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Hi Paul and welcome to the Critique Gallery.
I see you have been on the site for some time but this is your first upload.
In the Critique Gallery we do like lots of information, you would have had a prompt upon upload to give us as much info as possible.
What in particular would you like critique on....composition, lighting, colour,exposure etc, etc, there is lots for us to consider when trying to be constructive and we wouldn't like to be batting in the dark, that would not help us to help you.
Quote:2 Jul 2021 12:00am
Think you might want to set the right date and time on your camera
Generally, without further information from you, this is ok.
I would have liked to have seen a much lower POV and perhaps a shallower DOF which would have given you more of the fruit and honey and less of the table, which I find a bit overpowering tbh.
I did a very basic mod.
Blurred the table somewhat and reduced the reds there.
Reduced the blues on the white plate.
Cropped.
Removed the writing on the spoon.
Do please join in the conversation and let us know a little more.
I see you have been on the site for some time but this is your first upload.
In the Critique Gallery we do like lots of information, you would have had a prompt upon upload to give us as much info as possible.
What in particular would you like critique on....composition, lighting, colour,exposure etc, etc, there is lots for us to consider when trying to be constructive and we wouldn't like to be batting in the dark, that would not help us to help you.
Quote:2 Jul 2021 12:00am
Think you might want to set the right date and time on your camera
Generally, without further information from you, this is ok.
I would have liked to have seen a much lower POV and perhaps a shallower DOF which would have given you more of the fruit and honey and less of the table, which I find a bit overpowering tbh.
I did a very basic mod.
Blurred the table somewhat and reduced the reds there.
Reduced the blues on the white plate.
Cropped.
Removed the writing on the spoon.
Do please join in the conversation and let us know a little more.
Welcome from me too, I hope you'll find the Critique Gallery useful!
Janet (chase, above) is the specialist for Still Life. I'll just add to her excellent comment - definitely a lower pov. It would make better use of the mound of cream and strawberries, and the trickle of honey.
And I think I would go for a matt black table top and background, for clean simplicity and contrast.
I do like the plate. A square white plate can also be very effective for setting off a circular arrangement like this.
Moira
Janet (chase, above) is the specialist for Still Life. I'll just add to her excellent comment - definitely a lower pov. It would make better use of the mound of cream and strawberries, and the trickle of honey.
And I think I would go for a matt black table top and background, for clean simplicity and contrast.
I do like the plate. A square white plate can also be very effective for setting off a circular arrangement like this.
Moira
For me the table to competes for attention, so use something plain, and not coloured brightly. the plate of berries has to be the focus of attention here.
I would rotate it to get the honey stream vertical.
Brighten the fruit, reduce highlights on the plate to retrieve more detail, blur all except the spoon and fruit.
I also altered perspective as if its shot from a slightly lower position.
Mod uploaded.
Regards
Willie
I would rotate it to get the honey stream vertical.
Brighten the fruit, reduce highlights on the plate to retrieve more detail, blur all except the spoon and fruit.
I also altered perspective as if its shot from a slightly lower position.
Mod uploaded.
Regards
Willie
Welcome to the Critique Gallery, Paul.
You have a nice selection of mergingue and fruit, and they look good set upon a white plate, but the red of the table is extremely distracting. Something more neutral would be better, nothing patterned, though a bit of texture would be fine.
Including the spoon and honey was a good idea, it brings the image to life, and you captured that honey running off the spoon very well.
You have good light on your dessert and good exposure on the white plate. It's nicely done.
Pamela.
You have a nice selection of mergingue and fruit, and they look good set upon a white plate, but the red of the table is extremely distracting. Something more neutral would be better, nothing patterned, though a bit of texture would be fine.
Including the spoon and honey was a good idea, it brings the image to life, and you captured that honey running off the spoon very well.
You have good light on your dessert and good exposure on the white plate. It's nicely done.
Pamela.
Thanks for the critique not my thing or passion kind of shows really, only i photographed because it was a subject needed for camera club ,pov is required to be eye level and should of used black or dark material for back drop points taken although new as much ,only just purchased theses back drops so really wanted to give them a try .The plamp i used for holding the spoon was perfect probably use flash next time instead of led lighting ,i really should of blocked out daylight also .Always good to hear opinions and critique if only to satisfy your own thoughts.
Thanks for the feedback, it's always good to hear back from people!
Quote:pov is required to be eye level
That's a strange requirement for a competition.... You could always raise the height of the subject and still use your own eye level...
Quote:pov is required to be eye level
That's a strange requirement for a competition.... You could always raise the height of the subject and still use your own eye level...
Camera clubs are strange we have a record competition also, which is equally as trying in the ,photographic sense everything must look as though it could be used to scale a be replicated ,funny things camera clubs , the idea is to get togs to try different aspects and genres etc
Quote:pov is required to be eye level no this not a requirement of the competition, just a advisory on the critique on this subject by janet
I thought you meant that the camera had to be at standing eye level, above the table top! Thanks for the clarification - I'm with Janet, the camera needs to be nearer to the table level.
A late welcome from me too.
It's good to see some food photography on the site, we don't get much of it. I think you've capture this well, but there are a few pointsI'll make.
First, I like the texture of the tabletop background but it's a little overpowering. It need to play second fiddle to the food. So in my mod I reduced the Saturation and adjusted the Hue for a more neutral looking wood. It wa easy to make a feathered selection of that area, a bonus.
Second, and if the plate isn't a neutral white then the meringue should be, I used the colour picker on that to set the White Balance. The plate on the original has a slight orange tinge. I'm not sure if that's being picked up from the strong background. Generally food photography relies on as accurate a colour as possible.
Third, a small point, a little less spoon, the lenght of th handle isn't important, the honey coming off is and I'd say you've got that just about spot on.
It's good to see some food photography on the site, we don't get much of it. I think you've capture this well, but there are a few pointsI'll make.
First, I like the texture of the tabletop background but it's a little overpowering. It need to play second fiddle to the food. So in my mod I reduced the Saturation and adjusted the Hue for a more neutral looking wood. It wa easy to make a feathered selection of that area, a bonus.
Second, and if the plate isn't a neutral white then the meringue should be, I used the colour picker on that to set the White Balance. The plate on the original has a slight orange tinge. I'm not sure if that's being picked up from the strong background. Generally food photography relies on as accurate a colour as possible.
Third, a small point, a little less spoon, the lenght of th handle isn't important, the honey coming off is and I'd say you've got that just about spot on.
Somehow I missed this two days ago - so a very late welcome from me, Paul.
The more info you give us up front, the better we can do with helpful comments. That you don't like still life and did this for a club competition is really important! As is whether you have time to reshoot before you submit the entry.
I think a lower viewpoint would make the table far less intrusive... And for me the white balance is crucial: food photography makes me think of sparkling white plates. So I'd make it so... And, oddly, I did some closeups of dying roses on a white plate yesterday: must edit them and decide what to do with them!
I note that you used a 7R III for this - I love mine. For shots like this, the tilting screen makes plain sailing of getting the camera level with the subject. I'm lucky enough to have a Sigma 105mm macro lens that I bought a dozen years ago or more: however, the adaptor from Alpha to E-mount makes AF rather poor, and it's quite hard work to focus manually, which is what this sort of subject needs. The facility to magnify any part of the subject for manual focus is a delightful bonus of the Alphas: I've got one of the function buttons behind the shutter release set to bring up the focus area.
The more info you give us up front, the better we can do with helpful comments. That you don't like still life and did this for a club competition is really important! As is whether you have time to reshoot before you submit the entry.
I think a lower viewpoint would make the table far less intrusive... And for me the white balance is crucial: food photography makes me think of sparkling white plates. So I'd make it so... And, oddly, I did some closeups of dying roses on a white plate yesterday: must edit them and decide what to do with them!
I note that you used a 7R III for this - I love mine. For shots like this, the tilting screen makes plain sailing of getting the camera level with the subject. I'm lucky enough to have a Sigma 105mm macro lens that I bought a dozen years ago or more: however, the adaptor from Alpha to E-mount makes AF rather poor, and it's quite hard work to focus manually, which is what this sort of subject needs. The facility to magnify any part of the subject for manual focus is a delightful bonus of the Alphas: I've got one of the function buttons behind the shutter release set to bring up the focus area.
