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Dominion Theatre 'Gatsby Glamour' Photo Shoot - Lucy

By tonyjonesphotos    
Here is another of my photos from the 'Gatsby Glamour' photo shoot.

This photo was converted to B&W to try and capture the essence of the film, 'The Artist'. Hope it achieved that!

Any critique is welcomed.

Tags: Black and white Portraits and people Flash and lighting

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This photo is here for critique. Please only comment constructively and with suggestions on how to improve it.

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mikejmb 9 2 United Kingdom
13 Sep 2012 11:53AM
Beautiful image and perfect in Black & White.

Mike

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NEWMANP 9 1.6k 574 United Kingdom
13 Sep 2012 12:42PM
I like this one a lot, its my sort of portrait, nice eyes and expression and a fresh tight viewpoint.

its a good conversion too. just a couple of tiny things , the highlight on the left is a tad bright and id have liked to see the rest of the necklace (if it was a short one). maybe a highlight to many in the eyes but these are all tiny things on a super portrait

Phil
alistairfarrugia 5 164 88 Malta
13 Sep 2012 1:02PM
First off - it's a nice picture that shows the relative calm and confidence of the bride/model that posed in the shot. I like that. Now for the critique.

I would maybe crop this a bit tigher to try place the eyes in the top-right crossing point (of rule of thirds lines). This would then show some empty space in the picture only to the left of the face, which is where the model seems to be looking at. I think placing the face bang in the middle detracts a bit from the image's quality, artistically speaking.

Moreover, and if possible, try and avoid a background with very clear hard lines, both vertically and horizontally. Was this taken in a relatively dark church or hall with long windows? I can see a number of reflections in the model's eyes, and her pupils are wide-open (typical of a dark environment).

There is some loss in detail in the hair, and if you want to go for "The Artist" style, that detail is best recovered, as details in the model's hairstyle are critical visual elements that should help elicit an association to 1920s/1930s attire and hairstyles. Can you recover some details from the shadows using your RAW file?

I uploaded a modification using the very basic Microsoft Office Picture Manager. Added a sepia-ish tone to it to distinguish it from the original upload a bit more, whilst still retaining the "old-look" feel.
banehawi Plus
13 1.6k 3722 Canada
13 Sep 2012 2:40PM
Beautiful, very classy.


Alistairs crop will work if you are printing 10 x 8



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Hi Alaister & Phil,

Many thanks for the critique.

The photo shoot was in the Dominion Theatre in London and this has a 1920's foyer where this shoot was taken. If you know the theatre, this shoot was taken on the balcony over the central foyer which was quite dark and was lit with a SB900 flash to camera left approx. 2' above model and diffused with a shoot through umbrella.

I know what you mean about placement in the rule of thirds and a closer crop may be better but personally, I liked the verticals to the rear as it creates some extra interest and as the shot was on a very low f-number, this would be blurred.

There is another shot in my portfolio showing Jenilee, another model, which gives you an idea of the venue and also, of the colour cast being generated by the walls and ceiling! Golden is an understatement!

I like the sepia tone that you used but I rarely use toning (personal choice!) although this image would indeed suit a muted tone. Think I might just send this one back to Lightroom at some point!! Smile

Phil, the highlights in the eyes were caused by 1 flash and 2 x foyer lights which the flash accentuated!

\i think I could have tidied up the loose hair strands too with more time!
paulbroad 10 123 1177 United Kingdom
13 Sep 2012 3:39PM
This is a fine well produced image. I would simply leave it alone and leave the copyright off in a critique situation.

Paul
13 Sep 2012 4:37PM
Beautiful x
Philo 7 99 83 England
13 Sep 2012 4:50PM
A superb portrait that works great in mono.
I wonder if the loss in hair detail is due to your conversion, maybe you could check the original colour. Could you have selected a faster shutter speed to reduce the ambient light in the background; this may have dealt with those bright highlights either side of her head. I think I would clone out the extra catchlights.
Phil
miptog 11 3.5k 61 United Kingdom
13 Sep 2012 10:18PM
Like the shot a lot. May try and soften or clone out the dark patches on the diagonal 1/3 from the bottom of the frame.
Jestertheclown 8 7.6k 252 England
14 Sep 2012 9:57AM
As Paul has said, leave it alone.
Focus_Man 7 481 631 United Kingdom
15 Sep 2012 11:00AM
This is a nice picture, but where critique is concerned, like Jester and Paul before him, I would lose the logo.

Frank

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