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Desert Storm Coming

By BKester
Henderson, NV, south of Las Vegas as a summer storm built it's fury. Date was May 7, 2016. Crossing a walk bridge over a flood wash channel, water had already started coming off the mountains. Shot with an iPhone 6Plus while walking home......briskly!

Tags: Photo journalism Stormy skies

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mrswoolybill Plus
12 1.5k 2066 United Kingdom
10 Aug 2019 8:42PM
Hi Bruce, welcome to the Critique Gallery, you've been on the site since last year but I think this is the first time that you have ticked the critique box. I hope it was intended!

It has the effect of disabling votes and awards but inviting more in-depth comment. Is there anything in particular that you want advice on? How do you feel about the image? Does it take you back to the experience?

Various thoughts in random order -

This looks to be quite heavily processed, that may have happened in the iPhone. Do you have a less processed version that you can upload for comparison? (You can add it as a modification, click on the blue Modifications button, then on Upload a modification.) I'm looking in particular at the distant mountain which looks over-sharpened...

There are strong elements, including the puddle and the diagonal lines, but the overall effect is a bit confusing. My eye doesn't really know where to settle.

And there is a 50/50 split between land and sky. That can work but it's difficult, it means that the two are competing for attention. Generally it's better if one takes obvious priority.

I've uploaded a modification, you'll find it below that blue button. I cropped to a standard 3 x 2 landscape, taking diagonals directly into the two bottom corners and moving the horizon to around 1/3 down from the top of the frame. Just suggestions, see what you think. I find it easier to relate to.
Moira

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banehawi Plus
15 2.1k 4020 Canada
10 Aug 2019 9:16PM
Tried a slightly painted look. Would also like to know if this is an in camera effect?
banehawl: This is my first back-and-forth with critiquing. I'm not quite sure how it works at this point. To my eye, the coloration is too over done in your image. It took the orange in the gravel too deep. Also, the overall darkness is now getting too dramatic. All that said, I appreciate any input.
BKester
11 Aug 2019 7:37AM
Serious weather, and an interesting image. As Moira has hinted, it would be good to know how you feel about it yourself.

The way I see it it's all about the storm, that narrow strip across the middle... the pool of water and the reflection in it is interesting and rather beautiful, but I personally find it detracts a little from the main business; I feel that it's too strong in the image... it almost forces my eye to make a choice. It's a bit confusing.

I think Moira's crop makes the best of the sky, but I'm going to offer an alternative view losing most of that puddle. I don't know how you feel about b&w, but I'll upload a mono conversion too. So that's two from me for the price of one. Special offer, one day only.Wink

Alan
mrswoolybill Plus
12 1.5k 2066 United Kingdom
11 Aug 2019 7:40AM

Quote:This is my first back-and-forth with critiquing. I'm not quite sure how it works at this point.


Have a look at the Critique Gallery home page , which gives some advice and information.

People give their honest, considered opinions, make suggestions. It works best if we get a dialogue going, if uploaders for critique give Exif data, say how they feel about their work, how they see it, what they want to achieve; ask questions; but also answer them. And a question here is how you achieved the result, whether it was it an in-camera effect or the result of subsequent post-processing?
Regards,
Moira
mrswoolybill Plus
12 1.5k 2066 United Kingdom
11 Aug 2019 8:02AM
Alan was modifying at the same time as I was typing, his modification really illustrates an important point - the Critique Gallery is about seeing your image through other people's eyes.

We look at both the technical side, the taking and making, and also the aesthetic side, how an image communicates. That's what composition is about, inviting the viewer in, giving a route for them to explore. I would suggest that one area to think about is how you divide the frame, how you balance different areas, how you give structure. It's interesting that Alan made the same point as I did, that the image is confusing, the eye doesn't know where it is supposed to go.

Another member will probably describe the Rule of Thirds. If you don't know about it, Google it... It is a means of constructing a harmonious, satisfying composition. It isn't the only way, and there's a lot of fun to be had from breaking it. But it's important I think to consider such matters.

I often recommend an excellent book, The Photographer's Eye, by Michael Freeman, which analyses how the eye follows a route through an image, why some compositions communicate better than others.

So, in short, there are two aspects here. Processing and composition.
Moira
dudler Plus
16 895 1504 England
12 Aug 2019 10:00AM
I'm a bit late at the party...

Certainly, the Critique Gallery works best if it's a dialogue, and you can kick it off when you post by saying what you are pleased with and what you'd like a bit different...

It's also really useful if you can say somethign about processing - and, perferably, show us an unprocessed version for comparison.

This has immense novelty value for most of hte Critique Team - we don't have many desert storms in England! Never underestimate how wonderful the everyday can seem to people who live in a different place...

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