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FLORENTINA

By kobayashi
Backstage sigarette, Milano Fashion Week

Tags: Fashion Portraits and people

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agean 12 3 United Kingdom
19 Feb 2010 9:26PM
great shot,love it

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miptog Plus
10 3.5k 61 United Kingdom
19 Feb 2010 10:06PM
Like it, just as it is.
Agate 5 1 Scotland
19 Feb 2010 10:07PM
I wouldn't change the composition, it's great the way it is, the green is very painterly. A very atmospheric photo!
vania 5 Italy
19 Feb 2010 11:33PM
Love this... for colours, composition and moment you catch.
A different view on fashion. Perfect for me.
20 Feb 2010 1:04AM
Like the 2nd mod just by cropping the green a little works best to me
Regards charles
20 Feb 2010 9:11AM

Quote:Like the 2nd mod just by cropping the green a little works best to me
Regards charles



my camera makes no square pictures, why cropping when you can compose? isn'it easier and cheaper shooting someway then adjusting someway?
monosodium 6 8 10 United Kingdom
20 Feb 2010 6:36PM

Quote:my camera makes no square pictures, why cropping when you can compose? isn'it easier and cheaper shooting someway then adjusting someway?

That is very much in line with Cartier-Bresson's way of thinking... it is admirable, but comes with the caveat that framing the image has to be 100% exactly perfect in-camera.

From both the mod's presented, some feel you have created 2 images with a clear boundary in your composition and alternatives were presented to make the model more dominant as she should be as she is both good looking and was well captured.


The thing that really changed in my (the 2nd) mod was the *composition* of the image... Compare the position of the model in the mod with the original. Aside from the crop, she has been moved relative to the background and is now clearly breaking the boundary between the two halves of the image... This change of composition could have been done easily when the image was taken but was not the composition presented to us.
banehawi Plus
11 1.3k 3350 Canada
20 Feb 2010 10:17PM
I agree with the in camera composition approach, but I fell if you had moved the camera to the left a little, and up slightly you would have been spot on. This would have moved the model in more from the right edge, and aligned her better with a thirds composition.

The exposure and colour balance are good.

Loaded 2 mods, - one is as stated above, the second is a high contrast B&W which suits this also.

Sharpened a little also, - you need to do this after re sizing for the web.



Regards


Willie

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