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des fleurs

By matkaspa
des fleurs sur mon meuble

Tags: Flower Flowers and plants Flowers and plants X100F Fuji x100f

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BobbyMS Plus
3 4 1
7 May 2019 9:19PM
Like the way the flowers relate to the picture and to the frame itself.
mrswoolybill Plus
14 2.4k 2295 United Kingdom
7 May 2019 9:37PM
Hello again. I'll just post a brief comment here, with initial thoughts on opening this.

I like what you have attempted here, Still Life in context. My main reservation is over the use of portrait format which draws the eye up and down. The implied direction of movement here seems to me to be horizontal, from the light source on the left through the flowers to the picture on the wall, and it's the spatial relationship between flowers and picture that dominates. So the chest of drawers, lovely as it is, is a distraction, it drags the eye away from the real story.

For the same reason I wish those fallen petals were a little bit further right.

The shadow bottom left also distracts. I wonder if you tried any landscape format compositions?

I shall try a very quick modification...

Further thoughts tomorrow...
Moira
mrswoolybill Plus
14 2.4k 2295 United Kingdom
7 May 2019 9:49PM
I've uploaded a very quick modification, it's really just playing with crop and placement, it's for comparison so I'd be interested in your thoughts. For me it flows better.

I also skewed the bottom left corner down slightly as the top of the chest of drawers is not quite level, and I added a wee bit of exposure as this looks slightly underexposed.

A dark Old Masters effect could also work, but it needs the bright highlights to bring the flowers to life.
capto Plus
8 6.4k 21 United Kingdom
7 May 2019 11:01PM
I like simple, so have done a mod to keep the vase of flowers as the point of interest.
ivor
capto Plus
8 6.4k 21 United Kingdom
7 May 2019 11:08PM
I had to re upload the mod with an sRGB profile to get the result I had on my screen.
pablophotographer 9 1.7k 390
8 May 2019 12:41AM
Fresh as fifties!
I like it very much matkaspa. It is not just beautiful, it is absolutely elegant in a very Swiss way.

Framing is spot on and exactly shot as in the description, which reads "The flowers on my table".

Which has a MAJOR implication: The table (or chest of drawers) MUST REMAIN IN THE FRAME. This is a furniture to be proud of! Elegant. Functional. Clean. Spotless. The owner of the house wants it in the picture because he is proud of it. Therefore I should leave it there; whole, intact, immaculate. Even if it does not fit in the frame and it is chopped. It is chopped precisely so as it fits the frame of the old posters on the top right. Don't you see? It works like a Swiss Army knife. All the parts fit in place.

As I would leave the flowers and the poster intact, some may wonder if I will or i would change something. And indeed I would. But not as in form or frame shape or orientation.

I would change the colour of the lacquer of the poster frame to the colour of the table and I would replace the triangular shadow on the left bottom with the colour of the wall near it. It helps making the furniture even more contrasting to the wall. Even more shiny. Even more beautiful. Then you put a vase off and you think: "Ah, home sweet home in Alps".

Bravo!
(Applauds)
pablophotographer

8 May 2019 8:24AM
I think the portrait format works well here, although I do think the visual weight of the chest of drawers is rather too heavy... it tends to draw a little too much attention to itself, and being a little underexposed doesn't help matters either. Perhaps it would have been better if the chest had been in a lighter wood, such as pine, but you could hardly do anything about that!

I like the way the formal lines of the drawers and the picture frame relate to each other, and how that formality emphasizes the delightfully unruly flower arrangement. I also like how the visual weight of the three elements progresses up through the frame... the heaviest at the bottom, progressing to the lightest at the top. That really gives balance and stability, and rather than being a disruptive element in the middle of hat cool formality, to my eye the flower arrangement somehow pulls everything together, and that further emphasizes its importance.

I even like the shadow.

Alan
banehawi Plus
16 2.3k 4177 Canada
8 May 2019 12:58PM
I like this in general.

I do agree that the bottom cabinet adds a little too much weight, both in size and darkness.

I would reduce the side with a crop while retaining the three squares that echo the picture, ;lighten shadows quite a lot and reduce contrast for a softer look.


Ive uploaded mod 4 with this done.


regards



Willie
8 May 2019 7:56PM
Hello everybody! Thanks a lot for your messages and critiques! I don’t try the landscape format, probably better..? Probaly. Yes this picture is to « dark » bad exposure.
Thanks for your modifications. And sorry for my bad english 😬.

Mat
mrswoolybill Plus
14 2.4k 2295 United Kingdom
8 May 2019 9:19PM
Thanks for your feedback, Mat. It helps us, if we know that someone understands what we type and that we are giving you ideas to think about.
Moira

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