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Flight formation in the sunset

By driesied  
Another sunset on the beach of Die Strand near Cape Town

Tags: Landscapes Sunset beach Landscape and travel

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Chris_L 6 5.5k United Kingdom
22 Apr 2016 6:32PM
It's a nice photograph, it would be improved, for me, if the sun wasn't bang in the middle. Cropped to the top left of the birds would be a more pleasing composition in my opinion. Would quite like to see what it looks like with more contrast. Will try doing a mod.

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banehawi Plus
16 2.2k 4123 Canada
22 Apr 2016 7:37PM
Exif data is really helpful at this stage. Its still attached to the original file someplace, its not difficult to include it.

Whats missing is MODE, Exposure Comp, time of day, date, focal length. Its best if you leve the exif embedded in the file, and as mentioned, this is select-able in LR, if thats what was used.

Sun off centre would be better as Chris suggested, and best if its composed that way, as the wide view is nice.
More contrast is needed, and Im not sure why you have no black in the image at all apart from the birds! I imagine this is due to post processing, so if you have an unprocessed version you can upload it here as your own modification, it would be useful.

With the Sun in the frame, I expect underexposure with some degree os compenation in post processing, and I dont see any; if you look at the histogram, its a large hump in the middle of the graph that doesnt try to extend to either end even a small amount. It may well be the compressed tonal range you wanted, but Im not sure.

I uploaded a mod also with more space added on the left with some cropped off the right, though I was sure to retain as many people in there as possible.

The lead bird has a halo around it, perhaps evidence of some editing, so that can also be tweaked to be less obvious.


dark_lord Plus
16 2.5k 663 England
22 Apr 2016 7:56PM
I came back to this to do a mod and see Willie's beaten me to the crop I'd have made.
Although the sun is off centre in both modes, mod 2 leaves more space for the birds to 'fly into', so would be my preferred version.

You then have a strong diagonal of people-sun-birds leading the eye through the frame. Thinking about it, I may crop more off the right so the people are nearer the corner, making the most of the diagonal.

23 Apr 2016 7:21AM
Thanks guys, I've got it

dudler Plus
16 1.1k 1645 England
23 Apr 2016 8:57AM
I think all the birds ahve haloes, and this suggests too much sharpening or a rather aggressive filter in processing.

I rather like the central sun, with the whole of the world rotating round it, like hte hands of a clock. However, I can see an asymmetric crop workign well, too: in mine, I've also 'flopped' the picture, so that the movement is to the right - for Western eyes, reading left to right, this suggests looking forwards, to the future, while movement to the left suggests heading to the past. (Though it's possible that much of the effect - not all - is because people keep saying this...)
23 Apr 2016 9:22AM
Thanks dudler, I kinda like your version!
dudler Plus
16 1.1k 1645 England
23 Apr 2016 2:37PM
My pleasure!
24 Apr 2016 9:20PM
I should have looked what others had said and done before uploading my version!
But with agreat image to play with I couldn't wait!

dudler Plus
16 1.1k 1645 England
25 Apr 2016 1:17PM
And it works, Steve. Utterly different mood: sensual, even.

All about options!
TanyaH Plus
17 1.3k 409 United Kingdom
25 Apr 2016 2:53PM
Apologies for the late addition to this one, but I'm trying to catch up with myself!

Apart from the crop, and an increase in contrast, the only other thing I'd do myself is to remove one of the birds so that you've got an odd number. Which kind of nicely echoes the odd number of main people down on the beach below.

You could take it further, even, and completely remove the distant people too, which is what I've also done in my mod.

Just another interpretation Smile


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