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Hello Bernard, welcome to ePHOTOzine, I see that you joined the site yesterday. I hope you will enjoy it here, it's a very friendly place.
When you uploaded you ticked the critique button. I hope you realise that this disables votes and awards! You will have seen a pop-up message, and also received a personal message from the Critique Team, asking for various information to be included. The main thing is the Exif, the camera's settings, and we have that. But we would also like to know what sort of advice you are looking for. On camera technique? Composition / aesthetics? Image processing? What are you hoping to achieve photographically? And how do you feel about the image, does it satisfy you?
So it would be good to hear more from you. If you want to reply in French I can translate - the important thing is to establish a conversation.
You have a very nice camera - I know because I have recently acquired one of these. You have used it well here. Just one more question though - we are not seeing the mode used - auto? program? manual? aperture priority? shutter priority? I assume that you were not using a tripod, and I would like to see a slightly faster shutter speed, for various reasons. This is, I think the non-VR lens, as is mine, so you need to be careful to avoid camera-shake. But in general the settings look sensible, with one reservation...
The composition is interesting, with those blades of grass creating attractive curves. I think I might have moved or simplified them though - F/8 has given you reasonable depth of field, profondeur de champ, but remember that you only get half the depth in front of where you focus, compared with behind. So while the centre of the flower is well in focus, the grass that crosses it is soft, which is a bit distracting. There's a French language article here that you may find useful to read.
Beware also of trying to focus that lens too close to the subject, I think you may perhaps have been too close for that blade of grass.
By ticking for critique you authorise members to download the image in order to examine it and work on it. I am going to upload a modification, you will find it under the blue Modifications button below your upload. I made a few tweaks to light, but mainly I simplified the grasses and cropped for a tauter effect to contain the lines.
Please let us know if this is any help. I hope we shall see more from you.
Moira
When you uploaded you ticked the critique button. I hope you realise that this disables votes and awards! You will have seen a pop-up message, and also received a personal message from the Critique Team, asking for various information to be included. The main thing is the Exif, the camera's settings, and we have that. But we would also like to know what sort of advice you are looking for. On camera technique? Composition / aesthetics? Image processing? What are you hoping to achieve photographically? And how do you feel about the image, does it satisfy you?
So it would be good to hear more from you. If you want to reply in French I can translate - the important thing is to establish a conversation.
You have a very nice camera - I know because I have recently acquired one of these. You have used it well here. Just one more question though - we are not seeing the mode used - auto? program? manual? aperture priority? shutter priority? I assume that you were not using a tripod, and I would like to see a slightly faster shutter speed, for various reasons. This is, I think the non-VR lens, as is mine, so you need to be careful to avoid camera-shake. But in general the settings look sensible, with one reservation...
The composition is interesting, with those blades of grass creating attractive curves. I think I might have moved or simplified them though - F/8 has given you reasonable depth of field, profondeur de champ, but remember that you only get half the depth in front of where you focus, compared with behind. So while the centre of the flower is well in focus, the grass that crosses it is soft, which is a bit distracting. There's a French language article here that you may find useful to read.
Beware also of trying to focus that lens too close to the subject, I think you may perhaps have been too close for that blade of grass.
By ticking for critique you authorise members to download the image in order to examine it and work on it. I am going to upload a modification, you will find it under the blue Modifications button below your upload. I made a few tweaks to light, but mainly I simplified the grasses and cropped for a tauter effect to contain the lines.
Please let us know if this is any help. I hope we shall see more from you.
Moira
Hi Bernard and welcome to ePz.
I order to offer critique the areas you need help with, we do need some of the questions Moira, above, has asked.
I don't think the use of your flash has done you any favours here, flower petals are so very reflective and some of the petals have suffered overexposure as a consequence.
There is quite significant movement on the blade of grass directly in front of the flower, with a little careful gardening that could have been removed from the frame before you pressed the shutter.
I have done small modification, cropped the frame from the right, attempted to reduce some of the highlights on the petals and applied a little brightening to some of the darker petals.
Would be great to hear from you with a little more information and your thoughts on the critique/modifications we have offered so far.
I order to offer critique the areas you need help with, we do need some of the questions Moira, above, has asked.
I don't think the use of your flash has done you any favours here, flower petals are so very reflective and some of the petals have suffered overexposure as a consequence.
There is quite significant movement on the blade of grass directly in front of the flower, with a little careful gardening that could have been removed from the frame before you pressed the shutter.
I have done small modification, cropped the frame from the right, attempted to reduce some of the highlights on the petals and applied a little brightening to some of the darker petals.
Would be great to hear from you with a little more information and your thoughts on the critique/modifications we have offered so far.
Welcome from me too Bernard.
We would like to know more as requested above.
It's an attractive flower but a pity about the blades of grass. These could be movd without damaging any vegetation nd put back to their original position after the shot.
I'm guessing, from seing the lens used and knowing the flower, that this is cropped down from the originl which would ccount for some softness.
We look forward to hearing more from you.
We would like to know more as requested above.
It's an attractive flower but a pity about the blades of grass. These could be movd without damaging any vegetation nd put back to their original position after the shot.
I'm guessing, from seing the lens used and knowing the flower, that this is cropped down from the originl which would ccount for some softness.
We look forward to hearing more from you.
And welcome from me, too, Bernard.
As others have said, we need to know a bit more if we're going to provide useful critique, rather than random comments... I think you've done a bit of editing of this image, and it would be useful to know what you did - and also to have an unprocessed version to compare and work on. You can upload it as your own modification.
We think of dandelions as weeds, but they are rather beautiful...
As others have said, we need to know a bit more if we're going to provide useful critique, rather than random comments... I think you've done a bit of editing of this image, and it would be useful to know what you did - and also to have an unprocessed version to compare and work on. You can upload it as your own modification.
We think of dandelions as weeds, but they are rather beautiful...
Welcome to EPZ, Bernard, and its Critique Gallery.
Whilst waiting for the response to questions above, I have done a modification.
I like the light in the centre of the dandelion, and also the curly leaves, which seem to be carressing the flower. However, as has been said, they are blurred, and that's a shame. A few leaves make a flower picture more interesting, but are better placed behind your chosen bloom, not in front. A little judicious gardening would have helped here.
I added some canvas around the flower to give it a bit more breathing space, then cropped the bottom, turned the flower clockwise and mirrored it because I preferred the composition. To me, it is now looking into the right side of the frame and the leaves are curling in that direction too, so I left a bit more space on that side.
I ended up with a square format.
I brightened the image a bit, tidied the background just a touch, and sharpened.
Pamela.
Whilst waiting for the response to questions above, I have done a modification.
I like the light in the centre of the dandelion, and also the curly leaves, which seem to be carressing the flower. However, as has been said, they are blurred, and that's a shame. A few leaves make a flower picture more interesting, but are better placed behind your chosen bloom, not in front. A little judicious gardening would have helped here.
I added some canvas around the flower to give it a bit more breathing space, then cropped the bottom, turned the flower clockwise and mirrored it because I preferred the composition. To me, it is now looking into the right side of the frame and the leaves are curling in that direction too, so I left a bit more space on that side.
I ended up with a square format.
I brightened the image a bit, tidied the background just a touch, and sharpened.
Pamela.
Thank you for the comments on the dandelion that will make me move forward on the photo! This is the first photo site where I receive so many comments that make me move forward and it's a pleasure.
mrswoolybill:
I checked the critical button, but I made a mistake, it's okay, I'm on your site now I'll know!
thank you for your comments and your support I will try to apply the best I can I'm just an old amateur photographer and sometimes digital photography and not very easy!
hunting:
ok for the flash I shouldn't have, thank you for modifying and again thank you for your help on the photo.
Dark Lord:
For the blade of grass I thought it would give a style? thanks for the flower.
dudler:
yes too much editing I will take the raw file I think and put some of your comments in place. thank you also for your comment.
banehawi:
yes i used luminar 4 but i think i will use affinity photo luminar and very gadget i think !
pamelajean:
Mer for your encargoes and positive criticism and for your modifications.
Nice for all your comments, I discover your site again and I hope to be a good student among you! dsl for my English mistakes it's google I can't write in English
too old .
mrswoolybill:
I checked the critical button, but I made a mistake, it's okay, I'm on your site now I'll know!
thank you for your comments and your support I will try to apply the best I can I'm just an old amateur photographer and sometimes digital photography and not very easy!
hunting:
ok for the flash I shouldn't have, thank you for modifying and again thank you for your help on the photo.
Dark Lord:
For the blade of grass I thought it would give a style? thanks for the flower.
dudler:
yes too much editing I will take the raw file I think and put some of your comments in place. thank you also for your comment.
banehawi:
yes i used luminar 4 but i think i will use affinity photo luminar and very gadget i think !
pamelajean:
Mer for your encargoes and positive criticism and for your modifications.
Nice for all your comments, I discover your site again and I hope to be a good student among you! dsl for my English mistakes it's google I can't write in English
too old .
Thanks for your reply, Google Translate has served you well (it has improved a lot over the years!). It's always good when we hear back from people.
You ticked for critique by mistake, but it is the way to get feedback, advice, serious suggestions here, so I hope that we may see more from you in the Critique Gallery. Enjoy your photography, that's what matters!
One old photographer to another...
Moira
You ticked for critique by mistake, but it is the way to get feedback, advice, serious suggestions here, so I hope that we may see more from you in the Critique Gallery. Enjoy your photography, that's what matters!
One old photographer to another...
Moira
Thank you for such a careful and detailed response, Bernard!
The important thing is a conversation, even if the language is not perfect. We are always grateful for a response, particularly when it is so detailed. Thanks again!
Google:
Merci pour cette réponse si attentive et détaillée, Bernard!
L'important est une conversation, même si la langue n'est pas parfaite. Nous sommes toujours reconnaissants pour une réponse, en particulier lorsqu'elle est si détaillée. Merci encore!
J'espère que Google m'a servi de bienvenue.
The important thing is a conversation, even if the language is not perfect. We are always grateful for a response, particularly when it is so detailed. Thanks again!
Google:
Merci pour cette réponse si attentive et détaillée, Bernard!
L'important est une conversation, même si la langue n'est pas parfaite. Nous sommes toujours reconnaissants pour une réponse, en particulier lorsqu'elle est si détaillée. Merci encore!
J'espère que Google m'a servi de bienvenue.
