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Floral columns

By Dairtreephoto  
Giants causeway flowers and columns. Attempted to focus in middle of flowers and have colour contrast with background

Tags: Flowers Pink Ireland Giants causeway Landscape and travel

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dudler Plus
12 396 796 England
28 Mar 2014 5:52PM
The colour contrast has certainly worked, and you've got some lovely gentle tones in there.

I'm less sure that the focus has worked perfectly: you have focussed on flowers that are behind more prominent heads, and the nearer flowers tend to get in the way, very literally. I think I would have picked the most prominent of the foreground flowers - I'll upload a mod with it marked with a cross.

However, this is a bit of a matter of personal choice, and sometimes the right thing, absolutely, will be to focus on a more distant plane in the composition.

I think a lot of people might have upped the colour saturation, but this is very much a matter of personal taste - soem like the OTT look, and others prefer subtlety. I'll also upload a mod for hte OTT brigade.

I wondered a bit about cropping at the top, and a little at the bottom to get a panoramic format - and then I saw the echo that you've got between the green triangles at top left and bottom right. I think this works best as it stands, with this lovely repetition of similar shapes in opposite corners of the frame.

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paulbroad 8 114 1033 United Kingdom
28 Mar 2014 6:03PM
Your focal plane is minimal, full aperture, and somewhere at the back of the flower patch. The result is very little apparent sharpness anywhere. I'm sorry to say that, for me, it just doesn't work and there is nothing you can do about it with this frame.

If you were to retain full aperture shooting, and I would want to go down a couple of stops, then you needed the front fow of blooms to be sharp, not the back. A tripod or suitable support and f11.

Paul
dark_lord Plus
12 1.8k 318 England
28 Mar 2014 7:25PM
You've thought about your approach and what you wanted. Unfortunately, this hasn't come off as the eye struggles to find something to settle on and wanders around the image.
Focussing on the closer blooms would be more pleasing visually.
I'm also seeeing a portrait format shot where the stems of the thrift echo the tall columns of stone.

Keith
I suspected the focus was a problem and the modification I think highlights that well. Thanks for the feedback everyone.
pamelajean Plus
10 958 1818 United Kingdom
28 Mar 2014 7:46PM
There certainly is a good contrast between the colour of the flowers and the grey of the stones behind them.

Getting down for a low viewpoint and going close to the flowers was a good idea, but I think you were TOO close to the flowers, and have given yourself a focus problem.
My first impression was that it's such a shame that more of the flowers aren't in focus because the idea and the composition work well.

Having looked at your portfolio, I see that you have two other similar images of the thift. In these, you were not so close, and have excellent detail on the flowers, together with a nicely diffused background. They have really worked well, and my favourite of the two is "Unnoticed Beauty".
Your apertures for "Off the Beaten Track" and "Unnoticed Beauty" are not dissimilar to the one you used here, but you were much closer to the flowers.

I really like the way you have filled the frame with your two elements, the flowers and the rocks, This could have been so good, but the out of focus flowers draw my eye and I then fail to see the interest that lies in the whole composition.

Pamela.
mrswoolybill Plus
9 926 1462 United Kingdom
28 Mar 2014 10:01PM
The overall composition, combination of subjects and the use of colour are attractive, but I wonder why you deliberately focused on the middle ground? It rarely works with extremely shallow depth of field. A large expanse of foreground blur acts as a barrier, it prevents the viewer from exploring the frame properly.

Those foreground flowers are in front of our eyes, they are what we as viewers try instinctively to relate to. They need to be tactile, substantial, we need to be able to feel that we could reach out and touch them. That's the problem.

I hope you will revisit the idea and try different approaches.
Moira

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