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FIRST WITH LIGHTS

By bigpappapumps
THIS IS SYD & JODIE
AND MY FIRST ATTEMPT AT LIGHTING AND PORTRAITS
WOULD LOVE FEED BACK AND DONT WORRY ABOUT BEING GENTLE IM HERE TO LEARN!!!

Tags: Black and white Portraits and people Flash and lighting Bw portraits

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This photo is here for critique. Please only comment constructively and with suggestions on how to improve it.

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digicammad 12 22.0k 37 United Kingdom
25 Aug 2008 6:33PM
In general this isn't bad for a first attempt. However there are a few things to look for.

- The lighting is a little harsh on the blonde girl's forehead. It looks like the light was a little to the right, pointed more at her than the girl with dark hair. Try turning the power down a touch.

- You caught a nice shine on the dark hair, but you need the same shot with the eyes properly open.

- The top of the dark haired girls arm is just visible and is distracting. There also seems to be an uneven dark line at the bottom, as if the light is not getting down that far.

HTH

Ian

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55jase Plus
10 187 2 United Kingdom
25 Aug 2008 6:53PM
I agree with above but think you have the light pretty much spot on with the girl on the right just a shame there's no eye contact.
jase
julesm Plus
12 1.7k 7 United Kingdom
25 Aug 2008 8:10PM
Agree with all the above and would liek to add that it looks like youve caught the brunette blinking. I find if I get a blinker I usually start to count to 3 before taking the pic, so they can get all the blinks out of the way.

Jules
25 Aug 2008 8:34PM
THANX FOR THE COMMENTS,FORGOT TO MENTION THE DARK ONE HAS A PROBLEM WITH LAZY EYES AND I DIDNT QUITE KNOW HOW TO APPROCH THE SHOOT YOU KNOW BEING SENSATIVE TO THE PROB WITHOUT ACTUALY POINTIN IT OUT . LATER ON I GOT HER TO LEAN BACK AGAINST HER BOYFRIEND EXTENDING HER ARM UP BEHIND HIS HEAD AND LOOKIN DOWN THAT WORKED BETTER . BUT THIS WAS THE FIRST IV EVER MANAGED TO RESIZE SO I PROB DIDNT PICK THE BEST OF THE SHOOT.THANX AGAIN FOR THE COMMENTS MUCH APPRICIATED
digicammad 12 22.0k 37 United Kingdom
25 Aug 2008 9:12PM
Just a quick note. You could do with turning off your caps lock as many people on the internet interpret capital letters as shouting.

Ian
julesm Plus
12 1.7k 7 United Kingdom
25 Aug 2008 9:39PM
Rather than get her to look down you coudl try to get her to look up at the camera as this generally opens the eyes, always worth a try.

Jules
25 Aug 2008 9:51PM
Sorry just noticed the caps lock Ian cheers
To be honest Jules I was panicin a bit when i noticed she had a problem. As far as I can remember the shot was taken at about 200 iso F8 with a shutter speed about 200. the lights were set at about 1/4 power and about 6 feet away. Dont suppose there any magical formula to gettin it right is there???
Goggz 8 2.3k 72 Wales
25 Aug 2008 10:07PM

Quote:Dont suppose there any magical formula to gettin it right is there???
It's called chimping... You need to check the image after you've taken it. Wink

I agree with the feedback so far. Keep experimenting and you'll get there. Nice work so far.

CHeers, Goggz
Pete Plus
14 18.8k 96 England
7 Nov 2009 3:03PM
One way to get the eye's open is to ask the girls to close their eyes and then count to three and on three open them. This can work with some people quite well. As long as you don't get the startled look. Doing it a few times on practice shots can make the latter shots more realistic.

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