingdom
22 Jan 2019 4:42PM
I like the simplicity of the cut daffs being put into a glass jar, and the rustic charm of the wood and wall.
You used the flash creatively so that it didn't have a harsh effect on the flowers.

My thinking is very much in line with Willie's because I wanted to try a dark background, too. So I've done that in my first modification, but centralising the subject and giving it a square format, rather than giving it negative space/offsetting it in the frame. That's because I couldn't decide which direction the flowers were "looking into".
So, I firstly brightened the image, then drastically reduced the shadows and increasing the Blacks.
I shaded in the line of division between boards and wall, and also the vertical line on the wall behind the daffs.

My second modification goes in completely the opposite direction, brightening the image, and lifting the shadows. I cloned out the bracket on the right and filled in the black triangle in the bottom left, then gave the image a light vignette. Just food for thought, and another way of seeing the image. I wasn't keen on the colour of the background wall, but am happier with it now.

Pamela.
banehawi Plus
17 2.6k 4274 Canada
22 Jan 2019 4:49PM
I decreased sat in the original, - doe the sat look high in the mod, - is that the question?

Added another mod with yellow sat -8

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pottie 9 2 South Africa
22 Jan 2019 8:11PM
To all of you thank you for taking the time to crit and do a mod.... you are a bunch of great people!!!!
Ann Thanks for the comment!
Moira. I see what you mean, and thank for your mod! I will do so!
Pamela, thanks your mod looks great and i like crop.
Thanks again Willie, I was talking of the saturation in my photo!
dark_lord Plus
17 2.9k 786 England
22 Jan 2019 8:59PM
Simple is good.
The arrangement and vase sit nicely in a square format as in Moira's mod. It also avoids that bracket in the background though that is easily cloned out.
Given the attractive light on the daffodils a dark background looks good.
Selectively lightening the flowers just gives them that little bit more glow.
Mod added.

Keith
22 Jan 2019 10:05PM
I think this would be well suited to a square crop. Placing the subject more or less dead centre is often frowned upon, but this is the kind of image that often works well that way.
I like the dark background... nothing to clash with the subject or fight with it for attention. It's a nice simple arrangement too... as Keith says, simple is good.
I'll upload a mod.
I've cropped it as I mentioned, and I've reduced the contrast on the flower heads, brightening them as well. I think that emphasizes the "flowerness" of them. Added a bit soft focus to help with that too. I also burned in parts of the background to make it tonally more even.

Alan
22 Jan 2019 11:46PM

Quote:I also burned in parts of the background to make it tonally more even.

Oops! Looking at the uploaded mod, I could have made a better job of that bit.BlushBlushBlush ...But you get the idea... I hope.
pottie 9 2 South Africa
23 Jan 2019 7:14AM
WOW I'm overwhelmed with the responds... Thank you all, for the wonderful mods... Alan and Keith for your time and comments...
Carmen. thanks for you input... much appreciated!
dudler Plus
18 1.7k 1885 England
23 Jan 2019 9:34AM
There's only one thing I'd have done differently, and that's not use flash. I hadn't spotted the effect, but once I knew flash was involved I saw the reflections in the glass.

I love it as it stands, with the background dimly visible, bracket included. I tend to think that a suggestion of a context, of reality, is always good. Transcendent beauty in an everyday setting.

I'd predict a good few votes in the main gallery, if you repost it there.
pottie 9 2 South Africa
23 Jan 2019 1:06PM
Dudler, Thanks for your input, i really value your opinion..

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